Good intentions
A poem11 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Exceptional, I really like the messages in your words,
"As Jesus said, Earth's in your hands," Earth was bestowed to us, and we must do our best to care and provide for her,
"The things I've done I grant to you,
if you believe your dreams come true." in pursuit of our dreams we will make some mistakes, but must keep trying, very well written****kahpot
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Exceptional, I really like the messages in your words,
"As Jesus said, Earth's in your hands," Earth was bestowed to us, and we must do our best to care and provide for her,
"The things I've done I grant to you,
if you believe your dreams come true." in pursuit of our dreams we will make some mistakes, but must keep trying, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
A lot of us on here use our words and thoughts to help people out, make them think. We try to lift up, not shut down. Pretty much all my stuff is humorous, or justice filled, or both. You take your poetry back to your church. The circle of life. Karen
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A lot of us on here use our words and thoughts to help people out, make them think. We try to lift up, not shut down. Pretty much all my stuff is humorous, or justice filled, or both. You take your poetry back to your church. The circle of life. Karen
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
Comment from judiverse
Your thoughts about faith moving mountains and turn the tides. Your last line says it all--If you believe, your dreams come true. The flow is excellent, and great use of AABB rhyme. In the last stanza, there is a problem with subject-verb agreement. If you by faith still understands. You needs a plural verb, understand. judi
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Your thoughts about faith moving mountains and turn the tides. Your last line says it all--If you believe, your dreams come true. The flow is excellent, and great use of AABB rhyme. In the last stanza, there is a problem with subject-verb agreement. If you by faith still understands. You needs a plural verb, understand. judi
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from Janet Foor
Thank you Roy for this excellent poem titled "Good Intentions ". We do procrastinate and try to do things our way but God always draws us back to Himself. At least that has been my experience.
Thank you Roy.
Blessings
Janet
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Thank you Roy for this excellent poem titled "Good Intentions ". We do procrastinate and try to do things our way but God always draws us back to Himself. At least that has been my experience.
Thank you Roy.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from Begin Again
I believe when things happen, and someone says it's a miracle, it is God giving the person the power to achieve it, like when someone lifts a car and saves a person or rescues someone. God provides us with the gift if we are willing to use it.
Smiles, Carol
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I believe when things happen, and someone says it's a miracle, it is God giving the person the power to achieve it, like when someone lifts a car and saves a person or rescues someone. God provides us with the gift if we are willing to use it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from SimianSavant
Roy, this is simple and easy to follow, without overly dense lines. Well done. I suggest tweaking a few little things to improve the readability:
1) Your title appears redundantly in the first line of the poem
2) but fails if one leaves all to fate. <= an imperfect rhyme with "faith"
3) As Jesus said, Earth's in your hands,
if you by faith still understands. <= "understands" should be "understand" logically, so you might consider changing the previous line to make it singular
4) there are some broken characters in your notes, probably from curved quotes
I have increased the toughness of my ratings lately and will be happy to bump this up to a five if you make an adjustment or two. Just let me know if you edit. Thanks for the read,
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Roy, this is simple and easy to follow, without overly dense lines. Well done. I suggest tweaking a few little things to improve the readability:
1) Your title appears redundantly in the first line of the poem
2) but fails if one leaves all to fate. <= an imperfect rhyme with "faith"
3) As Jesus said, Earth's in your hands,
if you by faith still understands. <= "understands" should be "understand" logically, so you might consider changing the previous line to make it singular
4) there are some broken characters in your notes, probably from curved quotes
I have increased the toughness of my ratings lately and will be happy to bump this up to a five if you make an adjustment or two. Just let me know if you edit. Thanks for the read,
🦍
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I'm not likely to edit, near rhymes are fine with me, my meter is fine, I'm happy with it. But thank you for your intentions, blessings Roy
Comment from Aussie
Well done Roy. I believe we can do what Jesus said we could. Many times I have prayed for help. Being physically useless, the answers come if we truly believe and have faith in His words. As we age, the spirit grows stronger and the body weak. I find the answers to problems come when I sit still and listen. K xx
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Well done Roy. I believe we can do what Jesus said we could. Many times I have prayed for help. Being physically useless, the answers come if we truly believe and have faith in His words. As we age, the spirit grows stronger and the body weak. I find the answers to problems come when I sit still and listen. K xx
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from Carol Clark2
You chose great verses to include, and your poem reflects them quite well. Yes, it's sad that we don't always exercise those gifts God gives us, by acting in faith. I'm sure we miss many opportunities to demonstrate God's power. Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem. Carol
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You chose great verses to include, and your poem reflects them quite well. Yes, it's sad that we don't always exercise those gifts God gives us, by acting in faith. I'm sure we miss many opportunities to demonstrate God's power. