Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Jig is up"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
2 total reviews
Comment from Gayla putnam
I enjoyed your story and was absorbed in the plot. However, I do have a couple of suggestions. In dialogue, people use contractions. It helps the flow of the story and sounds more natural. I would also suggest you read the dialogue out loud. If it sounds stifled or boring, edit it. Dialogue needs to be concise and selective. Never let your character talk for too long. This is unnatural. So, those are a few suggestions that will help your story pop. gayla
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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I enjoyed your story and was absorbed in the plot. However, I do have a couple of suggestions. In dialogue, people use contractions. It helps the flow of the story and sounds more natural. I would also suggest you read the dialogue out loud. If it sounds stifled or boring, edit it. Dialogue needs to be concise and selective. Never let your character talk for too long. This is unnatural. So, those are a few suggestions that will help your story pop. gayla
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Oh my ! thank you so much for your feedback!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well, Terry is genuinely pissed off at the injustice of it all. Lots of missing persons that are definitely connected for the twists and turned in.Your story are fascinating! I would consider publishing if I was you. I also suggest a really good edit. As well not to do anything, charlie wrong, just a couple of words that can be switched.That's so minor that doesn't take away from the effect of this very powerful chapter! The secret videos and more secrets made! I hope jerry gets back into the fold.Instead of being pushed aside! Great work. Thank you so much for your submission. It's only one thing that can be done with this!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Well, Terry is genuinely pissed off at the injustice of it all. Lots of missing persons that are definitely connected for the twists and turned in.Your story are fascinating! I would consider publishing if I was you. I also suggest a really good edit. As well not to do anything, charlie wrong, just a couple of words that can be switched.That's so minor that doesn't take away from the effect of this very powerful chapter! The secret videos and more secrets made! I hope jerry gets back into the fold.Instead of being pushed aside! Great work. Thank you so much for your submission. It's only one thing that can be done with this!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the stars!!
