My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Majesty in flight."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend I am sorry I am late reviewing this beautiful tanka poem the syllable count is correct and your descriptions are very strong bringing the art work to life I enjoyed well done good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Hello my friend I am sorry I am late reviewing this beautiful tanka poem the syllable count is correct and your descriptions are very strong bringing the art work to life I enjoyed well done good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, once again, Jill. Always nice to have you review my poems. x
Comment from Cleo Belle
Interesting and some of the images are good. Is the word 'fore' correct in the fourth line? When you write 'august' are you thinking of a strong personality, which would fit right with your 'imperial' bird?
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Interesting and some of the images are good. Is the word 'fore' correct in the fourth line? When you write 'august' are you thinking of a strong personality, which would fit right with your 'imperial' bird?
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Yes august was for how strong the eagle is. Fore as in forward I think works well. Thank you for your kind critique. x
Comment from juliedickson55
Nice example of Tanka poetry with a lovely graphic to compliment it.
"you glide so easily fore" is such a beautiful phrase.
Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Nice example of Tanka poetry with a lovely graphic to compliment it.
"you glide so easily fore" is such a beautiful phrase.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks once again for your kind comments. I appreciate any critique x
Comment from Liilia
This Tanka is a beautiful tribute to the eagle (the picture shows a bald eagle, I think) the symbol of America. I love the lines:
you glide so easily fore
august, imperial bird
Words such as majestic, too, help to create the image of a truly special bird with a lot of dignity and a fit symbol of our country.
Beautifully done. Wishes for much luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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This Tanka is a beautiful tribute to the eagle (the picture shows a bald eagle, I think) the symbol of America. I love the lines:
you glide so easily fore
august, imperial bird
Words such as majestic, too, help to create the image of a truly special bird with a lot of dignity and a fit symbol of our country.
Beautifully done. Wishes for much luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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It is such a beautiful bird Liilia. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you. x
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You are very welcome. :)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good syllable count for the tanka contest
Lovely descriptive detail that makes this scene appealing and easy to visualize
ruffles is an excellent verb choice and adds another sense to the mix and life to the scene
I love the final line - great word choices to capture the essence of this bird :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Your poem is in good syllable count for the tanka contest
Lovely descriptive detail that makes this scene appealing and easy to visualize
ruffles is an excellent verb choice and adds another sense to the mix and life to the scene
I love the final line - great word choices to capture the essence of this bird :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you once again for your kind appraisal of my poem Brooke. Much appreciation. x
Comment from TammyGail
Jaq - what a lovely poem you crafted in so few words for the contest - lovely use of imagery as well - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Jaq - what a lovely poem you crafted in so few words for the contest - lovely use of imagery as well - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest it was a pleasure
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you Tammy, always appreciate your kind input.