Christmas Dinner 1948
It was a special time35 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a wonderful short story about a family Christmas dinner. We were luck that we didn't have a constant whiner like you did, even though we had eight children at ours.
I like the way you tell it from your childhood persona's point of view.
Congrats on winning the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
joan
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This is a wonderful short story about a family Christmas dinner. We were luck that we didn't have a constant whiner like you did, even though we had eight children at ours.
I like the way you tell it from your childhood persona's point of view.
Congrats on winning the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
joan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Another 1st! Just like the Christmas you finally got to go home to. What a glorious day that you describe here. Such sweet memories we have of past
Christmas Days. How blessed we are to have that special time each year, over and over. I love it.
"I wonder why that makes me feel more sicker. " (This is precious)
XX Ralf
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Another 1st! Just like the Christmas you finally got to go home to. What a glorious day that you describe here. Such sweet memories we have of past
Christmas Days. How blessed we are to have that special time each year, over and over. I love it.
"I wonder why that makes me feel more sicker. " (This is precious)
XX Ralf
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you dear Ralf. Yes, it was very memorable for me. :) xxBob
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I have two questions.
1. Do you have a cellar?
2. Do you still have your Roy Rogers
watch?
LOL Ralf
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Answers: No and No. :) Bob
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Thanks, Bob.
It's good to see your picture is back. I get to see your benevolent countenance. :)Ralf
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Yeah, I don't know why my picture keeps coming down?? : ) Bob
Comment from wheelswrites
Love this. Had to read something of yours. I can ditto so much of the 1948 Christmas. I didn't like fruitcake either. You can write and would love to meet you sometime. Old writers have lots in common.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Love this. Had to read something of yours. I can ditto so much of the 1948 Christmas. I didn't like fruitcake either. You can write and would love to meet you sometime. Old writers have lots in common.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Sally. I appreciate you looking in myarchives..I am not nearly as proud of that as I am some other things I have written...Let me just give you a few if i may: Poetry: "Constant Autumn" and "Regret" Prose: Short Stories "The Interview" and "The Faitfhful" I will be glad to look ove rsome of your work if you will pinpoint your choices...Thanks again, and yes, perhaps we can meet someday for lunch or something...Not until this white stuff is gone though...LOL...Bob
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I do not have very much of my work on here. The one I like the best got low reviews, so I pulled it. Poetry is so in the eyes of the beholder and behold this one as great. Guess I need to take another look at it. I guess the one that has done best is "Newborn". I'm trying to promote a short story called "To Hell with Cleaning Toilets." Has good reviews by the few who have read it.
Comment from Annmuma
You did a masterful job with this one! The tone is just right for a child and the picture painted is crystal clear. No wonder it was a contest winner. Happy New Year. ann
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2009
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You did a masterful job with this one! The tone is just right for a child and the picture painted is crystal clear. No wonder it was a contest winner. Happy New Year. ann
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Ann...I do appreciate our review...you know that...Bob
Comment from bayoupoet
I miss these days, too! It seems families don't get together at least not like that! When my Grandmother and one of my Great-Grandmother was still alive and I was young we'd go to one of their houses almost every weekend! I really enjoyed your poem! sandra
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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I miss these days, too! It seems families don't get together at least not like that! When my Grandmother and one of my Great-Grandmother was still alive and I was young we'd go to one of their houses almost every weekend! I really enjoyed your poem! sandra
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, Sandra. Of course it wasn't a poem, LOL...but I know what you meant. I thank you so much for the kind comments and stars. Bob
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It read lid a free verse poem and I did enjoy it very much, and you are very welcome! sandra
Comment from FanDan
You have captured the point of view and rendered it very faithfully, with perfectly selected wording and focus. Very well done. I can certainly see why this one was a contest winner. It is nice to see that one of the really good ones actually won a contest here.
I noticed one thing you might want to consider changing. It won't damage the child's mindset/focus at all to make this change. It is the word, mincemeat, which is one word like fruitcake, rather than two.
I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for posting this one.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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You have captured the point of view and rendered it very faithfully, with perfectly selected wording and focus. Very well done. I can certainly see why this one was a contest winner. It is nice to see that one of the really good ones actually won a contest here.
I noticed one thing you might want to consider changing. It won't damage the child's mindset/focus at all to make this change. It is the word, mincemeat, which is one word like fruitcake, rather than two.
I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for posting this one.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Dan...Welcome aboard Fanstory. I appreciate your kind review and your help...Bob
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You are very welcome. And thanks for the welcome aboard. I was born in 1948, which fact is what first attracted me to your piece. I was a bit too young that year to later remember anything about that Christmas. But I do remember the radio being the focal point in my grandparents' living room. It was one of those large upright wooden cabinet types. I wish I had it today.
