Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Graceheart
Absolutely amazing poem!!! You have pretty much summed up self righteous belivers and the Obama librals perfectly! We have all found ourselves in this Christian chest pounding mode, only to have to look into a mirror and see the retched creature before us! Wonderfully described and displayed here! Superb Jewell!!!
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Absolutely amazing poem!!! You have pretty much summed up self righteous belivers and the Obama librals perfectly! We have all found ourselves in this Christian chest pounding mode, only to have to look into a mirror and see the retched creature before us! Wonderfully described and displayed here! Superb Jewell!!!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
An excellent poem that shows the important of not being critical of others. You handle well the rhyming couplets. Because of the stacccato nature of some lines (e.g. the antepenultimate line), the rhyming couplets do not seem lilting. In that same line, you have the heart of the message for all the self-righteous--"Haughtiness is hatred." Excellent work.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009
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An excellent poem that shows the important of not being critical of others. You handle well the rhyming couplets. Because of the stacccato nature of some lines (e.g. the antepenultimate line), the rhyming couplets do not seem lilting. In that same line, you have the heart of the message for all the self-righteous--"Haughtiness is hatred." Excellent work.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009
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Thanks Alvin. Glad you enjoyed it.
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I had to do it and now will need your definition!
antepenultimate
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It's in more extensive dictionaries. It means "next to next to last." Often one can google a word that is not in a usual dictionary and find that word's meaning.
Comment from DeboraDyess
The proud self-righteous army kicks the wounded down, >> great line. I'm afraid this is how many people view the church. We have to rethink how we go to and tell (not what we tell, but how).
Love the last line, also. Well done on the poem. Very thought provoking. Blessings and thank you for this, Deb
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009
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The proud self-righteous army kicks the wounded down, >> great line. I'm afraid this is how many people view the church. We have to rethink how we go to and tell (not what we tell, but how).
Love the last line, also. Well done on the poem. Very thought provoking. Blessings and thank you for this, Deb
Comment Written 03-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009
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Thanks Deb.
Sad to say that line was from my own experience in the body of Christ. Divorce is an ugly sin and not to be forgiven apparently. (NOT)
Comment from jeslaf
Goodness, Jewell, this was one glorious commentary, and on one of my pet-peeve subjects, no less. I am wowed by your words, especially in the ending verse, with your final question and reference to both Old and New Testaments. Wow indeed. :)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Goodness, Jewell, this was one glorious commentary, and on one of my pet-peeve subjects, no less. I am wowed by your words, especially in the ending verse, with your final question and reference to both Old and New Testaments. Wow indeed. :)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much! Glad the word is out!
Comment from bkrighter
You use some good images in your elaboration on Jesus' admonition. I think you have the makings of something real good here.
In view of what you wrote, I want to phrase any suggestions in the most positive light possible. While I think that poem is good overall, there are a couple places where words are used very awkwardly.
"one sows of sifted oats" is one example and "Envisions of one's failure" is another. Should it just be 'visions'? Or do you intend it to be 'in visions'? I think that what you have is a good poem that could use another round of editing. There's good stuff there and I hope you will give it a little more time.
Steve
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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You use some good images in your elaboration on Jesus' admonition. I think you have the makings of something real good here.
In view of what you wrote, I want to phrase any suggestions in the most positive light possible. While I think that poem is good overall, there are a couple places where words are used very awkwardly.
"one sows of sifted oats" is one example and "Envisions of one's failure" is another. Should it just be 'visions'? Or do you intend it to be 'in visions'? I think that what you have is a good poem that could use another round of editing. There's good stuff there and I hope you will give it a little more time.
Steve
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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thanks.
Comment from Lyrical_CD
Powerful write on judgement and you do well with backing it up with scripture which I appreciate, but I asked for only one chapter of reference. This might be a good idea for Biblically Inspired contest though. I think you've done a good job here...Well Done.
Cory
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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Powerful write on judgement and you do well with backing it up with scripture which I appreciate, but I asked for only one chapter of reference. This might be a good idea for Biblically Inspired contest though. I think you've done a good job here...Well Done.
