The Culling of the Meek
A mirrored pair of sonnets64 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Fleedleflump,
I am not sure I see your intent, is the world gone to hell and are we too late? Man is depraved that is true, for will he see the truth the light, I dismay.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Dear Fleedleflump,
I am not sure I see your intent, is the world gone to hell and are we too late? Man is depraved that is true, for will he see the truth the light, I dismay.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Winslow. This was one of my more obscure pieces! It was predicated on the thought 'if the meek inherited the earth, would they still be meek?'
Mike
Comment from jaeladarling
This was kind of like reading a movie waiting to be turned into a screenplay and filmed. Or maybe a movie trailer. At any rate, it's an excellent read with great imagery and flow. Love it!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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This was kind of like reading a movie waiting to be turned into a screenplay and filmed. Or maybe a movie trailer. At any rate, it's an excellent read with great imagery and flow. Love it!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you! I write very visually, so that's a great compliment :-).
Mike
Comment from livingwords
Excellent work. Dark, deep, thought provoking. To me, the meek cannot inherit the earth because evil can only be defeated by the sword. Hence, you have well presented a conundrum. Dan :))
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Excellent work. Dark, deep, thought provoking. To me, the meek cannot inherit the earth because evil can only be defeated by the sword. Hence, you have well presented a conundrum. Dan :))
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thanks so much, Dan! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. Apologies for the slow response - I've had very little time on site the last few days.
Mike
Comment from Tawnyowl
Lovely artwork here and a very competent poem to go with it. I liked the alternating lines of verse. It has a good metrical pattern and rhyme scheme. Some interesting thoughts in the poem. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Lovely artwork here and a very competent poem to go with it. I liked the alternating lines of verse. It has a good metrical pattern and rhyme scheme. Some interesting thoughts in the poem. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Tawny - I'm so glad you enjoyed it :-).
Mike
Comment from Kingsland
I liked the second poem better than the first one. The first one is a bit confusing until you read the second one. The second poem starts out with two outstanding lines that just make you want to read on. This was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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I liked the second poem better than the first one. The first one is a bit confusing until you read the second one. The second poem starts out with two outstanding lines that just make you want to read on. This was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thanks, John. I had initially written just the first one, and the second I added before posting because I realised, as you say, it didn;t quite stand on its own. Thanks for the insightful, encouraging review :-).
Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
I find myself saying that the strong have carried the weak so long we are all now weak. Have we become enablers along the way? Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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I find myself saying that the strong have carried the weak so long we are all now weak. Have we become enablers along the way? Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Jean :-). I think the line has become so grey it's dissipated into the mass of society. I'm glad you saw into the themes on this.
Mike
Comment from mushroom
I did enjoy this read, I found it to be very interesting and felt it to be very poetic too, I get a feeling of impending doom for some reason, still I think it's great
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I did enjoy this read, I found it to be very interesting and felt it to be very poetic too, I get a feeling of impending doom for some reason, still I think it's great
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Mushroom. It is meant to be quite dark, calling into question the benevolence of triumph. I'm so glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from 7thpoet
Almost prophetic in content, complete with the fact that they accompany each other quite well and cast a vision for the future. Nice work
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Almost prophetic in content, complete with the fact that they accompany each other quite well and cast a vision for the future. Nice work
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you, 7thpoet :-). I had a solid vision for this one and was trying to do it justice.
Mike
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
a most thought-provoking poem which invites the reader to give it a second and third reading. so many good lines with so much pure poetry written by a true sage! Giddy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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a most thought-provoking poem which invites the reader to give it a second and third reading. so many good lines with so much pure poetry written by a true sage! Giddy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Giddy - what a wonderful review! I'm glad it grabbed you enough to draw you in and make you want to read it thoroughly.
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
You been reading the bible in your spare time Mike? A beautifully crafted apocalyptic offering from your gifted pen, a mirrored pair of sonnets... Impressive! This is one to read over and over and over again before one can truly appreciate it, good luck with it mate!
The meek are supposed to inherit the earth are they not?
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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You been reading the bible in your spare time Mike? A beautifully crafted apocalyptic offering from your gifted pen, a mirrored pair of sonnets... Impressive! This is one to read over and over and over again before one can truly appreciate it, good luck with it mate!
The meek are supposed to inherit the earth are they not?
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Not sure I've actually seen a bible since primary school, but there you go! Glad you appreciate this, mate. My idea was 'if the meek inherited the earth, would they still be the meek?'
Mike
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Sh*t I think I must of read it at least 3 times before I was 16, we used to read as a family every morning for an hour, the bible or book of Mormon[true], I think I owe a lot of my inspiration to that particular book, funny that I seem drawn to the darker side of its writings though, demons and angels :)
At first, maybe, but time has a way of corrupting the hearts and minds of men does it not?
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Indeed it does! I was brought up 100% agnostic, which suits me just fine. I sang hymns every day in school assembly, but that was just saomething we did every day - I never attributed any spiritual importance to it. Having said that, got to love the biblical imagery, especially when one can twist it. It gives a lot of power.
Mike