Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Poetry in the Blood"A collection of my poems
44 total reviews
Comment from ravenriter
kiwisteveh, LOVED this! I enjoyed the glorious, almost organic mix of syllables and the way you expressed the knife-edge enjoyment of what we writers do. Shall we not cut ourselves, if we might bleed wonderful words? Would not even death be worth it? Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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kiwisteveh, LOVED this! I enjoyed the glorious, almost organic mix of syllables and the way you expressed the knife-edge enjoyment of what we writers do. Shall we not cut ourselves, if we might bleed wonderful words? Would not even death be worth it? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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Thank you for the Six - I appreciate it - not quite sure if I'm ready to die for my art yet...
Steve
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Maybe not, but it sounds GOOD on paper! Thanks again.
Comment from deborah777
I like the emotions, imagery and humor expressed through this piece.
I can identify with the urgency to finish a piece of work before the 'deadline' only to have it completely vanish off my PC when I've completed it and forgot to 'save' it... My version of the last two lines in the poem.
Well done for using all the poetic disciplines in the piece!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2011
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I like the emotions, imagery and humor expressed through this piece.
I can identify with the urgency to finish a piece of work before the 'deadline' only to have it completely vanish off my PC when I've completed it and forgot to 'save' it... My version of the last two lines in the poem.
Well done for using all the poetic disciplines in the piece!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2011
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I see you've been portfolio-peeking!
This was one of those story poems that took on a life of its own towards the end. It can be read without the final stanza and there's a totally different feel.
Comment from C'est Moi
I don't give six stars easily, but I think this poem earned it. The subject was wonderfully handled, the rhymes didn't feel forced and scanned well. The rhythm wasn't off and best of all, the ending made me laugh out loud. For real. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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I don't give six stars easily, but I think this poem earned it. The subject was wonderfully handled, the rhymes didn't feel forced and scanned well. The rhythm wasn't off and best of all, the ending made me laugh out loud. For real. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I appreciate the six stars - like you, I am reluctant to part with them. I wasn't quite sure about the ending - I considered leaving it off, but the irony was too delicious to resist!
Comment from Galadriel's Lyric
This is so well done! I love it! Perfect form from 1st line to last. Amazing poetic inspiration. Certainly one of the best examples of poetic prowess I haev read lately. Excellent!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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This is so well done! I love it! Perfect form from 1st line to last. Amazing poetic inspiration. Certainly one of the best examples of poetic prowess I haev read lately. Excellent!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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i am flattered - thank you very much!
Steve
Comment from volunteer angel
Sometimes we poets feel like making our masterpiece go up in smoke. LOL We are drained and that's true. Your writing in quatrains is the best one of all the forms, I believe. I use it all the time myself. Poetry is in the blood! I can relate to that! LOL Great poem! Good luck in the contest. V.A.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Sometimes we poets feel like making our masterpiece go up in smoke. LOL We are drained and that's true. Your writing in quatrains is the best one of all the forms, I believe. I use it all the time myself. Poetry is in the blood! I can relate to that! LOL Great poem! Good luck in the contest. V.A.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you. I actually wrote this before I spotted that there was a contest available, so yes, I like to write in quatrains too
Comment from Yeti777
Marvelous piece of poetry. I really enjoyed each stanza as much as any other throughout this poem. Great and creative post!! Sean
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Marvelous piece of poetry. I really enjoyed each stanza as much as any other throughout this poem. Great and creative post!! Sean
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you!
Comment from WilliamDeen
Excellent work that should do very well in the contest. The reading flowed well, you had some good rhymes, a touch of humor, and a nice ending. Good Work!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Excellent work that should do very well in the contest. The reading flowed well, you had some good rhymes, a touch of humor, and a nice ending. Good Work!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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I am expectithe competition to be strong for this, but fingers crossed. Thanks for the review
Comment from JennieClare
This is a most worthy contender for the contest. I feel very sorry for the poet who literally gave his life but the poetry died with him. Good flow and excellent meter. Jennieclare
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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This is a most worthy contender for the contest. I feel very sorry for the poet who literally gave his life but the poetry died with him. Good flow and excellent meter. Jennieclare
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you, Jennie.
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You're welcome. Jennie
Comment from rhymelord
Dear steve,
What gorgeous black humour, as well as flawless execution of rhyme and metre. You certainly know how to craft a poem with a punch line. This had me going right to the end, believing it to be some tragic story. Great one, cobber.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Dear steve,
What gorgeous black humour, as well as flawless execution of rhyme and metre. You certainly know how to craft a poem with a punch line. This had me going right to the end, believing it to be some tragic story. Great one, cobber.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thanks, Reg. I did think of leaving the last stanza off - which would have made it a quite different tale!
Comment from Frankeddy
You have put a mysterious story into a beautiful rhyming poem. Nice flow and
keeps the interest growing.. Enjoyable.
Good luck. Frankeddy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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You have put a mysterious story into a beautiful rhyming poem. Nice flow and
keeps the interest growing.. Enjoyable.
Good luck. Frankeddy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the review.