Better To Not Go Out and Play
Refugees struggle to find a home. The children suffer.34 total reviews
Comment from Lana Marie
That is very true and most of us don't think about it regularly until we see something in front of us that reminds us how hard life can be for others. Thank you for sharing and reminding us to step out of our comfort zone for others.
Merry Christmas.
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That is very true and most of us don't think about it regularly until we see something in front of us that reminds us how hard life can be for others. Thank you for sharing and reminding us to step out of our comfort zone for others.
Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Barry,
This is a good rhyming poem that despite no specific meter, flows well. It is the sad story of life in war torn area. I hope to that they will find a place safe enough to be children again and play. The repetition enhances the emotion in the poem
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope this did well in the contest.
Merry Christmas.
Joan
P SP S Hope you and yours are doing well. I would like you to know that I just published a book titled, "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry. It is available on Amazon.com. There is a link to it at the end of my profile page. Also you can find in by searching Joan Pechter The Interloper on Amazon.com.
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Hi Barry,
This is a good rhyming poem that despite no specific meter, flows well. It is the sad story of life in war torn area. I hope to that they will find a place safe enough to be children again and play. The repetition enhances the emotion in the poem
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope this did well in the contest.
Merry Christmas.
Joan
P SP S Hope you and yours are doing well. I would like you to know that I just published a book titled, "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry. It is available on Amazon.com. There is a link to it at the end of my profile page. Also you can find in by searching Joan Pechter The Interloper on Amazon.com.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
Comment from DeboraDyess
This is beautiful, heartfelt and poignent. We take so much for granted. You capture the raw emotion of the plight of so many in our world. Thank you for the spotlight on this life-situaiton.
God bless, thanks again,
Deb
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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This is beautiful, heartfelt and poignent. We take so much for granted. You capture the raw emotion of the plight of so many in our world. Thank you for the spotlight on this life-situaiton.
God bless, thanks again,
Deb
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Deb,
Thanks so much for your six-star review. Very much appreciated. Yes, it is a sad situation for sure. Anything we do has to be a plus.
Take care and have a wonderful Christmas.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was such a sad and touching story told in poem. In so many situations it is the children that suffer the most when the adults have the issues.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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This was such a sad and touching story told in poem. In so many situations it is the children that suffer the most when the adults have the issues.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Monica,
Thanks for your kind review. Yes, it is the children that suffer so much. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jacob1395
It is hard to imagine the thought of having to leave your home and make a an unknown journey, hoping someone, somewhere will let you in. A well written piece, Barry, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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It is hard to imagine the thought of having to leave your home and make a an unknown journey, hoping someone, somewhere will let you in. A well written piece, Barry, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Jacob,
Thanks for your great review. Glad you enjoyed the read. The life of a refugee is not an easy one.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry.
Comment from June Sargent
This is the sad reality for children suffering all over the world as victims of senseless wars. Imagine the pain of losing so many family members and not having anyone around to care for or comfort them. Constantly on the move with hope slowly fading away. This is heartbreaking, but needed to be said.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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This is the sad reality for children suffering all over the world as victims of senseless wars. Imagine the pain of losing so many family members and not having anyone around to care for or comfort them. Constantly on the move with hope slowly fading away. This is heartbreaking, but needed to be said.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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June,
Thanks for your review. It is greatly appreciated. The refugee situation across the world is getting worse. Hopefully, some improvement will come about in 2025.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from cupa tea
out of the heat of the day
My feet became my shoes
good visual effect there. Takes the reader right into the world of imagination....
Well told story poem. Made me sad...
These situations seem to be more common today then any of us realize. One can only hope for a brighter tomorrow and peace across the world.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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out of the heat of the day
My feet became my shoes
good visual effect there. Takes the reader right into the world of imagination....
Well told story poem. Made me sad...
These situations seem to be more common today then any of us realize. One can only hope for a brighter tomorrow and peace across the world.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Thanks for your review. Sorry it made you sad, but it is unfortunately a very unhappy situation. Let's hope there will be a brighter future soon.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sanku
Yes this is the time when we should spare some thoughts for the homeless. I feel very bad when I see children trying earn a few pennies by selling trinkets..
The poem is well writte .All the best for the contest
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Yes this is the time when we should spare some thoughts for the homeless. I feel very bad when I see children trying earn a few pennies by selling trinkets..
The poem is well writte .All the best for the contest
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much for your review. Glad you thought it was well written.
A sad topic but one we cannot ignore.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I enjoyed both your poem and your author note. You explain vivid scenes and feelings within your free form and you use words that bring it to life. This is relatable. Best wishes, Alex
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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I enjoyed both your poem and your author note. You explain vivid scenes and feelings within your free form and you use words that bring it to life. This is relatable. Best wishes, Alex
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Alex,
Thanks for your great review. glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a very Merry Christmas.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You're welcome, Barry, and Merry Christmas! Alex
Comment from karenina
Stunning free verse...
You show us the horror of war and we dare not look away...
God bless the children!
"Walking became our day, but at night
out of the heat of the day
My feet became my shoes...'
That alone deserves six stars but it is the end of the week and have none to give.
Your powerful poem will stay with me tonight.
Not everyone has sugarplum dreams.
I wish the nightmare would stop!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Stunning free verse...
You show us the horror of war and we dare not look away...
God bless the children!
"Walking became our day, but at night
out of the heat of the day
My feet became my shoes...'
That alone deserves six stars but it is the end of the week and have none to give.
Your powerful poem will stay with me tonight.
Not everyone has sugarplum dreams.
I wish the nightmare would stop!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much for your great review. Your words are more important than the stars. Yes, I too wish the nightmare of the plight of the refugees would stop. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Cheers, Barry.
A toast to peace!
K
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Cheers- To Peace.