Keith & Brianna
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "All About the Cake"Blossoming romance
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Comment from smudge
Seem to be uncertain that Keith will attend the dinner. Keith is not the same character Brianna's mother thinks he is. Brianna's father is on a different track. As Keith seems to be a deceptive character time will tell whether either of them are right.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Seem to be uncertain that Keith will attend the dinner. Keith is not the same character Brianna's mother thinks he is. Brianna's father is on a different track. As Keith seems to be a deceptive character time will tell whether either of them are right.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Exactly.
Thanks so much for reading!
Comment from allborn66
I like your dialogue, it has a nice flow to it. I like your characters, they seem real. I'm not too sure about the story - I walk into the middle of it, but the conflict doe snot seem to be that strong in this section.
Barbara
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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I like your dialogue, it has a nice flow to it. I like your characters, they seem real. I'm not too sure about the story - I walk into the middle of it, but the conflict doe snot seem to be that strong in this section.
Barbara
Comment Written 05-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Personally, I don't care for conflict, however, it'll be coming in the next few chapters. You're nice. Thanks.