Rejoice: Christmas Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "As Carols Sing of Peace on Earth"Christmas poems in various formats.
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Comment from MariJo
I missed this one, Brooke, I was out of state for Thanksgiving week so I am now catching up with reading. This is excellent & very heart warming. It would make a beautiful Christmas card. The whole poem exudes PEACE. You deserve the award.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
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I missed this one, Brooke, I was out of state for Thanksgiving week so I am now catching up with reading. This is excellent & very heart warming. It would make a beautiful Christmas card. The whole poem exudes PEACE. You deserve the award.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, MariJo - I'm so glad you enjoyed this Christmas poem :-) Brooke
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You are welcome---
Comment from fayesh
Wonderful words that express the mood of the season in this short piece. It is in itself a carol. Now, all you need is music, Brooke.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Wonderful words that express the mood of the season in this short piece. It is in itself a carol. Now, all you need is music, Brooke.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Faye, for this kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from TinyTeena
A very simple but important message. The repetition of "As carols sing of peace on Earth" keeps bringing this message back to the reader's attention. It also reminds me of bells ringing, carolers going around the neighbourhood and starting their songs again and also the sound of singing wafting through the winter wind. Great picture to accompany your poem
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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A very simple but important message. The repetition of "As carols sing of peace on Earth" keeps bringing this message back to the reader's attention. It also reminds me of bells ringing, carolers going around the neighbourhood and starting their songs again and also the sound of singing wafting through the winter wind. Great picture to accompany your poem
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, my friend, for your positive comments - could I ask, since you gave this poem a four, where you think it fell short? Brooke
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It's hard to explain - perhaps the brevity and lack of deeper meaning. Many of your poems have so many levels of meaning and leave me wishing for more and wanting to reread them. I don't get this same attachment to this poem. Perhaps too much repetition of the one phrase? Whether just use at beginning and end?
Kristene
Comment from marion
Hi adewpearl
I didn't realize you could say or there was a three syllable way of saying re-a-lize (is that it?. Interesting either way! Its good to learn something new. Another lovely triolet from you - and a terrible reminder for me that Xmas is nearly here and I have made no preparations, nor bought any presents, but I have booked an air ticket back home to spend Xmas with my mum and dad's in the North Island! M.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Hi adewpearl
I didn't realize you could say or there was a three syllable way of saying re-a-lize (is that it?. Interesting either way! Its good to learn something new. Another lovely triolet from you - and a terrible reminder for me that Xmas is nearly here and I have made no preparations, nor bought any presents, but I have booked an air ticket back home to spend Xmas with my mum and dad's in the North Island! M.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Accents are amazing - I had someone else say, I had no idea people could say re/al/ize without using three syllables! LOL I'm so glad you will be able to spend the holidays with your parents :-) Thanks so much, Marion :-) Brooke
Comment from Begin Again
Brooke
Thank you for sharing this wonderful and uplifting poem about the holidays and what they truly should mean to all of us. Peace on Earth...among men, ourselves, and with our faith.
I enjoyed it very much.
Carol
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
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Brooke
Thank you for sharing this wonderful and uplifting poem about the holidays and what they truly should mean to all of us. Peace on Earth...among men, ourselves, and with our faith.
I enjoyed it very much.
Carol
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Carol, for this gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I'm sending my wish for peace heavenwards, too, Brooke. It struck me that the "peace" might be peace on earth (as in, rest from war); peace with God (as in, every person on earth would have peace with God); or peace internally (as in, everybody on earth would have internal peace, peace from strife in relationships, etc.) The last is particularly meaningful to me today as I went to my sweet grandmother's funeral yesterday. It will be hard this Christmas to not have her here, singing the Christmas carols and singing "Happy Birthday, Jesus" when we blow out the candles on our "birthday cake" for Jesus. (She loved that!) As sweet as she was, though, I had an uneasy feeling about how the REST of the family would get along. There is still so much strife and pain over past events and we all desperately need peace on earth (or at least our little corner of it). So I'm wishing for peace, too.
Gorgeously written poem, as always. I like the capitalization of both "heavenwards" and "holy." The "h" sound is hushed, reflecting the meditative desire for peace & quiet.
My favorite lines:
that we might realize the worth
found in these pure and Holy words
Excellent. LK
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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I'm sending my wish for peace heavenwards, too, Brooke. It struck me that the "peace" might be peace on earth (as in, rest from war); peace with God (as in, every person on earth would have peace with God); or peace internally (as in, everybody on earth would have internal peace, peace from strife in relationships, etc.) The last is particularly meaningful to me today as I went to my sweet grandmother's funeral yesterday. It will be hard this Christmas to not have her here, singing the Christmas carols and singing "Happy Birthday, Jesus" when we blow out the candles on our "birthday cake" for Jesus. (She loved that!) As sweet as she was, though, I had an uneasy feeling about how the REST of the family would get along. There is still so much strife and pain over past events and we all desperately need peace on earth (or at least our little corner of it). So I'm wishing for peace, too.
Gorgeously written poem, as always. I like the capitalization of both "heavenwards" and "holy." The "h" sound is hushed, reflecting the meditative desire for peace & quiet.
My favorite lines:
that we might realize the worth
found in these pure and Holy words
Excellent. LK
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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LK, that first Christmas without a beloved relative is always difficult, but I always remind myself that those are the last people who would want to put a damper on the enjoyment of life of those they've left behind. I'm so sorry for your loss and thank you for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi Brooke,
Oh, it feels like Christmas! This is such a lovely poem.
The picture and the feeling of the poem reminds me of old Christmas cards and memories of good old Christmases.
Nice form and nicely written. I love it.
Anabella
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Hi Brooke,
Oh, it feels like Christmas! This is such a lovely poem.
The picture and the feeling of the poem reminds me of old Christmas cards and memories of good old Christmases.
Nice form and nicely written. I love it.
Anabella
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, anabella - I'm so glad I created that picture in your mind :-) Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
Oh, lovely poem. It may be a bit early yet, but at least you've got the right message in it! Wonderful flow and rhyme. Excellent job and good luck in your further work.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Oh, lovely poem. It may be a bit early yet, but at least you've got the right message in it! Wonderful flow and rhyme. Excellent job and good luck in your further work.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Mary. Hey, Advent has begun, and once that happens, it is Christmas season to me :-) Brooke
Comment from Queenise
Brooke this is so pretty. It has a beautiful meaning and the imagery as well as the art work is wonderful. Great pace,rhythm,and flow. Your words remind me of a song of thanksgiving and praise. I know others will enjoy this also. I love the form you used for this. Peace. Queenise
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Brooke this is so pretty. It has a beautiful meaning and the imagery as well as the art work is wonderful. Great pace,rhythm,and flow. Your words remind me of a song of thanksgiving and praise. I know others will enjoy this also. I love the form you used for this. Peace. Queenise
Comment Written 02-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Queenise. I'm so glad you found meaning in this poem :-) Brooke
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You're more than welcome, Brooke. Peace. Queenise
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
A cute little number. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. Good flowing. I only spotted one small error, nothing to get too upset about-
I send my wishes (Heavenwards)
**heavenwards
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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adewpearl,
A cute little number. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. Good flowing. I only spotted one small error, nothing to get too upset about-
I send my wishes (Heavenwards)
**heavenwards
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Oatmeal, for your most thoughtful comments. I always appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke