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A book of a mixture of stories

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Comment from RobinWrites
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This is a great kidnapping and loved the surprise anniversary present she received. Well written and had me wondering if it wasn't her husband, who knew her that well. Great job.

 Comment Written 06-May-2010

reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Robin,

    Sorry it has taken me so long to respond. I truly appreciate your continued suppport and all your kindness. Carol
Comment from jl & bandit
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Yeh, I saw this one comming... But it is still a very well written story.

Very well thought out, and fun...
I like the twist too.
You're done well with this pormpt, I wish you well in the contest.
JL&B

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    jl & bandit

    My sincerest apologies for not being on the site to respond to your kind comments. Thank you so much. Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Carol,
first thing I wish you loads of luck in the contest
You definitely had my full attention while reading your entry.
I loved the idea of let's say, reviving ones marriage
smiles
Gert

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Gert,

    Hope you are enjoying your rest...Take care and thank you for all the kind wishes. Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
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I enjoyed your kidnapping story so much, Carol. Very entertaining, and the ending has a delicious twist that made the story a treat.
Smiles,
Karyn :>)

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
    Karyn,

    It was my anniversary the other day so I thought I should write my honey a story with a little spice from the good ole days...before we became old and decrepid. LOL Smiles, Carol
Comment from suzzy
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this is a really good story -held my interest all the way to the end-which was a great surprise,good sensory description, i smiled at the fact you kept refering to the writer mode kicking in-good writting

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    suzzy,

    Thank you so much for your kind comments and for enjoying the story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from franban
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Great story with just enough detail to keep the reader interested. I was pleased to see that although you realize where this story is headed at some point it was not to early to make reading the rest of it a chore. Well done.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    franburn,

    Thank you for reading and sharing your comments. I appreciate the thoughts. Smiles, Carol
Comment from sugardog
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Nice job! Carol, I enjoyed your creative approach to this sweet little kidnapping story. Yours had a happy ending! Interesting way to show his wife he didn't forget their anniversary...good thing she didn't freak out and do him any harm.

"I don't care if it's-You(you)didn't forget?"

Thanks for an entertaining read. Good luck. :) Dana

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Dana,

    Thank you for your generous response to my story. I always appreciate when someone else enjoys my work. Smiles, Carol
Comment from wierdgrace
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I truly loved the character you put into this story, I was locked into the words from the start, not looking for errors or revisions, well done, great twist as the contest requires, good luck.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    wierdgrace,

    Thanks so much for reading and enjoying. I appreciate it so much.

    Smiles Carol
Comment from Sandollar
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I loved this. I liked the twist, and a friendly kidnapping is usually the best kind, right? Your descriptions were spot on. I could sympathize when he walked out without kissing her goodbye. This story was very interesting and moved at the right pace. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for entering.
Only one little thing. Just close quotes.

My back arched as I greeted his touch. "Yeah, later.

Sandollar

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Sandollar,

    Thank you so much for enjoying the story and sending me all your kind comments. I truly appreciate the time and thoughts.

    smiles, Carol
Comment from Suzie B
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Some twist Carol! Yeehah...if only all writers block could be removed that way I'd deliberately develop it and then advertize.

Well written as always my friend and good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Suzie

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Suzie,

    You and me both, girl friend. Not a bad way to spend the afternoon when you can't think of how to end a story, now is it? Smiles, Carol