Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Bathroom Incident"A collection of my poems
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Comment from Gladness
Had to read this one to my husband so we could laugh together. I love the hilarious exaggerations...mothers clutching their children...etc. this is a book I am looking forward to!
Anita
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Had to read this one to my husband so we could laugh together. I love the hilarious exaggerations...mothers clutching their children...etc. this is a book I am looking forward to!
Anita
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Anita.
I have recently recovered enough to be able to go back into the bathroom.
Steve
Comment from Sanku
This poem poem is quite funny ,but what impressed me is the classic execution of every line with meter and rhyme, never even once I felt the rhyme to be forced (how clever! fair sex and chromosome x ),this prompted me to read your two more poems in this book of poems .I liked "cherchez -La- Femme " the best.Poetry in The blood too has the same mastery of words-interesting ,but tragic tale of poet and his poem.I want to give six for all three ,but since that is not possible here are my six stars for this one
p.s. I really believed Marie Antoinette did say that infamous line which we use left ,right and center.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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This poem poem is quite funny ,but what impressed me is the classic execution of every line with meter and rhyme, never even once I felt the rhyme to be forced (how clever! fair sex and chromosome x ),this prompted me to read your two more poems in this book of poems .I liked "cherchez -La- Femme " the best.Poetry in The blood too has the same mastery of words-interesting ,but tragic tale of poet and his poem.I want to give six for all three ,but since that is not possible here are my six stars for this one
p.s. I really believed Marie Antoinette did say that infamous line which we use left ,right and center.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Sanku, thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars - AND for taking the time to read more poems from the book. I surprised myself when I created the book to find there were 39 suitable poems - and that's not counting the Cheezel the Weasel series and the Acrostic Fairy-Tales which have their own books.
As for Marie Antoinette, she popped up on my TV screen just the other day - apparently that infamous phrase had been well-known 30 years before she even became Queen, so she might have said it, but she was just quoting somebody else.
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
I am so sorry ...but I can barely see the screen for tears. This is one of those scenarios, over which one rolls up with with laughter, all the while feeling incredibly guilty.
LC
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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I am so sorry ...but I can barely see the screen for tears. This is one of those scenarios, over which one rolls up with with laughter, all the while feeling incredibly guilty.
LC
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, LC - hop you have got over your hysterics by now.
Steve
Comment from Keronica
"Well I'll be danged!" That was hilarious!... somewhat... but ya know, that there ding dong is a sensitive place for our male counterparts, mmmhmmm. I really enjoyed this story-like poem from top to finish it was grand! ;)
Thanks for sharing again!
~K
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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"Well I'll be danged!" That was hilarious!... somewhat... but ya know, that there ding dong is a sensitive place for our male counterparts, mmmhmmm. I really enjoyed this story-like poem from top to finish it was grand! ;)
Thanks for sharing again!
~K
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Keronica - I have now recovered enough to go back in the shower again!
Steve
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LOL! :D You're welcome!
Comment from RGstar
Wow, this was a long poem, but I have to admit, you kept the humor coming which is a difficult feat for something so long.
I also write long but my rhymes do not come so quickly as in an aabb structure.
This was a formidable write maintaining the balance throughout.
You did very well.
best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Wow, this was a long poem, but I have to admit, you kept the humor coming which is a difficult feat for something so long.
I also write long but my rhymes do not come so quickly as in an aabb structure.
This was a formidable write maintaining the balance throughout.
You did very well.
best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you.
I don't really worry about length if the flow is going nicely.
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, dear. That had to be painful. Excellent rhymes and rhythm to make the story fun to read. You do tell a humorous story. Looks like this is a contest entry, so best of luck.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Oh, dear. That had to be painful. Excellent rhymes and rhythm to make the story fun to read. You do tell a humorous story. Looks like this is a contest entry, so best of luck.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you.
This was a revived post so the contest was over and done long ago with no joy for me.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
During time of moving in flight, trouble can come in a dreadful flight. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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During time of moving in flight, trouble can come in a dreadful flight. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Les. Charlie
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved your story in a poem. I am female but have two sons and a husband. I know your pain. What made it worse was that it was self inflicted. Great rhyming and the flow was great. It didn't sem forced or awkward anywhere. Great tale and great rhythm. nicely done.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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I loved your story in a poem. I am female but have two sons and a husband. I know your pain. What made it worse was that it was self inflicted. Great rhyming and the flow was great. It didn't sem forced or awkward anywhere. Great tale and great rhythm. nicely done.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Donya Quijote
Hahahahaha. I am laughing out loud at this most unfortunate happening. No sympathy from will you get when it's a rule for one for have broken. And amusing slip in the shower...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hahahahaha. I am laughing out loud at this most unfortunate happening. No sympathy from will you get when it's a rule for one for have broken. And amusing slip in the shower...
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from 9999pool
At the end of the story we may wonder whether we should shudder and squeaked in pain or should we burst out laughing. The guys will truly understand this type of accidents and now the ladies will be glad they are born differently, smiles.
A Good story with a twist that landed him on the wrong side or should i say, part of the body, LOL.
Cheerio, Rithcie. :))
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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At the end of the story we may wonder whether we should shudder and squeaked in pain or should we burst out laughing. The guys will truly understand this type of accidents and now the ladies will be glad they are born differently, smiles.
A Good story with a twist that landed him on the wrong side or should i say, part of the body, LOL.
Cheerio, Rithcie. :))
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ritchie.
I've almost recovered enough to take showers again now.
Steve
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Good on you mate. Better use an anti-slip mat this time around. The next incident may not be good as well, big smiles. :))
Ritchie. :))