Comment from wordsfromsue

Excellent

Oh my goodness. I nearly passed a brick reading the last few lines!! He's waking up! But not to Lisa. Uh oh. You're awfully good at these literary soap operas. More twists than a Chubby Checker dance marathon! If you know who Chubby Checker is. He came up with the dance "The Twist" way back when.

Now it's getting good!

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012

God! I haven't heard that saying in years. Your reviews always bring such a smile to my face. Thank you! Alexis x

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

OK So alexis
You are making me crazy. Here we have dumb ol Nick, setting himself up, His hopes are set on the roof rather than ground floor. Now you have Carla wearing Lisa's perfume. What's with that? You have me all the way girl
Bear

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012

You are funny! I have a good laugh every time I read one of your reviews. I needed Carla to wear Lisa's perfume so that it would wake Alan out of his coma. If your confused, can you imagine how he felt! Thank you. Alexis x

Comment from Malerie

Excellent

So, Alan's awake. What a surprise he's in for. I can see the wheels turning as Nick makes his way to Lisa and Alan tries to come to terms with Carla being back in his life. Another good chapter; keep writing, I'll keep reading.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

Oh, it's all going to kick off now? Would really appreciate your thoughts on Chapter 34 I need people who have been following the story to tell me what they think Lisa should do. Thank you. x

Comment from MumEsGirl

Excellent

sorry Alexis, am reviewing in backward order at present. Im glad Carla thinks that the perfume is for her. Otherwise if Alan comes round he might have to go looking for Lisa again.

Once again he would be too late

hugs

kate

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

No problem. I don't care in what order you review, just really appreciate that you do! Alexis x

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Nick had got - had gotten
vivid description of setting
You depict Nick's inner thoughts and emotions well
he had to try AND contact her - try TO
Where are you calling from, Amy? Would you like me to phone you back? - I changed punctuation
Good natural-sounding dialogue
Brooke

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

Thank you so much, Brooke. All suggestions gratefully appreciated and acted upon. Thank you. Alexis x

Comment from peggles

Excellent

I am so enjoying this story
It is gripping and entertaining
Each chapter follows on well from the previous and the reader has no need to back track
Also you cleverly leaves us with a cliffhanger
So well compose it is a fascinating story I shall be looking for more
I loved ( frogmarched)
it gives such a strong image

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

I know, it's a great word, isn't it? It's one I've been dying to use for ages. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter and you had to leave me with a cliffhanger, didn't you? i hope my computer works tomorrow.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

I'm sorry, I just cant help myself! Thank you so much for your lovely review. Alexis x

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hey Alexis,

Gawd, I've never seen so much mis-communication in all my life! What a train wreck! It'll be interesting just to see how you get all this untangled.

A few spag:

he had waited for her to arrive- only arrive - only

the phone went at seven(:)thirty, The phone 'went?' Is that a Glasgow thing?

It wasn't Bob- it was the Bob - it

knowing (that) they all depended


Ah, you still need me! lol

Waiting on the next chapter!!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012

Phew! only one that? Maybe it's sinking in at last, boss. Hopefully I'll get the next one posted today. This ones a 'biggy' Alexis x

Comment from LisaSilva

Excellent

Fantastic! I read all three chapters with my puppy tugging at my sweater. I couldn't take my eyes off of the pages and had to keep going. Just what a good book does, I guess. I usually don't like fiction. I'm a little autistic and prefer facts, science and stuff like that. Thanks for another great read! Love, Lisa

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012

Well done , my friend. I hope there were no accidents while your pup was waiting! (I know my chapters can sometimes be a bit long-winded!) Thank you. Alexis x

Comment from rwilliam

Excellent

Feeling the warm amber liquid thaw him out, he walked over to the French doors and looked across the sea.--Really love this description!

The games room was linked to the lounge via a well-stocked bar, --oops I think you mean 'game' room...

whoa....... O M G! Here we go again. Woo Hoo, he's waking up!!! Hurry up ALan and go get Lisa!!!

Great writing, my friend!!

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012

You so do a body good! Thank you so much. Alexis x

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012

I forgot...it's a 'pond' thing again (remember those tasty Chinese?) WE refer to snooker rooms as 'games rooms' over here.

reply by rwilliam on 05-Feb-2012

Good to know. I'm learning. SO please forgive my ignorance on this. I am learning. :-)