Green Lizards and Wedding Bells
Story in a poem12 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of rhyming couplets that enhances the sound of this poem when read aloud
lovely description of setting
nice touches of alliteration in phrases like pink punch
and curtain by a claw
What a fun story of how this little lizard upset the pretty mood of this wedding LOL - great visual of that back flip :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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Excellent use of rhyming couplets that enhances the sound of this poem when read aloud
lovely description of setting
nice touches of alliteration in phrases like pink punch
and curtain by a claw
What a fun story of how this little lizard upset the pretty mood of this wedding LOL - great visual of that back flip :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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Brooke, I am glad you enjoyed my poem. It was a funny memory from my "youth". :o) Thank you for the stars and kind review.
Comment from skip ward
Who wouldn't be drawn to a title that offers wedding bells and a lizard. I read through the poem, eagerly anticipating the lizard's arrival. And here he came. You delivered the "punch" line. Great, from a 10-year-old's perspective. Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2011
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Who wouldn't be drawn to a title that offers wedding bells and a lizard. I read through the poem, eagerly anticipating the lizard's arrival. And here he came. You delivered the "punch" line. Great, from a 10-year-old's perspective. Good job.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from TammyGail
Great work writing this poem
You did indeed tell a story in this
Very cute :)
I really enjoyed reading it
Loved you imagery as well
Good luck in the contest
And thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Great work writing this poem
You did indeed tell a story in this
Very cute :)
I really enjoyed reading it
Loved you imagery as well
Good luck in the contest
And thanks for sharing
Comment Written 02-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you enjoyed my story.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure the lizard didn't drink too much...lol.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure the lizard didn't drink too much...lol.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. No, don't think he drank too much but then again anyone seeing him swimming in the punch didn't drink much either. LOL The "old ladies" were quick to rid him of his pleasure and change out the punch. :o)
Comment from rchitwood
Very good and I really enjoyed reading it.Your poem has good description of your Aunts wedding.Very amusing and I had to laugh at the lizard.Your photo compliments your poem good.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Very good and I really enjoyed reading it.Your poem has good description of your Aunts wedding.Very amusing and I had to laugh at the lizard.Your photo compliments your poem good.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you Rita for your kind review of my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and it made you laugh.
Comment from mmmichelle34
That was a very nice poem the colors was nice easy to see the picture seem to go well with your writing since I noticed this was a contest good luck to you.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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That was a very nice poem the colors was nice easy to see the picture seem to go well with your writing since I noticed this was a contest good luck to you.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. Thanks for the well wishes for the contest.
Comment from MizKat
What a cute poem. It made me smile. I like when a story in a poem comes from a real life event. I really enjoyed this. Kat
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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What a cute poem. It made me smile. I like when a story in a poem comes from a real life event. I really enjoyed this. Kat
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you Kat for reviewing my poem and your gracious stars. I am glad you enjoyed the story and it gave you a smile.
Comment from ericawrites
An amusing story, well told. I did think though that the word "antebellum" made the sentence too long and upset the rhythmic flow. Similarly, "All these delights" could be replaced with "Such delights", to aid the rhythm of the rhyme. Otherwise, it rhymes and flows beautifully. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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An amusing story, well told. I did think though that the word "antebellum" made the sentence too long and upset the rhythmic flow. Similarly, "All these delights" could be replaced with "Such delights", to aid the rhythm of the rhyme. Otherwise, it rhymes and flows beautifully. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you Erica for your kind review. Yes, you are most likely right with your suggestions. I think I wanted to emphasize that the house was old and Southern thus I included the fact that it was an antebellum home. But, I do see your point that it makes the sentence long. I also agree with the suggestion "such delights" sounds better...I will most likely change that. Thanks. :o)
Comment from gazzagodbod
certainly fits the criteria of the contest and what a little story poem this is loved it good luck in the contest my friend gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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certainly fits the criteria of the contest and what a little story poem this is loved it good luck in the contest my friend gazzagodbod
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your generous review of my poem and the well wishes in the contest.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the lizard that put in an appearance at the wedding reception. i'm sure your giggles we're appreciated at the time. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the lizard that put in an appearance at the wedding reception. i'm sure your giggles we're appreciated at the time. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. No, the giggles were not appreciated but it sure did make my day more fun. :o)