How This Critter Crits
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Micro-Critter and the Eavesdropper"GROWTH? ADULATION? HURRY -- CHOOSE!
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Comment from happykat4
Jay thank you for your insight into "crits". I find the information helpful to a new writer. This "sponge" not only finds what you say helpful, but also interesting. When a person writes on a subject that usually is very boring and dull, and one I find difficult to keep awake through, he loses his reader. Sir, you have "hooked" me. I am reading each chapter and taking bits and pieces from them. I do hope to get published someday and I believe your work will help me accomplish it. Thank you.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Jay thank you for your insight into "crits". I find the information helpful to a new writer. This "sponge" not only finds what you say helpful, but also interesting. When a person writes on a subject that usually is very boring and dull, and one I find difficult to keep awake through, he loses his reader. Sir, you have "hooked" me. I am reading each chapter and taking bits and pieces from them. I do hope to get published someday and I believe your work will help me accomplish it. Thank you.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I am so grateful, Happykat4. It means so much to me to know that something coming out of this old brain will be helpful to someone else. I'm also grateful you are spending your 6's on the likes of me.
Comment from cbat
I am searching backward through your writing.
This one gave me more to think about, much was worded in words I loved and need to look up.
I have taken some language classes online and you remind me of things I need to remember.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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I am searching backward through your writing.
This one gave me more to think about, much was worded in words I loved and need to look up.
I have taken some language classes online and you remind me of things I need to remember.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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I'm so happy to see you that enthralled with the series, cbat. You honored me so much by bumping up the "Illusion Crashers" clear up near the top of page one. This will mean more people will have a chance to read it, since it was way down off of page one until you came along. Though I thanked you on your personal message, I want to publicly thank you here as well!
Comment from Bill Schott
Really!! So much information and useful ideas about understanding the readers needs, the plain sense of it when we consider why some stories, notated their length, are stuck with through to the end. The reader lassoed early; being the voyeur into characters lives that seem real. Sorry it took do long to get to this. I see tel more have been posted. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Really!! So much information and useful ideas about understanding the readers needs, the plain sense of it when we consider why some stories, notated their length, are stuck with through to the end. The reader lassoed early; being the voyeur into characters lives that seem real. Sorry it took do long to get to this. I see tel more have been posted. Great stuff.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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It's always encouraging, Bill to find people like something well enough to hang in there to the end for a lousy 2 cents. And then give a 6 star rating.
Comment from padumachitta
Hey Jay.
I am gleaning so much good info grom these! Well done for getting it down.
My fav line of this one is:
Drama! That's what the reader wants. And, he'll settle for nothing less.
Even ole Maeve Binchy gives us drama, maybe not car chases. But, it is all about the reader being able to live a different life than the one they are in...at least most novel readers. I have met a few people who only read non fiction...go figure.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Hey Jay.
I am gleaning so much good info grom these! Well done for getting it down.
My fav line of this one is:
Drama! That's what the reader wants. And, he'll settle for nothing less.
Even ole Maeve Binchy gives us drama, maybe not car chases. But, it is all about the reader being able to live a different life than the one they are in...at least most novel readers. I have met a few people who only read non fiction...go figure.
padumachitta
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thanks again, Padumachitta, for reading this. I didn't expect you to go back and play catch up. But I appreciate your interest. Blessings...
Jay
Comment from Green Lake Girl
I love eavesdropping, spying, lurking and just being nosy. Reading allows you to do that, penalty free. In fact, (and again, for some reason, I am my most weird when reviewing your posts) I am nosy enough to ask about your profile picture. Reminds me of (a younger) Clint Eastwood. Is this a current pic of YOU, Jay?
Descriptions vs. people. Always fodder for conversation. I am a person that LOVES description. Loved all the Michener books. Couldn't get enough of how various parts of the earth were formed. Strange, because I don't write tons of descriptions in my stories. My muse just doesn't go there. But, you're correct--bring in the people. Let them interact and be pissy. Or angry. Or horny.
This post was my favorite of your Crit series. I hope to never bog you down with snow and bunny rabbits.
Thanks for sharing your critting thoughts, Jay.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I love eavesdropping, spying, lurking and just being nosy. Reading allows you to do that, penalty free. In fact, (and again, for some reason, I am my most weird when reviewing your posts) I am nosy enough to ask about your profile picture. Reminds me of (a younger) Clint Eastwood. Is this a current pic of YOU, Jay?
