The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "The Red Dress chapter twenty seven"The story of a teenage girl
12 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
You're not very nice, making me still wait to see if Alan's okay. I've run out of cookies and milk, so am getting by on pure adrenalin and sugar buzz!
I am hoping to read good news in the next chapter.
The school sounds extremely nice, you've done a good job setting up the scene there and introducing new characters.
However, I must return now to my silent vigil waiting for news of Alan!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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You're not very nice, making me still wait to see if Alan's okay. I've run out of cookies and milk, so am getting by on pure adrenalin and sugar buzz!
I am hoping to read good news in the next chapter.
The school sounds extremely nice, you've done a good job setting up the scene there and introducing new characters.
However, I must return now to my silent vigil waiting for news of Alan!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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You sound so good! personally, I hit the wine, if I'm reviewing that late at night, but there again, Cruella taught me a few things! Thank you, my friend. I'm now getting morbid because I only have nine of your wonderful reviews to go! Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
well Alexis you've done it again
This chapter is rather engaging. Lisa is off to school, can't call out after dark and Alan is just being Alan. Now the unread letter. Me thinks there is a skunk about to enter the room
Bear
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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well Alexis you've done it again
This chapter is rather engaging. Lisa is off to school, can't call out after dark and Alan is just being Alan. Now the unread letter. Me thinks there is a skunk about to enter the room
Bear
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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If you think this ones good, I know your going to enjoy the rest, especially chapter thirty three! Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where lisa settles in at school, but is overwhelmed with sadness over not hearing from allan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where lisa settles in at school, but is overwhelmed with sadness over not hearing from allan
Comment Written 03-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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As you know by now things are about to get complicated. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
Lisa seems to be in her youthful essence at the school. It's good to see her "acting her age" and being somewhat carefree. I can't wait to see what happens to her as she matures; I'm guessing that the photo taken of her previously will come back to haunt her at some point. Another good chapter; I'm still reading.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Lisa seems to be in her youthful essence at the school. It's good to see her "acting her age" and being somewhat carefree. I can't wait to see what happens to her as she matures; I'm guessing that the photo taken of her previously will come back to haunt her at some point. Another good chapter; I'm still reading.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Yes, I thought she deserved a break! Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from LisaSilva
Hi there, Alexis. I'm just catching up on your latest. Both have me in suspense, so I'm reading on. Excellent writing, of course. Let me know when there's a contest for book writers. You're the only one I read and I want to vote for you, okay;) Love, Lisa
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Hi there, Alexis. I'm just catching up on your latest. Both have me in suspense, so I'm reading on. Excellent writing, of course. Let me know when there's a contest for book writers. You're the only one I read and I want to vote for you, okay;) Love, Lisa
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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What a great compliment, Lisa. I don't know if there is such a contest, but I'll look into it. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a terrible time Lisa is
being put through... and
Poor alan..
She didn't[,](') in fact, it seemed
Lisa lay on her bed[,] and, conscious of the
Margaret
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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What a terrible time Lisa is
being put through... and
Poor alan..
She didn't[,](') in fact, it seemed
Lisa lay on her bed[,] and, conscious of the
Margaret
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for picking up on that, Margaret. It's amazing how often you can read something when editing, and still miss things. Thank goodness for Fan Story, and people as good as you at reviewing! Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
OH my goodness. I can't wait to see what is going to happen!!
I feel like the brakes were cut by the jerk photographer and he placed a bottle in the car. Just what I'm thinking.
Wow, this is a page turner. Girl, you are a great writer! Seriously! My heart is pounding, I don't know how I'm supposed to sleep tonight. I find myself thinking about your story and trying to work out what will happen and what "I" want to happen.
Great work!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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OH my goodness. I can't wait to see what is going to happen!!
I feel like the brakes were cut by the jerk photographer and he placed a bottle in the car. Just what I'm thinking.
Wow, this is a page turner. Girl, you are a great writer! Seriously! My heart is pounding, I don't know how I'm supposed to sleep tonight. I find myself thinking about your story and trying to work out what will happen and what "I" want to happen.
Great work!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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I am absolutely blown away by your enthusiasm, thank you so much! Alexis x
Comment from axelbeariter
If there wasn't, she decided that she was going to get the next train back to London./Use weren't instead of wasn't----
Amy plonked herself uninvited, down on the seat beside her./Delete uninvited. It doesn't matter----Another good chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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If there wasn't, she decided that she was going to get the next train back to London./Use weren't instead of wasn't----
Amy plonked herself uninvited, down on the seat beside her./Delete uninvited. It doesn't matter----Another good chapter.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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All corrected. Don't know how many ways I can find to say this, but thank you. Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
Good introduction into the school and glad to see she doesn't feel like an outcast and on her own. I feel her pain, not knowing why Allan is not answering her calls. I want to know what's in the letter too lol You do like to keep us in suspense ;) Great chapter. I just saw this .. heartless human being(s) on the planet. Alex :)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Good introduction into the school and glad to see she doesn't feel like an outcast and on her own. I feel her pain, not knowing why Allan is not answering her calls. I want to know what's in the letter too lol You do like to keep us in suspense ;) Great chapter. I just saw this .. heartless human being(s) on the planet. Alex :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Well spotted, Alex. Don't know where I would be without those extra eyes. Thank you so much. Alexis
Comment from debskatz
Okay. I saw a couple of changes. I'll take your word for it you changed them all! :-)
Hi alexis,
Cool chapter! Sounds like a good place for Lisa to be, and Amy sounds like she'll be a good friend.
Now, dang, girl, you makin' me work for this money! lol
By the time the train pulled away(,) Lisa was able
It didn't, in fact it - She didn't. In fact, it
Amy naively thought (that) it was very
Lisa spent the rest of the journey alone(,) listening
weeks, and hoped (that) there would
Some parent's(parents) just don't
Amy stared back at her, glad (that) she
Lisa realised (that) her last school
'Adams' dining room (which was) painted
She went to the phone right away and picked it up, - She went to the phone right away, pick it up, and
"Linda(,) my phone doesn't
Lisa lay on her bed, and(,) conscious
Okay, I'm sure there's more, but I found right off the bat.
This time, you gotta holler at me after you revise to get another star!
REally a great chapter. Looking forward to the next one!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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Okay. I saw a couple of changes. I'll take your word for it you changed them all! :-)
Hi alexis,
Cool chapter! Sounds like a good place for Lisa to be, and Amy sounds like she'll be a good friend.
Now, dang, girl, you makin' me work for this money! lol
By the time the train pulled away(,) Lisa was able
It didn't, in fact it - She didn't. In fact, it
Amy naively thought (that) it was very
Lisa spent the rest of the journey alone(,) listening
weeks, and hoped (that) there would
Some parent's(parents) just don't
Amy stared back at her, glad (that) she
Lisa realised (that) her last school
'Adams' dining room (which was) painted
She went to the phone right away and picked it up, - She went to the phone right away, pick it up, and
"Linda(,) my phone doesn't
Lisa lay on her bed, and(,) conscious
Okay, I'm sure there's more, but I found right off the bat.
This time, you gotta holler at me after you revise to get another star!
REally a great chapter. Looking forward to the next one!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Deb. Sorry, I was in such a rush to keep up with you guys and get another two chapters posted, I clean forgot my 'that 'patrol! ('that's' my story, and I'm sticking to it!)All corrected---honest! Alexis x
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I changed it! :-)