Thanks for signing on as a fan. I don't know how much longer I will be here at FanStory, but I welcome your impressions of the pieces I have posted to date.
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Ahhhh. Why would you wan tto leave? Give it a chance. Thanks for the info and comments...Bob
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I guess it is because there are a lot of problems with the site. When you continually see voting skewed by friendship rather than being devoted to evaluation of the pieces in question, and a system built around how much money you spend rather than the quality of the writing, then the glint seems to dim a bit. I have seen some clearly inferior writing win in competition against clearly superior entries, and I'm not talking about anything I wrote. It is more than a little discouraging. And when you have to pay them for the privilege of looking at that level of injustice, the answer seems to fall clearly into the category of "just say no." But I'll be here for a little while longer.
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My E-mail is Bobahbooe@aol.com...get ahold of me...lots to discuss...LOL...Bob
Comment from rama devi
I love baked squash!
:)
This is a charming write, which certainly sounds like the voice and perspective of a child. Good detail depicting the both the external scene and the interior landscape of your emotions and attitudes in that long ago time.
I can see why it won the contest. Really sees "THOUGH THE EYES OF A CHILD"
Nice artwork choice. LOL
No nits or spags.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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I love baked squash!
:)
This is a charming write, which certainly sounds like the voice and perspective of a child. Good detail depicting the both the external scene and the interior landscape of your emotions and attitudes in that long ago time.
I can see why it won the contest. Really sees "THOUGH THE EYES OF A CHILD"
Nice artwork choice. LOL
No nits or spags.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, rama. I am delighted that you liked it...Happy New Year! Bob
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello again Bob and that was so delightful and true to form for so many household on holidays. Made me a little hungry as it took me back to childhood. Great post!
Thank you again for using my photo, I am honored. He is my grandson, Dawson.
Happy New Year!
Loyd
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Hello again Bob and that was so delightful and true to form for so many household on holidays. Made me a little hungry as it took me back to childhood. Great post!
Thank you again for using my photo, I am honored. He is my grandson, Dawson.
Happy New Year!
Loyd
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Loyd...Your picture is perfect for the tale, isn't it? Bless you my friend...Happy New Year! Bob
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My pleasure and may you have a wonderful New Year! Loyd
Comment from babylonia
bob, (okay ... i had a brain fart on the name thing. please forgive me.)
LOL the list is making me hungry. i love rhubard pie. not something i see mentioned much in a story. you know i have never been to a celebration where they serve fruitcake. my cousin used to make it and everyone said it was good. i just never had any. made me smile and giggle. yeah, i love the way you mention stuff like the radio and fibber magee and molly. when satellite dishes first came out in the early 80s they had a channel that had nostalgia type stuff. they would show old black and white educational films from the 20s and 30s. even a few silent films. it was great. i wish that channel still existed. i know i'd watch it. this is great and it definitely sounds like it is from a child's pov. imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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bob, (okay ... i had a brain fart on the name thing. please forgive me.)
LOL the list is making me hungry. i love rhubard pie. not something i see mentioned much in a story. you know i have never been to a celebration where they serve fruitcake. my cousin used to make it and everyone said it was good. i just never had any. made me smile and giggle. yeah, i love the way you mention stuff like the radio and fibber magee and molly. when satellite dishes first came out in the early 80s they had a channel that had nostalgia type stuff. they would show old black and white educational films from the 20s and 30s. even a few silent films. it was great. i wish that channel still existed. i know i'd watch it. this is great and it definitely sounds like it is from a child's pov. imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Barbara. I appreciate your review so very much. Good in depth analysis...Bob
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you are very welcome~
:P
love,
barbara
Comment from tati
This is truly a great entry for the contest. I loved the story from a kid's perspective, and enjoyed reading it. Your funny notes - especially the word (Maybe) - explained clearly your last line: "I will, in a little while, Aunt Betty," I say. I wonder why that makes me feel more sicker.
Wish you a very Happy New Year, my friend. (tati, Dec. 28, 2009)
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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This is truly a great entry for the contest. I loved the story from a kid's perspective, and enjoyed reading it. Your funny notes - especially the word (Maybe) - explained clearly your last line: "I will, in a little while, Aunt Betty," I say. I wonder why that makes me feel more sicker.
Wish you a very Happy New Year, my friend. (tati, Dec. 28, 2009)
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, Tati...Happy New year to you, also...X0 Bob
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You're welcome, Bob.
tati