My First snow
Sweet childhood memory38 total reviews
Comment from CKLA
It's not difficult to see why this won first place. It was fantastic.
It's a wonderfully magical and imaginative story with great imagery.
Congratulations
Collette
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It's not difficult to see why this won first place. It was fantastic.
It's a wonderfully magical and imaginative story with great imagery.
Congratulations
Collette
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
Comment from minopavlic
The images in your mind must be dancing within a frenzy. The scene you portrayed is certainly one where tales of fantasy are born, in the innocent mind and heart of a child. As the orange splits, there appears a fairy. What a creative imagination you have.
About winning the contest on this one, wasn't a doubt in my mind.
Mino
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The images in your mind must be dancing within a frenzy. The scene you portrayed is certainly one where tales of fantasy are born, in the innocent mind and heart of a child. As the orange splits, there appears a fairy. What a creative imagination you have.
About winning the contest on this one, wasn't a doubt in my mind.
Mino
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi apelle,
It is easy to understand that this story won the competition. I love fantasy and faeries so this story appeals to me. Your imagery is so well done I could almost see that little orange fairy. What a lovely concept. Congrats on your win. Blessings, chey
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Hi apelle,
It is easy to understand that this story won the competition. I love fantasy and faeries so this story appeals to me. Your imagery is so well done I could almost see that little orange fairy. What a lovely concept. Congrats on your win. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
Comment from Ponder
Hi Apelle,
I see this has won a first - and it deserves to. The fantasy world of a child is so well written here that it almost takes the breath away.
You have written an excellent story here, full of spectacular imagery and it shows off your creative flair.
Congratulations,
Jules
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Hi Apelle,
I see this has won a first - and it deserves to. The fantasy world of a child is so well written here that it almost takes the breath away.
You have written an excellent story here, full of spectacular imagery and it shows off your creative flair.
Congratulations,
Jules
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
Comment from kylielynn
Very nice. Well deserving of the win. I love seeing things through a child's eyes. everything is so fun and simple then. Thanks you for giving me that moment tonight. Keep up the good work. Congrats
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Very nice. Well deserving of the win. I love seeing things through a child's eyes. everything is so fun and simple then. Thanks you for giving me that moment tonight. Keep up the good work. Congrats
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
Comment from bhogg
This was a lovely story with beautiful imagery. I can see why you did well in the contest. I'm probably too old to see the orange fairy. Wish I could though!
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This was a lovely story with beautiful imagery. I can see why you did well in the contest. I'm probably too old to see the orange fairy. Wish I could though!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2010
Comment from midgev
Very sweet story, you met the challenge of the contest well. Very innocent and dreamlike. I enjoyed reading it very much.. Good luck with the contest, Midge
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Very sweet story, you met the challenge of the contest well. Very innocent and dreamlike. I enjoyed reading it very much.. Good luck with the contest, Midge
Comment Written 16-Jun-2010
Comment from c_lucas
This is a well written story, but I could not see a young writing it. You show you are very talented and writing from a child's point of view is difficult. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a well written story, but I could not see a young writing it. You show you are very talented and writing from a child's point of view is difficult. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
Comment from fictionwriter
I've never heard of the orange fairy. I loved how the snow gradually switched from blue to white. What a great little story. Well done.
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I've never heard of the orange fairy. I loved how the snow gradually switched from blue to white. What a great little story. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
Comment from jdiderrich
If this is supposed to be a memory, I wonder if it would read better in the past tense. I like the similes, but I think some might have better impact if they came first and the "fact" part followed. I love the orange opening to reveal the fairy, but I'd like to see her and the scene clearer.
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If this is supposed to be a memory, I wonder if it would read better in the past tense. I like the similes, but I think some might have better impact if they came first and the "fact" part followed. I love the orange opening to reveal the fairy, but I'd like to see her and the scene clearer.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010