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Reflections For The New Day

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Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
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Oh my God this is an outstanding piece of work. All on this website need to read this. We should find a way to pump this to the top of the reader board. I tell you what, every soul on this site needs to be looking deep within at who they truly are and quit trying to hide behind their damn masks. As you can see you struck a chord with me today. Outstanding. I wonder if you are open to putting some punctuation in here?

You think you hide
Who you are
with your careful words,
Only to find that
Your words are
Recognized as a mask,
Look deeply at
Yourself and your
Inner man.
This person within
Is the one you
try to hide from.
Let him be first
Revealed to you,
Accept who he is
With imperfection,
With great traits.
Understand him first
Then reveal yourself.
When you hide from
The man within
You are held captive
By the truth.
Let him be acknowledged
Only after you accept
Him for all that he is.
You will be surprised
By those who are
Longing to meet,
This man who
Hides within.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2004

Comment from Sentra
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Very interesting Jewell, I bow to these words. I've known for a long time the man hidden behind this mask, yet only chose to accept my person just a few years ago. Since this has happened its been an incredible ride like one I have never known before.

Jewell, you spoke with such profound words and deep inner wisdom that I shall come back to this many times. I look forward to reading through your portfolio. Would you mind if I add you to my buddy list? ~winks~

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2004

Comment from Graceheart
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Such wisdom you provide your readers in these words from your soul. This type of teaching is uncommon for this web site. You do it with such grace and thoughtfulness as well! Makes a fellow really want to do some soul searching, something I was already in the process of. Thank you for a wonderful read! Very professionally done! Really enjoyed your thoughts here!

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2004

Comment from DerivedBetter
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This was a great poem. I really like it. My only problem ( and it is minor) is that I think the flow could be worked on a little. It seems to run without pause, and in a few areas some pauses seem to be needed.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2004

Comment from Pili Pubul
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Good example of introspection, to write a solid honest poem. Your advise is very real and excellent, be yourself instead of trying to portray what you think others want you to be. True caring can only be born by truly knowing the person as it really is. Great images , choice of words and feelings.

"You are held captive
By the truth.
Let him be acknowledged
Only after you accept
Him for all that he is.
You will be surprised
By those who are
Longing to meet
This man who
Hides within. "

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2004

Comment from Creativespace
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The past may be pain to some...this is admirably written, as an acceptance to something that everyone ignores; of course the truth will always come out.
The saying 'Be Yourself' comes to mind when i read this.

Truly appreciated and understood.

creativespacexxxxx

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2004