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Comment from JimmytheStone
I read your Latin piece yesterday because it came highly recommended, I loved it. I was too busy then, but promised myself to comeback here and check this one out.
Your rhyme is well worth the time.
You got talent, keep it up.
Jimmy
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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I read your Latin piece yesterday because it came highly recommended, I loved it. I was too busy then, but promised myself to comeback here and check this one out.
Your rhyme is well worth the time.
You got talent, keep it up.
Jimmy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Jimmy - glad you enjoyed these two pieces. More nonsense in my portfolio if you have time to dig around.
Steve
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I plan on it.
You got skilz...
Comment from KiwiGal
Nope - still only 5 stars, but you know how I feel about them. Yep. Loved it .. but actually I thought the Latin one was better (cleverer) - perhaps because, as you say, most of these words are 'du jour'. My one little little 'a noter' is that I've always heard that "money talks" rather than "speaks". Up to you if you want to change it.
Oh, and I understand why you did it, but it would have been more correct to put: "Reponds-moi, s'il te plait" since you're hardly likely to still be on 'vous' terms with her.
I think the 'quick grope' line is the most explicit and funny, especially with its innocent meaning right there too.
You are a clever fellow - malin, habile, doue et marrant!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Nope - still only 5 stars, but you know how I feel about them. Yep. Loved it .. but actually I thought the Latin one was better (cleverer) - perhaps because, as you say, most of these words are 'du jour'. My one little little 'a noter' is that I've always heard that "money talks" rather than "speaks". Up to you if you want to change it.
Oh, and I understand why you did it, but it would have been more correct to put: "Reponds-moi, s'il te plait" since you're hardly likely to still be on 'vous' terms with her.
I think the 'quick grope' line is the most explicit and funny, especially with its innocent meaning right there too.
You are a clever fellow - malin, habile, doue et marrant!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Yeah, RSVP is more familiar to the non French speaking crowd and besides it fitted the meter perfickly!
Not sure why both these poems took off in a slightly risque direction - they took on a life of their own - I am sure Dr Freud would have something to say - Yes, Doctor, that ink-blot looks just like a threesome copulating with a large dog...
Your French is obviously more current than mine - I will have to sneak off and look up doue and marrant.
Comment from adewpearl
That is really one fun coincidence. I thought maybe you had challenged each other! :-)
I love how you work all these French derivative words into the meter and rhyme of your quatrains. Great humor, too :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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That is really one fun coincidence. I thought maybe you had challenged each other! :-)
I love how you work all these French derivative words into the meter and rhyme of your quatrains. Great humor, too :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Brooke.
Unknown to me, Carol had her poem done, ready to post when I mentioned to her that this was a good idea for a poem - interesting to compare the two - yes the new challenge format would have worked if we had thought ahead.
Syeve
Comment from RavensWord
Merveilleux po¨me. En fran§ais ou en anglais il est tout simplement s'amuser !
My French is very basic and hope you get the jest of this as I did you poem.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Merveilleux po¨me. En fran§ais ou en anglais il est tout simplement s'amuser !
My French is very basic and hope you get the jest of this as I did you poem.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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My French is OK but very rusty - good to dust a little of it off for this. Maybe I'll dust off my even rustier Latin next!
Merci beaucoup!
Steve
PS Your accents (symbols) show up as little boxes, which is why I didn't even bother with them in the poem!
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Yeah I know. The accent symbols are like fill-in-the-blank boxes.:-)
Yeah Latin, now that's a catchy language.
Comment from Ares
English language is the best. By the way, the French literature derives its greatness from the English translations.
French poem is null. Yet, when is translated into the English language, it will be something.
The worst is the photo is antifeminist.
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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English language is the best. By the way, the French literature derives its greatness from the English translations.
French poem is null. Yet, when is translated into the English language, it will be something.
The worst is the photo is antifeminist.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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I am glad you think that English is best, although it is obviously not a language that you will ever understand. Of course, this whole poem IS in English so I will take your words as a compliment. Thank you for the BS review.
