The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Red Dress chapter thirty three"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from wordsfromsue
I can't say bunny bop with these two. Seems more like.... I don't know.... earthy.... the stuff of Barry White lyrics. I kind of miss bunny bop.
Great chapter. 1:00 a.m. here. This reviewer must call it a night.
Muskrat mambo.... that's it....
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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I can't say bunny bop with these two. Seems more like.... I don't know.... earthy.... the stuff of Barry White lyrics. I kind of miss bunny bop.
Great chapter. 1:00 a.m. here. This reviewer must call it a night.
Muskrat mambo.... that's it....
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Okay, what's Muskrat mambo? I love this! Reviews and an education as well! Alexis x
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You have to think Barry White music playing, candles, incense, heavy breathing.... people making like muskrats doing nature's mambo for lovers.... oh yeah....
Comment from dhee khaye
Glad meeting your chapters and following your story again.
I want to give you five stars for this chapter. This is exceptional one. Very encouraging to read. As I read from the beginning I got been interested more and more as I reach the middle. Thank you for sharing this story. God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Glad meeting your chapters and following your story again.
I want to give you five stars for this chapter. This is exceptional one. Very encouraging to read. As I read from the beginning I got been interested more and more as I reach the middle. Thank you for sharing this story. God bless.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, your review is really appreciated. Alexis x
Comment from Tonulak
This romance captures a young woman's fantasy, but also examines the attraction to the "bad boy". I'm curious to see what will happen and if this tentative love affair will work. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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This romance captures a young woman's fantasy, but also examines the attraction to the "bad boy". I'm curious to see what will happen and if this tentative love affair will work. Very nice job.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Is the ring the same one he gave her before or a new one?
Unbeknown[st] to Lisa, their days of planning were hopefully about to pay off.
but there he was[,] showing the world
When their kiss finished[,] Nick held her at arm's length before the musicians broke into a whispered version of ["]Evergreen,["] the music haunting and romantic.
It was as necessary as the air she breathed[.]
He had taken her in his arms again and held her so tightly[no comma instead of "that"] she
What she'd felt for him[don't put a comma in front of a verb "was"] was different from the way she felt now.
If Nick asked, she would tell him, and if he didn't, she would let him believe[] what he wanted to believe.
When Nick got back to London[,] he went shopping.
By the time Nick got back to the hotel[,] he was laden down with boxes,
Because of the age gap[,]
she had always felt
When she opened the silk taffeta robe[,]
she loved it immediately.
As she put it on[,]
she had a flashback to Liam's studio
This was silk and[,] although delicate, not see-through.
When she put on the robe[,]
it also fitted perfectly.
When Lisa came back into the lounge[,]
she recognised the same look in Nick's eyes that she had seen in Alan's when she had walked in wearing the red dress.
Nick just looked at her for a moment [and] then rose from his chair[,] smiling appreciatively, before handing her a red leather box. Inside, nestled in the white
silk[]
lay a gold necklace with small sapphires and diamonds, their radiance catching the light from the candles. Nick took the necklace from the box as
she was still staring at it[] and fastened the catch.
Nick stretched the glass in his hand over to Lisa, and toasted her for making him the happiest man alive[. T]hen, much to Lisa's consternation, picked up his fork and started to eat.
Roberta
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Is the ring the same one he gave her before or a new one?
Unbeknown[st] to Lisa, their days of planning were hopefully about to pay off.
but there he was[,] showing the world
When their kiss finished[,] Nick held her at arm's length before the musicians broke into a whispered version of ["]Evergreen,["] the music haunting and romantic.
It was as necessary as the air she breathed[.]
He had taken her in his arms again and held her so tightly[no comma instead of "that"] she
What she'd felt for him[don't put a comma in front of a verb "was"] was different from the way she felt now.
If Nick asked, she would tell him, and if he didn't, she would let him believe[] what he wanted to believe.
When Nick got back to London[,] he went shopping.
By the time Nick got back to the hotel[,] he was laden down with boxes,
Because of the age gap[,]
she had always felt
When she opened the silk taffeta robe[,]
she loved it immediately.
