Comment from longjon06

Excellent

A bit long but it was worth the time spent upon reading. The poem fits the season of Thanksgiving perfectly. For anyone that read this poem they would remember to be thankful for the things that they recieve.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2004

Comment from jonjo

Excellent

This is a very well written and pertinent tale of thanksgiving and the reasons for being grateful.
Thankyou for sharing your personal reasons for being thankful. :-)
Blessings to you.
jj

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2004

Comment from Shari_K

Excellent

You've written a poem with such a powerful message of what we need to be thankful for. Sometimes we don't remember the things that we should be thankful for instead we grumble about what we don't have. You have captured the true meaning of Thanksgiving in this poem. Your poem flowed smoothly with very good rhythm.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2004

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

I am a survivor not a victim.
I am thankful for all that life
has brought me through.
I am thankful to God who cares
for me beyond what I can even
think or imagine.

Thanks for using your story to remind us all to be thankful.
Well done
Rose

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2004

Comment from InfinitySeven

Excellent

Your words do cause me to pause, to reflect on my life. Thank you for reminding me to be thankful for what I have. Thank you for your encouraging thoughts and example.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2004

Comment from Wm B. Naylor

Excellent

Very touching. You make good use of contrast in the three vignettes leading up to the introspective finale. I don't drink but yesterday came across a T-shirt that said "Drink your Beer, there are starving people in India that have none." Cynical and disrespectful, it still drove home your point - count your blessings and they multiply.

Thanks for sharing them....

Sincerely

Will

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2004

Comment from Jaxson Phoenix

Excellent

Jewell, this is a great a great poem and more eloquently expresses the spirit of thanksgiving than any other poem I have read. Your visualization is strong and the poem leads your readers down memory lane. A pleasant journey indeed. Great job.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2004

Comment from suneagle

Excellent

A truly lovely "reflective" poem. Well done. Thank you for sharing.

It is his first holiday with out her, ("without" is one word.)

bag or candied pecans and (Did you mean 'bag of'?)

not even knowing what day it is,
Having roamed the streets the
(May I suggest a semi-colon after "is" and no capital for "having")

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2004

Comment from surrender

Excellent

That's a touching piece of work. Very vividly and and emotionally written. I found the stanzas a bit long and descriptive, taking some of the poetry out of them.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2004

Comment from Caileigh

Good

having been awake for hours
adorning a flour covered apron

I think you mean adorned with, not adorning?

I like it a lot, but it reads more like prose than poetry to me. Maybe if there were stronger descriptions it'd be more poetic. The subject matter is wonderful, and really well done. I like that these folks all have something to be thankful for, they seem more real that way. Even during times of loss and suffering there are good things that come our way. Thanks for a good read.

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 Comment Written 26-Nov-2004