I Put Them Back, She Takes Them Out
Tri, Tri and Tri again ...61 total reviews
Comment from sgalletti
Indeedy! Thanks to you for sponsoring this contest, generating so many great entries and challenging only those in the know to enter. You know how I love humor and you always exhibit it so naturally as you did in this piece, especially around the content of your children. Creative entry. Best of luck in your wonderful contest. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Indeedy! Thanks to you for sponsoring this contest, generating so many great entries and challenging only those in the know to enter. You know how I love humor and you always exhibit it so naturally as you did in this piece, especially around the content of your children. Creative entry. Best of luck in your wonderful contest. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Wow thanks so much Sue, i appreciate the review and also thankyou for your entry...I will be reviewing all entries today and tomorrow. Its so easy to write about the havoc this small child creates and its nice to get a poem out of disaster I suppose! LOL
Cheers and thanks again.
Phillippa xo
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh CloPo - been there, done that. This so resonated with me. And now I have to tell you something very depressing - my daughter is now 30, and her bedroom is no better than when she was 8. I definitely failed as a mother somewhere along the line...
Very vivid, lots of fun, and I enjoyed it very much.
I can't believe how much Tahlia has grown! Last time I saw a picture of her she had hardly any hair, and look at it now!! A proper little lady, even if her behaviour is more little monkey. But isn't that how kids are supposed to be?
My best wishes to you, and thanks for organising this stinker of a contest. When I entered, I thought it would be relatively easy, but was it heck??
Sal x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Oh CloPo - been there, done that. This so resonated with me. And now I have to tell you something very depressing - my daughter is now 30, and her bedroom is no better than when she was 8. I definitely failed as a mother somewhere along the line...
Very vivid, lots of fun, and I enjoyed it very much.
I can't believe how much Tahlia has grown! Last time I saw a picture of her she had hardly any hair, and look at it now!! A proper little lady, even if her behaviour is more little monkey. But isn't that how kids are supposed to be?
My best wishes to you, and thanks for organising this stinker of a contest. When I entered, I thought it would be relatively easy, but was it heck??
Sal x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thats not what I wanted to hear Sal! LOL
Thanks for the enchanting review and yes the little horror has grown..she seems so big and grown up for just over two and a half...well I guess she is closer to 3 now...(feb15)...she has me on the go but I am a bad example at times leaving my own mess strewn everywhere ... apologies for the stinker contest, not such a stinky prize pool though huh? Haha
Thanks again and I'll be over to review your entry soon.
I am flat out here.
Clo xoxo
Comment from victortouche
This is quite well done. Whimsical, cute, you know. But normally i find things like this forced a bit usually. This is not. I kept waiting for that inevitable awkward moment, but it never came. Often,I believe, continual pressure (whether real or not) to produce writing gives rise to mediocrity and the aforementioned forced phrases. Not here. Good job, Mom.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2011
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This is quite well done. Whimsical, cute, you know. But normally i find things like this forced a bit usually. This is not. I kept waiting for that inevitable awkward moment, but it never came. Often,I believe, continual pressure (whether real or not) to produce writing gives rise to mediocrity and the aforementioned forced phrases. Not here. Good job, Mom.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2011
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I don't believe in awkward moments Vic. If it don't flow off your tongue like butter on a hot griddle...then its not worth a mention. I work hard to make my stuff flow. Thanks for appreciating that.
Cheers Mom.
x
Comment from alexisleech
Excellent! I remember it so well. I used to think that it was so crazy that by the time we could afford a 'play' room ie somewhere the toys could just stay out, both my kids were into 'playing' in a completely different way! Your poem rhymed beautifully and was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Excellent! I remember it so well. I used to think that it was so crazy that by the time we could afford a 'play' room ie somewhere the toys could just stay out, both my kids were into 'playing' in a completely different way! Your poem rhymed beautifully and was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Many thanks for your thoughtful review alexis.
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Comment from LadyCosgrove
Good luck with the tidying up lol
Love the references to her care-free nature... and your depiction of this scenario is spot on.
Beautifully balanced triolets.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Good luck with the tidying up lol
Love the references to her care-free nature... and your depiction of this scenario is spot on.
Beautifully balanced triolets.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much and glad you enjoyed LadyC.