As she put it on[,]
she had a flashback to Liam's studio
This was silk and[,] although delicate, not see-through.
When she put on the robe[,]
it also fitted perfectly.
When Lisa came back into the lounge[,]
she recognised the same look in Nick's eyes that she had seen in Alan's when she had walked in wearing the red dress.
Nick just looked at her for a moment [and] then rose from his chair[,] smiling appreciatively, before handing her a red leather box. Inside, nestled in the white
silk[]
lay a gold necklace with small sapphires and diamonds, their radiance catching the light from the candles. Nick took the necklace from the box as
she was still staring at it[] and fastened the catch.
Nick stretched the glass in his hand over to Lisa, and toasted her for making him the happiest man alive[. T]hen, much to Lisa's consternation, picked up his fork and started to eat.
Roberta
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Sorry there was so much spag, Roberta. I really appreciate the time this has taken for you to review. Alexis x
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi alexisleech,
So the young lady is confused and now also tempted ...
Good dialogues and good linking narative. I can't see any spag and haven't any suggestions for you.
Patrick
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Hi alexisleech,
So the young lady is confused and now also tempted ...
Good dialogues and good linking narative. I can't see any spag and haven't any suggestions for you.
Patrick
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Patrick. Your lovely review is appreciated. Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello Alexis
This is one of the better chapters in my opinion. Nick has come along with ?????? in mind. But Lisa needs to get back to Alan. I am loving this
Bear
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Hello Alexis
This is one of the better chapters in my opinion. Nick has come along with ?????? in mind. But Lisa needs to get back to Alan. I am loving this
Bear
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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I'm so glad your enjoying it, Bear. Your review is as usual a pleasure to read. Alexis x
Comment from Hareem.S
Another wonderful chapter. I absolutely love this tale, and somehow I don't mind that she is not with Aln anymore, NIck seems like a great guy to me , not confused and still in love with her. Cant wait to read more.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Another wonderful chapter. I absolutely love this tale, and somehow I don't mind that she is not with Aln anymore, NIck seems like a great guy to me , not confused and still in love with her. Cant wait to read more.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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I am delighted that you're enjoying it. Yes, Nick, I'm sure is everyone's dream catch. Thank you so much for reviewing. Alexis x
Comment from Veronica Grace
this is such a romantic and passionate chapter. I must have read another chapter because this sounds familiar. You are a skillful writer. It was and enjoyable read and I found nothing to change or crit.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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this is such a romantic and passionate chapter. I must have read another chapter because this sounds familiar. You are a skillful writer. It was and enjoyable read and I found nothing to change or crit.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your review and comments. Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a really well written
chapter, Alexis... but you never
disappoint. I do
like a little love and
romance....
everyday - two words
Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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This is a really well written
chapter, Alexis... but you never
disappoint. I do
like a little love and
romance....
everyday - two words
Margaret
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely words of encouragement, Margaret. They are really appreciated.
Comment from AlexAX
Wow Alexis, I never thought she would say yes. But she seems to have talked herself into it with the idea of him proving he loves her and that she will love him later. What are you doing Lisa? Pull your head together lol But she does seem to look at him in a different light, let's see how long that lasts. Another great chapter full of description and inner conflict from Lisa and Nick, her over Allan and him over his frustrations ;) I saw just one thing .. What she'd(had) with Alan had been wonderful, but it was over.
So we get to choose what happens next? woohooo haha Alex :)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Wow Alexis, I never thought she would say yes. But she seems to have talked herself into it with the idea of him proving he loves her and that she will love him later. What are you doing Lisa? Pull your head together lol But she does seem to look at him in a different light, let's see how long that lasts. Another great chapter full of description and inner conflict from Lisa and Nick, her over Allan and him over his frustrations ;) I saw just one thing .. What she'd(had) with Alan had been wonderful, but it was over.
So we get to choose what happens next? woohooo haha Alex :)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Poor girl just wants to be loved!(don't we all) Sorry to say it was just what happened that night that I was looking for an opinion on. The book is finished, and Lisa's fate more or less sealed.(unless she really annoys me and I decide to chuck her of a cliff) Now there's an idea.... x