Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from random musings
Lovely is the heart of love, willing to share with all who dare.
Making the most out of Gods gifts is all anyone can really hope to do. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, but loveliness comes from within.
Just one guys perspective. Well dona as usual
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2006
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Lovely is the heart of love, willing to share with all who dare.
Making the most out of Gods gifts is all anyone can really hope to do. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, but loveliness comes from within.
Just one guys perspective. Well dona as usual
Comment Written 17-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2006
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I heard beauty was in the eyes of the beer holder. ;-) haha
Comment from Lainee
Hi Jewell,
Now this one I found to be enchanting. What a wonderful way to look at inner beauty and joy radiating from a single soul to be shared by many.
Thankyou for sharing,
Lainee :)
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Hi Jewell,
Now this one I found to be enchanting. What a wonderful way to look at inner beauty and joy radiating from a single soul to be shared by many.
Thankyou for sharing,
Lainee :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2005
Comment from Wm B. Naylor
I protest. What about the male gender? There must be more to loveliness than that exemplified by the female protag in your poem? The other thing this made me think of was the subtleness of many that manifest lovliness. But you got me thinking, didn't you?
TYhanks for sharing.
Sincerely
Will
Great graphic.
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I protest. What about the male gender? There must be more to loveliness than that exemplified by the female protag in your poem? The other thing this made me think of was the subtleness of many that manifest lovliness. But you got me thinking, didn't you?
TYhanks for sharing.
Sincerely
Will
Great graphic.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2004
Comment from InfinitySeven
This was an interesting poem. It calls the reader to consider reaching for some higher ideal, that of loveliness. People like this are rare, in my experience. When you find one, it is always refreshing to spend time with that person. Thank you for making me think. I have only one suggestion: own in "her own presence" probably isn't needed. Well done.
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This was an interesting poem. It calls the reader to consider reaching for some higher ideal, that of loveliness. People like this are rare, in my experience. When you find one, it is always refreshing to spend time with that person. Thank you for making me think. I have only one suggestion: own in "her own presence" probably isn't needed. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from Shari_K
You did a great job with describing this "loveliness."
As if spellbound,
onlookers are transfixed
to the magnetism
of her spirit
alluring in her own presence,
enticing and captivating
with an irresistible appeal.
Taking others into desire
not only to be enchanted
but to have what she has.
By being around her
they become aware that
something within themselves
is missing ; yet
knowing it is within reach.
These are such beautiful words you have written. Your poem flows perfectly as well.
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You did a great job with describing this "loveliness."
As if spellbound,
onlookers are transfixed
to the magnetism
of her spirit
alluring in her own presence,
enticing and captivating
with an irresistible appeal.
Taking others into desire
not only to be enchanted
but to have what she has.
By being around her
they become aware that
something within themselves
is missing ; yet
knowing it is within reach.
These are such beautiful words you have written. Your poem flows perfectly as well.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from Sentra
Jewell, your fast becoming one of the most prolific writers on this site. Again your direction captivates me. These lines explain it all,
As if spellbound,
onlookers are transfixed
to the magnetism
of her spirit
Spirit and self-esteem go hand in hand, when a person can achieve these to a level which feels comfortable to them, others notice and can't help being transfixed by such an aura. This can then be shared with those willing to receive. Funny how things work, I already knew this. ~winks~
Thank you for sharing.
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Jewell, your fast becoming one of the most prolific writers on this site. Again your direction captivates me. These lines explain it all,
As if spellbound,
onlookers are transfixed
to the magnetism
of her spirit
Spirit and self-esteem go hand in hand, when a person can achieve these to a level which feels comfortable to them, others notice and can't help being transfixed by such an aura. This can then be shared with those willing to receive. Funny how things work, I already knew this. ~winks~
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from purpleveil
I think this is a very interesting poem, a description of a lovely person, and, I think, the way you can relate to it would be the same as you would relate to such a person. It's like a diamond with it's many facets....
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I think this is a very interesting poem, a description of a lovely person, and, I think, the way you can relate to it would be the same as you would relate to such a person. It's like a diamond with it's many facets....
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from Lpspider
This was really good. deep, firm words. inspirational. awsome job here. one of your better poems. gret job. would recommend.
keep it up,
lpspider
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This was really good. deep, firm words. inspirational. awsome job here. one of your better poems. gret job. would recommend.
keep it up,
lpspider
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from grumpit
Overall the poem has a pleasant flow, and reads nicely, but it does seem a little over the top. The qualities seem out of kilter with simple 'loveliness', but that is perhaps a minor point--it is a poem after all, for which "poetic license" was invented.
But, however many times I reread this poem, I can't get over the opening word: "obsolete". It doesn't make sense to me, especially as it is irrevocably linked to the words that follow. Two other phrases also don't seem quite right:
"transfixed to the magnetism" (shouldn't that be "by the magnetism"?)and: "She then will send you on your way to expel upon your own enticements." Is there a word missing somewhere? Or perhaps a typo?
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Overall the poem has a pleasant flow, and reads nicely, but it does seem a little over the top. The qualities seem out of kilter with simple 'loveliness', but that is perhaps a minor point--it is a poem after all, for which "poetic license" was invented.
But, however many times I reread this poem, I can't get over the opening word: "obsolete". It doesn't make sense to me, especially as it is irrevocably linked to the words that follow. Two other phrases also don't seem quite right:
"transfixed to the magnetism" (shouldn't that be "by the magnetism"?)and: "She then will send you on your way to expel upon your own enticements." Is there a word missing somewhere? Or perhaps a typo?
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
Comment from Grace King
Jewell,
Wow, this was breathtaking in its beauty. I loved the wise-man aura surrounding your words as you give testament to the self conscious of how to evolve into a thing of beauty and adoration.
Very nice, thank you for sharing
always
flo
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Jewell,
Wow, this was breathtaking in its beauty. I loved the wise-man aura surrounding your words as you give testament to the self conscious of how to evolve into a thing of beauty and adoration.
Very nice, thank you for sharing
always
flo
Comment Written 28-Nov-2004
