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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "haiku (sheets of rain)"keeping hope alive....
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Comment from MAMONIA
Great for you! I am so happy to see
you out there fighting the best of
them with your talent.
Your gifts are rare and beautiful and,
I for one, appreciate the words you
put together so easily, or so it seems.
Good win, good luck, good for you!
Your friend, Marie
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Great for you! I am so happy to see
you out there fighting the best of
them with your talent.
Your gifts are rare and beautiful and,
I for one, appreciate the words you
put together so easily, or so it seems.
Good win, good luck, good for you!
Your friend, Marie
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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thank you marie :)
Comment from vickib
HEY HEY HEY!!!!! Right on! Wow I see why this won, what a super haiku you. Using nature to describe depression the way you did makes it beautiful. Congrats!!!! XOXOXOXO
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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HEY HEY HEY!!!!! Right on! Wow I see why this won, what a super haiku you. Using nature to describe depression the way you did makes it beautiful. Congrats!!!! XOXOXOXO
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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thanx vicki! :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi shelley
It will be interesting to see who will challenge your storm haiku
( you have a good one here.
good luck ( hope you win)
Gert
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Hi shelley
It will be interesting to see who will challenge your storm haiku
( you have a good one here.
good luck ( hope you win)
Gert
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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thank you gert :)
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is a good summer haiku. samidare, June rains, and yudachi, evening shower, sudden shower, are both kigo for summer (William J. Higginson, The Haiku Handbook, p. 272.) However, the Shiki Salon of Matsuyama University ruled in 2000 that haiku written in English do not have to have a kigo (Jane Reichhold, Writing and Enjoying Haiku, p. 25.) Excellent use of the haiku technique of noun/verb exchange in storms. This is a good haiku from your selection of haiku (the plural of haiku is haiku.)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This is a good summer haiku. samidare, June rains, and yudachi, evening shower, sudden shower, are both kigo for summer (William J. Higginson, The Haiku Handbook, p. 272.) However, the Shiki Salon of Matsuyama University ruled in 2000 that haiku written in English do not have to have a kigo (Jane Reichhold, Writing and Enjoying Haiku, p. 25.) Excellent use of the haiku technique of noun/verb exchange in storms. This is a good haiku from your selection of haiku (the plural of haiku is haiku.)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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cool! thanx alvin! :)
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You're welcome. It's best to leave haiku directives to the scholars.
Comment from nomi338
Very good. I have never written a haiku poem but I am just foolhardy enough to accept your challenge. Just please rememberthat when it is laughingly bad, hey it's my first time.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Very good. I have never written a haiku poem but I am just foolhardy enough to accept your challenge. Just please rememberthat when it is laughingly bad, hey it's my first time.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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LOL! you can do it! :)
Comment from Adri7enne
Fun stuff, these challenges, uh? I wonder who challenged who?
You created an interesting nature situation and brought it to a fitting end. Well done. Good luck in the challenge.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Fun stuff, these challenges, uh? I wonder who challenged who?
You created an interesting nature situation and brought it to a fitting end. Well done. Good luck in the challenge.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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i made the challenge to check them out :)
Comment from 7thpoet
I would caution you Shelley that while a word such as would or doubt have only one syllable, it is why the Japanese specify sounds. Doubt could be sounded as " d-ou-bt", thereby giving ot three sounds rather than one. The haiku also is usually a season based writing. Interesting these haiku's...
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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I would caution you Shelley that while a word such as would or doubt have only one syllable, it is why the Japanese specify sounds. Doubt could be sounded as " d-ou-bt", thereby giving ot three sounds rather than one. The haiku also is usually a season based writing. Interesting these haiku's...
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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thank you 7th :)
Comment from solsymfune
This haiku is great. I love that you gave the storms an emotion of depression instead of maybe anger. Sheets of rain is very vivid and perfect that you portrayed the sky color. People may assume the color of the sky to be dark but I enjoyed the fact you pointed it out after an intense action to add to the whole idea. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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This haiku is great. I love that you gave the storms an emotion of depression instead of maybe anger. Sheets of rain is very vivid and perfect that you portrayed the sky color. People may assume the color of the sky to be dark but I enjoyed the fact you pointed it out after an intense action to add to the whole idea. Wonderful!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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thank you sols :)
Comment from ksherwoodrn
Simple, short verse that contains a wealth of truth. I am sure it must feel like storm clouds to those that suffer from this terrible disease....kathleen
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Simple, short verse that contains a wealth of truth. I am sure it must feel like storm clouds to those that suffer from this terrible disease....kathleen
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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thank you kathleen :)