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Comment from Warren Rodgers
CPJ,
You're telling me that little girl in that sweet picture causes all this chaos LOLOL. Very funny, clever an superbly written in rhyme and meter. No bumps that I noticed makes for a top entry in your contest. hmmm someone say contest lol
Your humor is unrelenting as well in this TT gem, my friend. Loved all of your original phrases with these as my favs: "Untidyness is her career", "my clean campaign she's out to smear"!, "In Tidyland she'll interfere" LOL. Besides your gift of rhyme and meter, you certainly have a relentless sense of humor too! It's been my pleasure to read and rate your TT, it's dynamite! Good luck in your contest and thank you for thanking the organizer. A very kind and courteous gesture that is not always seen here at fanstory LOL.
Cheers!
Waaazzzzzaaaaaaa
xoxo
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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CPJ,
You're telling me that little girl in that sweet picture causes all this chaos LOLOL. Very funny, clever an superbly written in rhyme and meter. No bumps that I noticed makes for a top entry in your contest. hmmm someone say contest lol
Your humor is unrelenting as well in this TT gem, my friend. Loved all of your original phrases with these as my favs: "Untidyness is her career", "my clean campaign she's out to smear"!, "In Tidyland she'll interfere" LOL. Besides your gift of rhyme and meter, you certainly have a relentless sense of humor too! It's been my pleasure to read and rate your TT, it's dynamite! Good luck in your contest and thank you for thanking the organizer. A very kind and courteous gesture that is not always seen here at fanstory LOL.
Cheers!
Waaazzzzzaaaaaaa
xoxo
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Awww aren't you lovely, another one...thanks so much Wazz. Glad you enjoyed this one too and she is such a little dynamo she keeps me on the go with all this chaos at the moment.
Your review made my day and I thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Cheers CPJ xoxo
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This was such a cute little story of the little destruction crew! I laughed when I read it. Had a very familiar ring from many years ago when mine were little. Pick it up, drag it out, pick it up.....Great poem! Loved the rhyming!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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This was such a cute little story of the little destruction crew! I laughed when I read it. Had a very familiar ring from many years ago when mine were little. Pick it up, drag it out, pick it up.....Great poem! Loved the rhyming!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thanks Linda, much appreciate your deligthful review.
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Comment from elliejean
SHE IS A CUTE LITTLE GIRL. I LOVE THE POEM. I had one just like her. She grew up and established a company that cleans houses. Her own house is spotless. There is hope. You can some day go to her house and spill and throw about. Good Work.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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SHE IS A CUTE LITTLE GIRL. I LOVE THE POEM. I had one just like her. She grew up and established a company that cleans houses. Her own house is spotless. There is hope. You can some day go to her house and spill and throw about. Good Work.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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So there is hope? Hooray! LOL
Cheers and thanks for a delightfully supportive and helpful review.
Closet
Comment from psalmist
Great job with this triolet, and I thought the modifications worked well, as they maintained the basic ideas in each line while just changing a few words. I'm so glad to be done with those days. My granddaughter was here for a few days, 3 1/2 years old, and my house was a shambles! But we loved every minute of it. Linda
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Great job with this triolet, and I thought the modifications worked well, as they maintained the basic ideas in each line while just changing a few words. I'm so glad to be done with those days. My granddaughter was here for a few days, 3 1/2 years old, and my house was a shambles! But we loved every minute of it. Linda
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Why thank you so much Linda, I appreciate your great review and yes, fortunately they ARE worth all the shambles.
Just quietly though, some days I wonder! LOL
Cheers Phillippa xo
Comment from jeslaf
Hysterical! Your witty voice is evident throughout, but I loved most these lines:
She touts the pour and pulls the pout
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And so the endless roundabout .
I have graduated from Fisher Price toys strewn across the living room to iPods, books, papers, nail polish, food wrappers, and feminine hygiene products strewn across every surface of home and car. It doesn't get better, just DIFFERENT. Hence the wine/beer routine. Ha!
Bravo, mom! :)
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Hysterical! Your witty voice is evident throughout, but I loved most these lines:
She touts the pour and pulls the pout
and
And so the endless roundabout .
I have graduated from Fisher Price toys strewn across the living room to iPods, books, papers, nail polish, food wrappers, and feminine hygiene products strewn across every surface of home and car. It doesn't get better, just DIFFERENT. Hence the wine/beer routine. Ha!
Bravo, mom! :)
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Haha thanks so much my friend and I appreciate your thoughtful and constructive advice. Oh God, not the feminie hygiene products? LOL I can see you are right...DIFFERENT. Okay I can run with that.
Cheers and thanks so much jess.
Closet xo