Diaphanous Dustings
Snowflakes- Please read notes22 total reviews
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Helvi,
There are some truly beautiful entries in this contest and yours is most definitely one of them. What a lovely and apt description of snowflakes. They really are marvelous little things. Those words, "diaphanous dusting" are like icing on a delicious septolet cake! :-) All the best to you, Helvi. Cheers, Whizpurr ^-^
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Hi Helvi,
There are some truly beautiful entries in this contest and yours is most definitely one of them. What a lovely and apt description of snowflakes. They really are marvelous little things. Those words, "diaphanous dusting" are like icing on a delicious septolet cake! :-) All the best to you, Helvi. Cheers, Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from lerkun
I really like the 'art' Helvi.. the poem has a hard task in meeting up with it as it's not nearly as expressive 'design aside' the poem beneath feels restricted to form.
my thoughts
b well
lerk
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I really like the 'art' Helvi.. the poem has a hard task in meeting up with it as it's not nearly as expressive 'design aside' the poem beneath feels restricted to form.
my thoughts
b well
lerk
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2009
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Hi Lerk, The ballerina was only a visual for the septolet in this case. It doesn't sound like you like either poem though. I feel as though I did a good job on both,but I respect your thoughts on the matter. Your a Great Poet so I value your opinion very much. I'm disappointed, but I'm glad you stopped by to review. Thanks my friend, Helvi :o)
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That's not true Helvi.. just I thought the Ballerina art poem beautiful and the septolet so constrained unlike the twirling swirling beauty you created and I couldn't rate on that for the contest ;-D hope you understand. Thankyou for the compliments and I didn't mean to make you sad ... b well... lerk
Hi Lerk,
I hope it didn't seem as if I were mad when I replied to your first review. I didn't feel that way at all!
I feel so honored when you stop by to review. You have always inspired me to reach out beyond my limits.
Though I was a bit saddened by your review, it was just because I wanted to "Knock you socks off!".
I think you're a wonderful reviewer (plus friend) and feel so lucky to have you in my corner.
I am so GLAD you liked the "Ballerina". Those words made my heart smile. The next time I put two works ( art and poem) I'll make sure I present more of a double whammy effect.
I hope you'll always be around to help me grow.
Love You,
Helvi :o)
I forgot to send you the nost important thing of all in my reply
A BIG HUG!!! :o)
Helvi
Comment from sgalletti
As always, I am reading all of these posts for the septolet contest before voting. This was an excellent entry, using two stanzas that connected together and only 14 words to provide an image. You accomplished this somewhat challenging - and, definitely fun - form very well. Loved the alliteration in the second stanza especially - "diaphanous dusting decorates.." I remember the first 'snow' when I lived on the East Coast and in the Northwest. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
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As always, I am reading all of these posts for the septolet contest before voting. This was an excellent entry, using two stanzas that connected together and only 14 words to provide an image. You accomplished this somewhat challenging - and, definitely fun - form very well. Loved the alliteration in the second stanza especially - "diaphanous dusting decorates.." I remember the first 'snow' when I lived on the East Coast and in the Northwest. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from ladyscarlet
As soon as I seen the "Poetry Artwork" I said "OOOH! I LOVE THESE!"
This is really cute. I get an image of the nutcracker for some reason. And the sugarplum song plays in my head.
Awesome work! I don't think I could ever make a ballerina that way!
God Bless,
~LadyScarlet
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As soon as I seen the "Poetry Artwork" I said "OOOH! I LOVE THESE!"
This is really cute. I get an image of the nutcracker for some reason. And the sugarplum song plays in my head.
Awesome work! I don't think I could ever make a ballerina that way!
God Bless,
~LadyScarlet
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from AnnaLinda
Helvi2,
I enjoyed reading your poem, "Diaphanous Dustings" The art work that you created is absolutely stunning! Your septolet poem dances off the page into the heart of its reader with wonderful thoughts that create beautiful images!
I did have to go look up the word "diaphanous" It might help to put it in your notes for those of us who are not familiar with that word:)
You have a poem that takes ones breath away!
SweetLinda
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Helvi2,
I enjoyed reading your poem, "Diaphanous Dustings" The art work that you created is absolutely stunning! Your septolet poem dances off the page into the heart of its reader with wonderful thoughts that create beautiful images!
I did have to go look up the word "diaphanous" It might help to put it in your notes for those of us who are not familiar with that word:)
You have a poem that takes ones breath away!
SweetLinda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I wish I could write shape poems like you can. They are so beautiful. Great alliteration of words beginning wtih "dentals." Superb work.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2009
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I wish I could write shape poems like you can. They are so beautiful. Great alliteration of words beginning wtih "dentals." Superb work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2009
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Bless Your Heart Alvin, Thank you so much. I know of all the types of poetry I do "Shape poetry" is your favorite. I added "Snow Ballerina" as a visual to my Essence poem because I thought it was a perfect fit for the topic of my poem. I am honored you like the combination of the art and the poetry in this poem. Thank you for the generous rating of six for this poem. Happy can not express the way I feel. HUGE HUG, Nancy
Comment from Pili Pubul
Admire so much your artistic talent Helvi. This is simply delightful, love the ethereal images you managed to create.
Thank you for sharing !
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Admire so much your artistic talent Helvi. This is simply delightful, love the ethereal images you managed to create.
Thank you for sharing !
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is beautiful your words work well with the beautiful artwork to enhance them well done and good luck in the contest regards Fuller
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This is beautiful your words work well with the beautiful artwork to enhance them well done and good luck in the contest regards Fuller
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from Begin Again
Helvi
Your diaphanous dusting sounds so beautiful
but they can melt as far as I am concerned
Winter is to cold...beautiful to look at
as your poem so aptly tells us...but still cold
Smiles, Carol
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Helvi
Your diaphanous dusting sounds so beautiful
but they can melt as far as I am concerned
Winter is to cold...beautiful to look at
as your poem so aptly tells us...but still cold
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009
Comment from samuelbrody
Hello... My. My. Well done for your first outing in this poetic form. Your talent is extraordinary. Both in its complexity and technicality. Overall, it's a beautiful seasonal poem that takes the breath away, even as the cold wind of winter can do. I like this very much. Thank you. sb
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Hello... My. My. Well done for your first outing in this poetic form. Your talent is extraordinary. Both in its complexity and technicality. Overall, it's a beautiful seasonal poem that takes the breath away, even as the cold wind of winter can do. I like this very much. Thank you. sb
Comment Written 20-Oct-2009