Descriptions vs. people. Always fodder for conversation. I am a person that LOVES description. Loved all the Michener books. Couldn't get enough of how various parts of the earth were formed. Strange, because I don't write tons of descriptions in my stories. My muse just doesn't go there. But, you're correct--bring in the people. Let them interact and be pissy. Or angry. Or horny.
This post was my favorite of your Crit series. I hope to never bog you down with snow and bunny rabbits.
Thanks for sharing your critting thoughts, Jay.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Ha! No, Marietta, I am as old as, or older than Clint Eastwood. I use the same picture here as on my Twitter account, where my handle is YoungerJaySquires. Thank you for continuing on with this series. I'm glad it resonates with you.
Comment from Adri7enne
I enjoyed the read, Jay. I guess you're saying a story will lose its flavor unless characters and dialogues are introduced rather quickly. I agree. A writer has a very short intro in which to spur my interest. I click on next rather quickly. I am not a patient reader.
You made your point, Jay. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I enjoyed the read, Jay. I guess you're saying a story will lose its flavor unless characters and dialogues are introduced rather quickly. I agree. A writer has a very short intro in which to spur my interest. I click on next rather quickly. I am not a patient reader.
You made your point, Jay. Well done.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thanks, Adrienne. I'm glad you found it worthwhile. Of course it is more helpful to a writer/critter in the beginning of his journey.
Comment from krprice
Delete unnecessary 'that's'.
Read over for putting commas in the right places in a series.
In the paragraph beginning with Oh. . . and. . . Consider deleing some 'and's' in the series and replacing them with commas.
Beware of semi-colons. Overuse in the paragraph beginning with But, you're a. . .
Excellent essay.
Karlene
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Delete unnecessary 'that's'.
Read over for putting commas in the right places in a series.
In the paragraph beginning with Oh. . . and. . . Consider deleing some 'and's' in the series and replacing them with commas.
Beware of semi-colons. Overuse in the paragraph beginning with But, you're a. . .
Excellent essay.
Karlene
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thank you, Karlene, for reading this and for the catches.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Jay. This is another great chapter, I am enjoying this education mate. I thought I was to old to learn, but I have had several writers tell me how much my reviewing has improved of late and I think it is because of your very informative lessons Sir. Thank you, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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G'day Jay. This is another great chapter, I am enjoying this education mate. I thought I was to old to learn, but I have had several writers tell me how much my reviewing has improved of late and I think it is because of your very informative lessons Sir. Thank you, cheers Fez
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thanks, Fez. You know how to puff up a writer's head!
Comment from Delahay
I'm sorry, I will never begin to reach your level of critting. My eyes began to cross shortly after George shot poor befuddled Lenny. I think my attention span has shortened too much to plunge to the depth you are diving to. I may have to stick with poetry since it is short enough for my attention to handle.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I'm sorry, I will never begin to reach your level of critting. My eyes began to cross shortly after George shot poor befuddled Lenny. I think my attention span has shortened too much to plunge to the depth you are diving to. I may have to stick with poetry since it is short enough for my attention to handle.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thanks, for reading it, though Delahay. I don't think it was a short attention span. It showed classic signs of boredom.
Comment from alf collier
Hi Jay. Again, you have shattered my illusions about what a reader wants!! (LOL)!!! No, not only am I finding out what to look for while critting, but I ma learning so much as a writer!! While this may not ne fascinating to others, I feel I am in a classroom (??? at least, one of my own making) and actually listening to words that make sense!!! Thank you, for you are giving me, in one lesson, insights on two very different levels!! alf
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Hi Jay. Again, you have shattered my illusions about what a reader wants!! (LOL)!!! No, not only am I finding out what to look for while critting, but I ma learning so much as a writer!! While this may not ne fascinating to others, I feel I am in a classroom (??? at least, one of my own making) and actually listening to words that make sense!!! Thank you, for you are giving me, in one lesson, insights on two very different levels!! alf
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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You are so kind, Alf! You have made my evening, and this being Sunday, my whole week! Thanks for your words of encouragement. I'm so happy the series is resonating with you.