The Morning Before Sentencing
Daily Life Taken by Injustice30 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
I remember you telling me about this!! I too, made a complaint, and have been harassed now for years...this is no laughing matter, I will have to read the next post, gee, I am glad you are here and writing...Susan
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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I remember you telling me about this!! I too, made a complaint, and have been harassed now for years...this is no laughing matter, I will have to read the next post, gee, I am glad you are here and writing...Susan
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Someone has to do it, or we shall become a police state. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from El.Marjie
Hi Alvin,
I just read your poem, Before Sentencing, and was touched by the feelings of helplessness you must have felt being at the mercy of another person.
As usual, you did your craft well. You didn't know what to do with all that food, did you? Throw it, or keep it in the hope that you would not be sentenced for acting on your beliefs. I hope it turned out well for you. Marjie
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Hi Alvin,
I just read your poem, Before Sentencing, and was touched by the feelings of helplessness you must have felt being at the mercy of another person.
As usual, you did your craft well. You didn't know what to do with all that food, did you? Throw it, or keep it in the hope that you would not be sentenced for acting on your beliefs. I hope it turned out well for you. Marjie
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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It did. I drew a different judge who gave me no jail time, so I made luxury vegetarian dishes with all that food. Thanks for your concern; I do appreciate it. I also appreciate your comments about my poem.
Comment from FanDan
Like Judy Collins and her wonderful clouds, I too have seen the (not so wonderful) police from both sides now. I am essentially powerless in a power-dominated culture, or I would ask if there was anything I could do for your situation. I hope it won't go too badly.
Your poem is a great collection of observations. The only question I have is, do you really keep your onions in the fridge?
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Like Judy Collins and her wonderful clouds, I too have seen the (not so wonderful) police from both sides now. I am essentially powerless in a power-dominated culture, or I would ask if there was anything I could do for your situation. I hope it won't go too badly.
Your poem is a great collection of observations. The only question I have is, do you really keep your onions in the fridge?
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Yes, they stay fresher longer that way.
As far as what happened, I drew a different judge who saw through the police set-up and gave me no jail time. I am very grateful.
Thanks for a good review.
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Glad to hear the good news.
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Thank you. Even if I had it all to do over again, I would still post the articles about police corruption, racism, and the murder and planting of evidence in the town in which I live (Claremont, California.)
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi Alvin. This is an interesting, reflective poem. You've well penned this haunting poem, made even more so by the author's notes. I am so dismayed by our criminal justice system and my best wishes are with you.
These two lines just sent chills down my spine.
"Because my fate lies in the hand of another man--
A judge who has admitted his mood affects his sentencing. "
An excellent poem. Thanks for sharing. -ray
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Hi Alvin. This is an interesting, reflective poem. You've well penned this haunting poem, made even more so by the author's notes. I am so dismayed by our criminal justice system and my best wishes are with you.
These two lines just sent chills down my spine.
"Because my fate lies in the hand of another man--
A judge who has admitted his mood affects his sentencing. "
An excellent poem. Thanks for sharing. -ray
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks for a great review. Luckily, after this was written, I drew a different judge and he gave me no jail time.
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Thank goodness! You had me quite worried! -r
Comment from fictionwriter
I hate the judges. They are always thinking they're above the rest of us. Leanancy isn't really their forte is it? Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I hate the judges. They are always thinking they're above the rest of us. Leanancy isn't really their forte is it? Very nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Well, at least I drew a decent judge the third time around (right after this was written.) What angers me is the corruption. Thanks for a good review.
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By the way, I received no jail time.
Comment from BJean
I said a prayer for you, Al. You certainly have brought us into your anxious feelings, but God is in control when we surrender all. Hang on! Great free verse poem. Hugs, Jean
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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I said a prayer for you, Al. You certainly have brought us into your anxious feelings, but God is in control when we surrender all. Hang on! Great free verse poem. Hugs, Jean
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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The event has already happened. I drew a different judge and received no jail time--I think he saw through the set-up. I am sure your prayers were efficacious. Have you read my poem Thy Grace? You were one of the people I had in mind when I wrote it. Is there anything of yours you would like me to review?
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Just as a testimony and because I caught a statement in a comment of yours that you are facing a probable shortened life (but nothing can take away what God ordains as your time to live, if He wants longer!!) You might enjoy My Story about when my seventeen year old was taken in a car wreck if you haven't read it. I will keep you in my prayers. Love, Jean
Comment from amel
Oh I could grab the sad feeling here, very heartfelt with obvious emotion. Then the last line was impressed me, so wonderful "A judge who has admitted his mood affects his sentencing....I hope he had a good breakfast." Excellent, Alvin. ----blessings, amel
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Oh I could grab the sad feeling here, very heartfelt with obvious emotion. Then the last line was impressed me, so wonderful "A judge who has admitted his mood affects his sentencing....I hope he had a good breakfast." Excellent, Alvin. ----blessings, amel
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
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By the way, I received no jail time.
Comment from dj
I like this piece. In times of personal crisis, one often notes the little things in life that really aren't so little such as gym bags, ironing undone, a carton of milk. You've captured this well.
Your use of repitition with the word "which" chronicles the list of things ticking through the speaker's mind as he waits. This is strong.
There is tension throughout the piece that reaches a climax in the line, my fate lies in the hand of another man. This too, is a strong line that is right where it ought to be to emphasize the speaker's impotence.
Your line, I hope he had a good breakfast, brings the reader to the ultimate cruelty of all, hope.
Well written! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I like this piece. In times of personal crisis, one often notes the little things in life that really aren't so little such as gym bags, ironing undone, a carton of milk. You've captured this well.
Your use of repitition with the word "which" chronicles the list of things ticking through the speaker's mind as he waits. This is strong.
There is tension throughout the piece that reaches a climax in the line, my fate lies in the hand of another man. This too, is a strong line that is right where it ought to be to emphasize the speaker's impotence.
Your line, I hope he had a good breakfast, brings the reader to the ultimate cruelty of all, hope.
Well written! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks for understanding exactly the structure I wanted to convey. I truly appreciate it.
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By the way, I received no jail time.
Comment from rogerpolly
I found this to be a visually compelling piece, filled with angst and uncertainty. How unfortunate that much of it seems to apply to your own situation! I wish you well on your upcoming visit to the hanging judge.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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I found this to be a visually compelling piece, filled with angst and uncertainty. How unfortunate that much of it seems to apply to your own situation! I wish you well on your upcoming visit to the hanging judge.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thank you. It's already happened, and the judge I drew gave me no jail time. Sometimes the system works.
Comment from patmedium
Well, Alvin, we will await your first posting afterwards, to see. Good luck. This is a marvellous write, because it still shows what we British know as the 'stiff upper lip' ...namely, a glimmer of humor as you step towards? Pat.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Well, Alvin, we will await your first posting afterwards, to see. Good luck. This is a marvellous write, because it still shows what we British know as the 'stiff upper lip' ...namely, a glimmer of humor as you step towards? Pat.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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This was written a while ago. I drew a different judge who saw the set-up and gave me no jail time. Thank God.
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Thank heavens for that, then. Pat.