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
You've done it again, you clever man! You've entertained, made me laugh, made me admire your skill and wit, and left me amazed at how you come up with these things!! Your 'French' is very good indeed ;P
Typo: missing "
"Cherie," I cried, "it's deja vu!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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You've done it again, you clever man! You've entertained, made me laugh, made me admire your skill and wit, and left me amazed at how you come up with these things!! Your 'French' is very good indeed ;P
Typo: missing "
"Cherie," I cried, "it's deja vu!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the review and the six stars and the laugh!
Typo fixed.
I used to be a French teacher, albeit one who's never been to France!
Steve
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Ah hah! Well, perhaps it's time you visited France. I watch 'Global Village' on SBS regularly, and would love to be able to tour all those fascinating little French towns and villages - they've retained so much of their culture. I did go there (twice) many years ago, but in those days, before the internet, we didn't have as much tourist info as we have now, so I didn't get as much value out of my trips as I would now.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi kiwisteveh,
Did she go home yet? I'm thinking your fiance is used to you bringing the odd trollop home for a threesome.
I enjoyed your bilingual poem! Of course, I got tangled up in a few of those French phrases. But it was easy to see what was going on. Really cute! Thanks for writing, it kept me grinning to the end. I think French Toast will be my morning meal after this soiree.
You are a great rhymster!
Nicely penned!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Hi kiwisteveh,
Did she go home yet? I'm thinking your fiance is used to you bringing the odd trollop home for a threesome.
I enjoyed your bilingual poem! Of course, I got tangled up in a few of those French phrases. But it was easy to see what was going on. Really cute! Thanks for writing, it kept me grinning to the end. I think French Toast will be my morning meal after this soiree.
You are a great rhymster!
Nicely penned!
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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I rather suspect it was the fiancee's idea in the first place - I can see her as a dominatrix type sending her lover out to pick up suitable trollops for their risque carrying-on.
Thanks for the kind words.
French toast - Yum. You've started me thinking about a movie I know where the husband is sick of his wife's Italian cooking and demands an end to 'all these -ini' food. Dammit, I want American food - I want French fries!'
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The best French fries up here in southern New Brunswick are Deluxe French Fries, a fast food joint that specializes in Fish & Chips. They slice up their own French fries the old-fashioned way from Prince Edward Island potatoes! With a little ketchup or vinegar, they're a real treat!
Comment from alexgardiner
Where my fiance waited
For risque menage a trois!
Naughty,naughty ,naughty. but I loved it :):):) I do pardon your French.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Where my fiance waited
For risque menage a trois!
Naughty,naughty ,naughty. but I loved it :):):) I do pardon your French.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thank you! Just a spur of the moment piece of silliness. If it raised a smile then it achieved its purpose.
Steve
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi kiwisteveh,
A very amusing romp in rhyme. Not being a French speaker I guess I can mangle the words enough ...
Very funny.
Patrick
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Hi kiwisteveh,
A very amusing romp in rhyme. Not being a French speaker I guess I can mangle the words enough ...
Very funny.
Patrick
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thank you! Just a spur of the moment piece of silliness. If it raised a smile then it achieved its purpose.
Steve
Comment from prophetess
Lol, English is my first, in fact, only language so some of the french words lost me, but the image you chose and the words I could put together gave me an idea of what was going on here, with a chuckle. This poem was a fun read, I smiled all the way through, it was the feeling that came across more than the meaning of the words. Good job and thank you.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Lol, English is my first, in fact, only language so some of the french words lost me, but the image you chose and the words I could put together gave me an idea of what was going on here, with a chuckle. This poem was a fun read, I smiled all the way through, it was the feeling that came across more than the meaning of the words. Good job and thank you.
Prophetess
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thank you! Just a spur of the moment piece of silliness. If it raised a smile then it achieved its purpose.
Steve