My Love - My Life
I can't imagine life without you22 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I found your dedication and picture touching, and I am sure the recipient of this poem was thrilled. I thoroughly enjoyed your rhymes and personally identified with the sentiments (especially since my husband and I are best friends and, I think you know, have been married 38 years). I enjoyed the your thoughts circled back with the repeat of the required line at the end. This is a very strong contest entry. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2009
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I found your dedication and picture touching, and I am sure the recipient of this poem was thrilled. I thoroughly enjoyed your rhymes and personally identified with the sentiments (especially since my husband and I are best friends and, I think you know, have been married 38 years). I enjoyed the your thoughts circled back with the repeat of the required line at the end. This is a very strong contest entry. Best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2009
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Thank you Joan, I enjoyed writing this.
My husband is currently fighting cancer (and winning) but it makes one stop and think, what if I never see him again?
Thanks for review and ratings
Warmest Regards
Marijke
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Oh, I am so sorry to hear about his battle but cheer his victory. My husband licked the big "C" as a twelve-year-old boy, when he had the male version of a mastectomy. That was fifty-three years ago and he has had no recurrence. Modern medicine has made such advances since then that are now available to help patients like your husband. I wish you both very many more years of happy anniversaries. -Joan
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. I do miss some poetic vehicles, though--a wide use of vocabulary and definitive descriptions. The emotion comes through quite well, though, and the key to the poem is in the penultimate line.
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. I do miss some poetic vehicles, though--a wide use of vocabulary and definitive descriptions. The emotion comes through quite well, though, and the key to the poem is in the penultimate line.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and rating. I like to keep my poetry simple, so it can be understood by all. But I appreciate your advice, and will attempt to add a widen the vocabulary used.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
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Remember, I am only one reviewer and in a style that is out of fashion in most of the English-speaking world (traditional formalism.)
Comment from sgalletti
Great entry in this contest. There are lots of very good pieces and it will be tough to vote. Your poem reminds me so much of how I would feel if I ever lost the wonderful love my own husband and I share. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Great entry in this contest. There are lots of very good pieces and it will be tough to vote. Your poem reminds me so much of how I would feel if I ever lost the wonderful love my own husband and I share. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Sue, it is nice to get receive positive feedback and reviews, and I thank you for your comments and those lovely stars.
Warmest Regard
Marijke
Comment from AnnaLinda
fionageorge,
Your poem, "My Love - My Life" Is very well written! I liked the way you started your poem and ended your poem with "If I never see you again"
I like the style of your writing in this one. All of your thoughts are very sincere and well stated. This is a part of your poem that I especially liked: "When events in our lives Could have ripped us apart We pulled through together For you loved with your heart"
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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fionageorge,
Your poem, "My Love - My Life" Is very well written! I liked the way you started your poem and ended your poem with "If I never see you again"
I like the style of your writing in this one. All of your thoughts are very sincere and well stated. This is a part of your poem that I especially liked: "When events in our lives Could have ripped us apart We pulled through together For you loved with your heart"
SweetLinda
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Sweet Linda, and it is true, too many people give up when difficulties or disagreements occur.
Thanks also for your kind review and lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
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It was my pleasure!
Comment from Soulester
Your poem and precious photo combine to make a lovely presentation. What a beautiful gift this must be for your husband, who sounds like he is one of the best. You did an excellent job with flow, rhyme, and touching message. Mary
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Your poem and precious photo combine to make a lovely presentation. What a beautiful gift this must be for your husband, who sounds like he is one of the best. You did an excellent job with flow, rhyme, and touching message. Mary
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Mary for your kind review and lovely stars.
I am a lucky lady.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from WRITER1
This is a wonderful piece. This tells the true story of how two people who love and live a life together. Good entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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This is a wonderful piece. This tells the true story of how two people who love and live a life together. Good entry for the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much. I an a lucky girl!
Appreciate your kind comments and generous rating.
Have a great day
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Begin Again
Marijke
I can feel the love ooze from your words and can only imagine how devastated you would be if you lost your best friend...as I would feel the same. I guess we are lucky to have the gift for how ever long God chooses and we should cherish it each and every day until it goes away. Loved it!
Carol
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Marijke
I can feel the love ooze from your words and can only imagine how devastated you would be if you lost your best friend...as I would feel the same. I guess we are lucky to have the gift for how ever long God chooses and we should cherish it each and every day until it goes away. Loved it!
Carol
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Carol (Mel's Big Sister) for your warm words and those generous stars. I am a lucky girl!
Have a great day
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a very touching tribute to your life with your "best friend." This verse speaks volumes: "When events in our lives / Could have ripped us apart / We pulled through together / For you loved with your heart." Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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This is a very touching tribute to your life with your "best friend." This verse speaks volumes: "When events in our lives / Could have ripped us apart / We pulled through together / For you loved with your heart." Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Jeanie, yes, that is my favourite verse, and reflects how often people give up when working together is more difficult but usually a better outcome.
Thanks for the lovely stars
Have a great day
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from melyuki
HI Marijke this is just the loveliest poem written about your wonderful partner in life, your best friend, your world. Simply written easy to comprehend, and flows as beautifully as the love between you both. great rhythm and rhyme and a perfect start with an even better ending. Love the pic, it is you and your partner isn't it ? True romance.. just loved it Marijke. more smiles and hugs from Mel
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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HI Marijke this is just the loveliest poem written about your wonderful partner in life, your best friend, your world. Simply written easy to comprehend, and flows as beautifully as the love between you both. great rhythm and rhyme and a perfect start with an even better ending. Love the pic, it is you and your partner isn't it ? True romance.. just loved it Marijke. more smiles and hugs from Mel
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Mel. Yes, the truth is out, that is us.
I enjoyed writing this, and am pleased it has been well received.
Warmest Regards and Hugs
Marijke
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I can see the love pouring out of both the pic and the poem, it could only be wonderfully appreciated by all. cheers to you Marijke and hugs from Mel
Comment from Suzie B
Well said my friend, a loving living dedication to a man who sounds truly wonderful.
it is so important to tell them how we feel as often as we can.
This is another stunning entry in a contest packed with talent. Yours is right up there.
best of luck in the vote
Suzie
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Well said my friend, a loving living dedication to a man who sounds truly wonderful.
it is so important to tell them how we feel as often as we can.
This is another stunning entry in a contest packed with talent. Yours is right up there.
best of luck in the vote
Suzie
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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Thank you Suziem, I won't hold my breath, but this is a tribute to my wonderful husband.
I appreciate your kind comments and lovely row of stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke