Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

i love the metaphors of the poem,
they make the poem an easy read.
the rhythm and rhyme are both just in time.
abundant rhymes, well timed, indeed.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thanks for the review and the kind words.
Steve

Comment from Tall-tree

Excellent

Funny and I imagine it was quite a lot of fun to write too.
I always say humour is the toughest to write except for those few lucky talented people for whom it just comes naturally.

I read somewhere that scriptwriter prefer to write joes with a k sound in it cause they're the most effective punchlines and the ones the audience laughs the hardest at.

Love it! Obviously a lot of effort also went into it.Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thank you for the kind words - yes, it was fun - I just let the rhymes take me wherever they wanted and lo and behold, I ended up in a bank with a skunk!
Interesting about the punch lines ending in K...

Steve

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Dear ???,
Whoever you are, I want you to know I tried to give you a six, but somehow am not allowed. This is priceless in its humour and your rhyme and metre are to die for, apart from meeting all off the cookie conditions set for this comp. and "In-stinked" must be the cleverest word invention I have ever read.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011

Thanks, Reg. The no-six should have given you a clue to the author cos you've just given me one...
Alas I take no credit for 'In-stinked' which comes from an old joke - I just had to work it in once those K rhymes left me in a bank with a skunk!
This comp was right up my street - I'll have to see if Rama can come up with any more like this!

Steve

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Excellent

to whom it may concern:

very cleverly thought, penned
and presented. it gave me a
good chortle, that's for sure.
thanks for sharing, and
muchly good luck!
regards, eph.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thanks, Eph. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from percival86jack

Excellent

"So let's not knock my good friend, Jock;
Whoever would have thinked?
Oh what a shock, no more the rock,
He acts upon In-stinked"

LOVE IT! Good luck in the contest, it's a winner in my books... cheers, Jack

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thanks, Jack.
I cannibalised an old joke for the punch line.
And yes, we have a winner...
Steve

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the skunk who foiled a bank robbery, i enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thank you fo the kind words and best wishes - they worked obviously.
Steve

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Poet,
your poem is cleverly written and filled with solid imagery that paints a mental picture in the readers head. The art work is adorable. Your humor is delightful. You excellently used rhyme, superb alliteration usage and great use of metaphor in your poem. I enjoyed your lines: "This simple act showed what Frank lacked; Capacity to duck. Upon impact, it is a fact That he was thunderstruck. It's hard to fake the smell skunks make, It sure can make you puke. A putrid lake of pong opaque, It felled Frank like a nuke." I'm ROTFL. Talk about stinky- pew-u! I'd recommend this poetic treasure to other reviewers to read your greatness, my friend. I wish you good luck in the Abundant Rhymes, Well Timed writing prompt. Keep on writing with humor and creatively. Please have a marvelous day.
Missy.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

I've never smelled a stinky skunk;
I hope I never smell one,
But I can tell you what I thunk,
In a story I can sell one!

Thanks for the kind review.

Steve

Comment from Cheryl Baker

Excellent

I thoroughly enjoyed this funny poem. It is written as the writing prompt suggests with an abundance of rhymes and internal rhymes. It is clever and witty and I love its romping rhythm. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thanks, Cheryl - this prompt was like a licence to have fun - and print money, as it turns out.

Steve

Comment from cvcopac

Exceptional

Fifty five end rhymes working with the consonate 'K' all of which are true end rhymes. What a story. I'm pretty sure I know 'Jock and Old Frank' from somewhere. If you don't win first prize I'll still be laughing.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

If you can pick winners that good, you should be at the track rather than sitting at home reading silly poems about skunks!

Thanks for the kind words and the six stars - I appreciate it.

Steve

reply by cvcopac on 18-Nov-2011

I like to watch a good race but horses are unpredictable; that poem was a no brainer; had to win. I counted 66 not 55 rhymes.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

ROTFL---Hilarious and witty and certainly will win my vote as this meets all the contest criteria and is highly entertaining and creative as well. Clever pun in the closing line--had me chuckling aloud.

Bravo and Kudos.

What fun you must have had writing this.

Also, none of the abundant rhymes sound force and you certainly used plenty of internal rhymes and inventive rhymes to boot.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011

Thanks, Rama, and thanks for creating this contest too - almost like a licence to print member dollars for me!

Steve