Tales to Terrify Tots
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Comment from theodore valantin
i loved this story because it had a lot of detail and the speech was very good.
please keep writing like this, it will inspire others to do the same,
anonymous
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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i loved this story because it had a lot of detail and the speech was very good.
please keep writing like this, it will inspire others to do the same,
anonymous
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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Gosh, thanks. This was from a long time ago, and yes, I'm still writing
Comment from Skyangel02
This is a great lesson to all parents to NOT put their children through the torture of piano lessons. LOL
I hope the terrified tots will never need to play chop sticks again.
reply by the author on 08-May-2012
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This is a great lesson to all parents to NOT put their children through the torture of piano lessons. LOL
I hope the terrified tots will never need to play chop sticks again.
Comment Written 08-May-2012
reply by the author on 08-May-2012
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I always regretted my musical talents were limitted to the harmonica, but I'm not sure I could hack all those scale practices. Thanks for the review
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, what a cute little story. I bet your kiddies loved your stories, and I bet you were a terrific Bogey Man. You would have got such a perverse kick out of making them scream. I'm not sure about you, snod. LOL!
Fun read! Kids will love it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2010
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Ah, what a cute little story. I bet your kiddies loved your stories, and I bet you were a terrific Bogey Man. You would have got such a perverse kick out of making them scream. I'm not sure about you, snod. LOL!
Fun read! Kids will love it.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2010
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I'm not sure about me either. Thanks for the review
Comment from medisec
Great boogey-man story, but hopefully the children that read this someday will not be frightened! It read as a horror story, so hopefully the kids will be older when they read it ... LOL. I found it interesting how you changed font when the bogeyman and the little girl were together, and then to regular font for the rest. Took me a minute to get that, but now I know what you were doing. Great story.
Couple of nits:
Auntie
axe, then
medisec
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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Great boogey-man story, but hopefully the children that read this someday will not be frightened! It read as a horror story, so hopefully the kids will be older when they read it ... LOL. I found it interesting how you changed font when the bogeyman and the little girl were together, and then to regular font for the rest. Took me a minute to get that, but now I know what you were doing. Great story.
Couple of nits:
Auntie
axe, then
medisec
Comment Written 20-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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Thanks. Both Aunty and Auntie are acceptable. I'll check out the other spag.
Glad you enjoyed it
Comment from a1940sFan
What a delightful addition to the Bogey Man series.
You must turn into a child yourself from time to time in order to get the language so age-perfect.
The hand-underneath-the-sweatshirt trick was perfect! The Bogey Man is having such a good time. I can hear him giggling in the wardrobe.
I'm off to buy a sweatshirt for the read this weekend!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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What a delightful addition to the Bogey Man series.
You must turn into a child yourself from time to time in order to get the language so age-perfect.
The hand-underneath-the-sweatshirt trick was perfect! The Bogey Man is having such a good time. I can hear him giggling in the wardrobe.
I'm off to buy a sweatshirt for the read this weekend!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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I actually did that trick to my kids when they little. It only works once, though.
Thanks for your kind words
Comment from thorney
Hi again snodlander. And another excellent episode of Annabelle and the Bogey Man. I'm really a fan of this pair.
I've got a couple of things I noticed this time:
... they weren’t prepared for the grisly sight that they beheld. - a surperferlous 'that' - not needed.
... dripping with congealed blood - 'congealing blood' - congealed blood would not drip.
And, this passage:
He awoke to hear their piano playing in the dead of the night. He crept downstairs to investigate the noise. They found him there the next morning, in his pyjamas, strangled to death - Hmm! How does anyone know he heard the piano playing? He was dead and told no-one! A bit padantic, but ...
Anyway brilliant story, and even with the little things above, I would have given it a six if I could.
Regards Pete.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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Hi again snodlander. And another excellent episode of Annabelle and the Bogey Man. I'm really a fan of this pair.
I've got a couple of things I noticed this time:
... they weren’t prepared for the grisly sight that they beheld. - a surperferlous 'that' - not needed.
... dripping with congealed blood - 'congealing blood' - congealed blood would not drip.
And, this passage:
He awoke to hear their piano playing in the dead of the night. He crept downstairs to investigate the noise. They found him there the next morning, in his pyjamas, strangled to death - Hmm! How does anyone know he heard the piano playing? He was dead and told no-one! A bit padantic, but ...
Anyway brilliant story, and even with the little things above, I would have given it a six if I could.
Regards Pete.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2007
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Thank you. I'm chalking that up as a moral six. Yes, I thought about the congealed/congealing thing. I might have to revisit that. And of course, no-one would know that little whatsisname had heard the piano, but very few of these ghost stories are internally consistant. Perhaps the Bogey Man has inside knowledge.
Thanks for your review