Comment from Graceheart

Excellent

Another wonderful read from the lady on this site who is becoming a premier Love Poem Author! So true about the dreams, we can't give them up even if those closet to us want us to, try to force us to! The dream of the cabin is one I have had several times, except I am the Knightin the dream and find my Princess waiting for me there after a long war.She is waiting with open arms for me to rush in! Thank you for this dream and the hope this poem shares so tenderly! Well pened with superb images and so much of your soft heart!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2005

Comment from El Romantico

Excellent

Every beautiful woman deserves that special knight to take them away and make their troubles seem to disappear. I hope that your knight will soon come rescue you and you will continue your tale with us. Thanks for the read.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2005

Comment from Robert E. Blackwell

Excellent

The only quibble I have here is that you've misspelled "co-dependent" (if this is UK spelling, please disregard). Otherwise, you've written a very delightful work.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2005

Comment from Walter L. Jones

Excellent

The words flow like the wine, sweet and full. It is in the trust of others we find ourselves, this poem made me smile not for the form or even the content, but for the sharing of real life, just beyond our finger tips. Good stuff.. Walt

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2005

Comment from Wm B. Naylor

Excellent

Wasn't it Mama Cass that sang "Dream a Little Dream of Me"?

I thought this little meditative poem captured that delicious feeling bout dreams and love. Love, they say, is the irrestible desire to be irrestibly desired. Dreams often don't mix well with that, but then maybe that knight is listening. Maybe he sees the raw new picture, daring in it's openness. Gorgeous.

Will

Muahhhhhhahahahaha

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2005

Comment from Delhini

Excellent

I love the way you write this. Especially at the end. Dreaming outloud... now there is a concept for you...

Always...

Delhini

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

NO WHAT ELSE
ha ha ha ha ha ha

it's good to dream
to go to a world of make believe
where flowers bloom all of the time
and the stream you are standing next to
is full of sweet wine

very nice
as always....your fan...kingsland

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2005

Comment from InfinitySeven

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this poem. It's nice to know there are still dreamers in the world. This was a beautiful moment of vulnerability. I have one suggestion and one question. First, I think you might fix the punctuation on

"then I have lost all hope,
having, given in to the nature
of the cynical creature"

I believe it should be "having given in to the nature."

My question... Well, forget about that. Thanks for sharing this poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2005

Comment from Chris Lavoie

Excellent

This is a great write. I love the message which you paint beautifuly. There is no power that can stop you from your dreams if you believe in them. I enjoyed your positive outlook and hope all your dreams come true. Thanks for sharing, chrislyn.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2005

Comment from Mr. Dan

Good

Very good. Others can hold us back and hurt our dreams sometimes, but ultimately it's our decision.....one or 2 grammer/syntax/whatever errors 'codependant' (another word i hate anyway)


maybe some small editing and youd have a great poem here.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2005