The Steep Price
a casualty32 total reviews
Comment from afternoonlight
Sad. Did you stay? Vietnam my father was stationed Coast Guard in Hawaii and I was a teenager on the Marine Base riding horses, and the soldiers were just nineteen not that much older to me and they went and were lost, did not come home, and I cried too same as you. Peace.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Sad. Did you stay? Vietnam my father was stationed Coast Guard in Hawaii and I was a teenager on the Marine Base riding horses, and the soldiers were just nineteen not that much older to me and they went and were lost, did not come home, and I cried too same as you. Peace.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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afternoondelight, thank you so very much for stopping by. No, sadly I did not. I ended up marrying another gentleman who had just returned from Viet Nam, and although we had 4 beautiful children together, our marriage needed 17 years later. He was never the same after Viet Nam. He became a raging alcoholic and never spoke of Viet NAM. Do not get me wrong, he was good man, but his demons got the best of him. When our youngest son left for Iraq, he broke down and it was such a tragic sight. I knew he was reliving Viet Nam at that moment and he feared for his son which he loves so very very much..well did not mean to get off on that..anyway thank you so very much for stopping by..jlsavell
Comment from PUPA
What a very sad story, jlsavell, the phsycological and mental scars can sometimes even worse than the physical. Sorry to hear it s bio. I like the short lines, rhyme is great and flow very smooth.
Well done and good luck.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 29-May-2010
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What a very sad story, jlsavell, the phsycological and mental scars can sometimes even worse than the physical. Sorry to hear it s bio. I like the short lines, rhyme is great and flow very smooth.
Well done and good luck.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 29-May-2010
reply by the author on 29-May-2010
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Pupa, hello, thank you once again. I am moved and humbled that you would read my poems that are not even promoted. It is very kind of you. Sadly it is a true story, but then I went on to marry another who had just returned from the Viet Nam war. After 17 years we parted. His burden was too great for him to carry much less I. We are still good friends, we have our children, but he is still weighed down with the memories of that war.again thank you so very much...jlsavell
Comment from bard owl
War does terrible things to the heart and mind of mortals. Your words could describe my brother, Bill. He was never the same when he returned from service with the Air Force. Excellently sad imagery in this piece, showing how horror exacts such devastation to the soul. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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War does terrible things to the heart and mind of mortals. Your words could describe my brother, Bill. He was never the same when he returned from service with the Air Force. Excellently sad imagery in this piece, showing how horror exacts such devastation to the soul. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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bard owl, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my poem. I appreciate your time, your wonderful comments and excellent review. I think this is an all too familiar story that will never change as long as man dominates man and wars continue. again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi jlsavell,
This is such a sad poem and one I relate to. I was married at 18 and my husband went to war too. He was wounded twice but came home safe. Till the day he died he owned the scars of war. You wrote this piece extremely well. Some war wounds are mental and not physical but they are wounds just the same. Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Hi jlsavell,
This is such a sad poem and one I relate to. I was married at 18 and my husband went to war too. He was wounded twice but came home safe. Till the day he died he owned the scars of war. You wrote this piece extremely well. Some war wounds are mental and not physical but they are wounds just the same. Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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cheyennewy, thank you so very much fro stopping by to read and review my poetry. I am honored. I apologize for the late delay in responding..again thank you so very very much...jlsavell
Comment from Judith Ann
This poem is fantastic. My husband, father and grandfather, as well as uncles and cousins served in various wars and conflicts. Your words ring so true and so sad. I really liked this piece as it is filled with the honest facts of war and how it changes those who served. The line, So now this man
who loved me so
lives in the past
and can't let go
really touched me. Well done. -Judy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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This poem is fantastic. My husband, father and grandfather, as well as uncles and cousins served in various wars and conflicts. Your words ring so true and so sad. I really liked this piece as it is filled with the honest facts of war and how it changes those who served. The line, So now this man
who loved me so
lives in the past
and can't let go
really touched me. Well done. -Judy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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Judith Ann, I apologize profusely for just answering this review. Thank you so very very much. jlsavell
Comment from Jersey Dreamer
Hi poet,
Your poem is absolutely a joy to read, I have no doubt this will be a contest winner,
Thank you for sharing your poetic mind.
Kind regards
Jersey Dreamer
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Hi poet,
Your poem is absolutely a joy to read, I have no doubt this will be a contest winner,
Thank you for sharing your poetic mind.
Kind regards
Jersey Dreamer
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Jersey Dreamer, goodness this is so humbling..thank you so very much!!!!
Comment from azwildrosa
hmm, wow, what a great poem. sad in every way. so sad the way he changed. a lost love, a sad poem indeed. beautifully written! thank you for sharing and best wishes in the constest!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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hmm, wow, what a great poem. sad in every way. so sad the way he changed. a lost love, a sad poem indeed. beautifully written! thank you for sharing and best wishes in the constest!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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azwildrose, thank you so very much for such a wonderful review.
Comment from LateBloomer
hello author,
this is a sad, but too often true, story of war.
this poem reads and flows exceptionally well and i have no suggestion for improvement.
of particular note: (boy went to war)
then he came back a broken man.
good luck in the contest. regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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hello author,
this is a sad, but too often true, story of war.
this poem reads and flows exceptionally well and i have no suggestion for improvement.
of particular note: (boy went to war)
then he came back a broken man.
good luck in the contest. regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Late Bloomer, I, once again am so humbled and honored by an exceptional review. Thank you so much!!
Comment from adewpearl
This poem is extremely well-composed with strong cadence and strong abcb rhyme and it tells a story that is not only sad but terribly tragic. This could also have been a fine entry in the story poem contest - you tell the story so compellingly as this young man goes from a school boy in love to a young man whose mind and spirit have been ravaged by the effects of war. Narrating it from the point of view of the girlfriend makes it all the more compelling. This should do exceptionally well in this contest. Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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This poem is extremely well-composed with strong cadence and strong abcb rhyme and it tells a story that is not only sad but terribly tragic. This could also have been a fine entry in the story poem contest - you tell the story so compellingly as this young man goes from a school boy in love to a young man whose mind and spirit have been ravaged by the effects of war. Narrating it from the point of view of the girlfriend makes it all the more compelling. This should do exceptionally well in this contest. Brooke
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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adewpearl, it is so good to hear from you. Thank you so very much for stopping by. I am honored..
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You can be even more honored because I voted for you :-)
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Brooke, thank you. I am speechless..truly..thank you my wonderful storytelling friend..
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, how sad is this!!
the content, the flow
to the words, rhythm
and rhyme, all excellent.
He use to say
He used to say
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Oh, how sad is this!!
the content, the flow
to the words, rhythm
and rhyme, all excellent.
He use to say
He used to say
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Margaret Snowden, thank you so very much for such a wonderful review!!