Cory
Comment Written 01-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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Hmmm, interesting. I don't recall it saying only one chapter reference. I started with the one at the bottom in Mathew.
Comment from BellaSpirit
Hi Jewell,
Judging others has always been one of the harshest enemies we have. You have written a great reminder to us all and in such fine form. Your art choice is fitting because Jesus is on the cross; accused and judged by ignorance and blinding self-righteousness.
I did find a few little things that maybe you could look at. I hope I am not telling you wrong but I think there should be a semicolon in this line...
Thy works are now removing splinters from one's eyes(;)
Blinded by the beam in ours, our mind is hypnotized.
And in your 4th verse...life line should be lifeline.
Also, in your 2nd verse, there are two lines that do not begin with caps. and all of your other lines have caps. including the ones that are compound sentences.
These are just technical things and by no means take away from the quality of your message.
As I said, I certainly hope I am not telling you wrong. If I am, I am truly sorry. Please double-check my thoughts on this. These are just suggestions offered to help and since I am not positive about my concerns and mostly because I think your poem is outstanding regardless of a few little typos, I would not deduct stars.
Blessings,
BellaSpirit
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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Hi Jewell,
Judging others has always been one of the harshest enemies we have. You have written a great reminder to us all and in such fine form. Your art choice is fitting because Jesus is on the cross; accused and judged by ignorance and blinding self-righteousness.
I did find a few little things that maybe you could look at. I hope I am not telling you wrong but I think there should be a semicolon in this line...
Thy works are now removing splinters from one's eyes(;)
Blinded by the beam in ours, our mind is hypnotized.
And in your 4th verse...life line should be lifeline.
Also, in your 2nd verse, there are two lines that do not begin with caps. and all of your other lines have caps. including the ones that are compound sentences.
These are just technical things and by no means take away from the quality of your message.
As I said, I certainly hope I am not telling you wrong. If I am, I am truly sorry. Please double-check my thoughts on this. These are just suggestions offered to help and since I am not positive about my concerns and mostly because I think your poem is outstanding regardless of a few little typos, I would not deduct stars.
Blessings,
BellaSpirit
Comment Written 01-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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Hi friend. If you read it carefully, many of those lines are complete sentences and I've capitolized the beginning of sentences only. Thank you for your comments and help.
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You're very welcome. Have a great day!
BellaSpirit
Comment from skye
This is such a powerful poem about Jesus message and our path in life. You have so many wonderful lines here.. all thought provoking and inspiring.
Your words are well chosen, fit the format and the style.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2009
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This is such a powerful poem about Jesus message and our path in life. You have so many wonderful lines here.. all thought provoking and inspiring.
Your words are well chosen, fit the format and the style.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2009
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Thank you for your wonderful comments skye. This speaks to me as much as I wanted it to speak to others. Thanks for the well wishes.
Comment from Kingsland
you have written some very worthy thoughts that are there for self inspection. for we all have are critical side. but when someone is down and out a helping shoulder is what it's all about. your poem should be read by everyone as it just may open some minds and thoughts to a better positive way of being... John
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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you have written some very worthy thoughts that are there for self inspection. for we all have are critical side. but when someone is down and out a helping shoulder is what it's all about. your poem should be read by everyone as it just may open some minds and thoughts to a better positive way of being... John
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Hi John! Thanks my friend. I surely appreciate this kind review. Love is the only thing to reach others, not the beating down of spirits or crushing hearts. I'm on a mission...:) Glad you liked this too.
Comment from filmoreodragon
I like it. I am very deserving of harsh judgment, yet I resent it when I am judged. I so appreciate healing love and tolerance, and do my best not to be judgmental myself. I like the way you point out how love is directly related to tolerance. Good one.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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I like it. I am very deserving of harsh judgment, yet I resent it when I am judged. I so appreciate healing love and tolerance, and do my best not to be judgmental myself. I like the way you point out how love is directly related to tolerance. Good one.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Thank you~ we are all deserving of harsh judgement but mercy covers it. Thank GOD. bless you!
