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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a sad one, Bill. I went to see what the other reviewers thought, and saw Gungalo and Brooke. I miss them both. And I agree with what they said about this one. It was very well done for the amount of words allowed. Again, no winning ribbon!!!!! What was the matter with everyone in those days?? Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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That was a sad one, Bill. I went to see what the other reviewers thought, and saw Gungalo and Brooke. I miss them both. And I agree with what they said about this one. It was very well done for the amount of words allowed. Again, no winning ribbon!!!!! What was the matter with everyone in those days?? Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I probably under-promoted it. Both Brooke and Gungalo reviewed me as reciprocity for reviewing them first.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh my Bill!! How tragic this is and how I nearly came to tears. Such a blessed union and to end in such a horrific fashion.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Oh my Bill!! How tragic this is and how I nearly came to tears. Such a blessed union and to end in such a horrific fashion.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Thank you for reviewing this as well.
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Smiles.
Comment from adewpearl
all the odds that predicted that - drop the second "that"
You keep within the strict word limitations well, and you incorporate the required words into your story without forcing them in. You tell a meaningful, poignant story with sympathetic characters, too - quite a feat in so few words. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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all the odds that predicted that - drop the second "that"
You keep within the strict word limitations well, and you incorporate the required words into your story without forcing them in. You tell a meaningful, poignant story with sympathetic characters, too - quite a feat in so few words. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Brooke, Thank you for taking time to review. Your advice and comments are earnestly sought and gratefully accepted. Bill
Comment from lakeport
it would nice if mankind oould outlaw wars.
A touching story,well written. Thanks for sharing it.God bless you. Lakeport
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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it would nice if mankind oould outlaw wars.
A touching story,well written. Thanks for sharing it.God bless you. Lakeport
Comment Written 29-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
One time when my husband and I lived in Papua New Guinea, he got maleria. We were coming down off a huge mountain in a place that Tarzan (Johnny Weissmuller era) looked like the new kid on the block. Seriously primitive in a way primitive looks new...but as we were coming off that mountain Jimmy literally was struck with a temperature of just around 105...I remember being so scared and having to try and find help in a country where there wasn't much. Luckily, there was an old Black National that ran the motel we stopped at who had the right medicine and overnight the temperature broke and all was ok.
The way you relate that part of your story zipped me back to that time with Jimmy. Excellent story. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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One time when my husband and I lived in Papua New Guinea, he got maleria. We were coming down off a huge mountain in a place that Tarzan (Johnny Weissmuller era) looked like the new kid on the block. Seriously primitive in a way primitive looks new...but as we were coming off that mountain Jimmy literally was struck with a temperature of just around 105...I remember being so scared and having to try and find help in a country where there wasn't much. Luckily, there was an old Black National that ran the motel we stopped at who had the right medicine and overnight the temperature broke and all was ok.
The way you relate that part of your story zipped me back to that time with Jimmy. Excellent story. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 29-May-2012
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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That's got to be a scary memory. Thank you for encouraging me with you review.
Comment from ajdevore
Very different take. The rest of us took a more obvious approach. Good job thinking out of the box. Well structured. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Very different take. The rest of us took a more obvious approach. Good job thinking out of the box. Well structured. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from Charlene0513
A truly agonizing way to go but you have set it up nicely portraying the good times and elation but it concluded with a sorrowful and ominous ending.
Charlene
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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A truly agonizing way to go but you have set it up nicely portraying the good times and elation but it concluded with a sorrowful and ominous ending.
Charlene
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Thank you for your review. It isn't what I'd usually write.
Comment from ennahanid
Your Last Friday 100 Word Story writing prompt entry made me shed a few tears here and I don't believe in crying on any day that ends with a 'y'. Very touching write, great picture choice and I feel sad after this read. I wish you luck in the contest...Dinah
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Your Last Friday 100 Word Story writing prompt entry made me shed a few tears here and I don't believe in crying on any day that ends with a 'y'. Very touching write, great picture choice and I feel sad after this read. I wish you luck in the contest...Dinah
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Thank you for reviewing this. I'm sorry it's depressing.
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I wouldn't say it was depressing...a lot of difference between touching/sad and depressing and I'm a real crier as well LOL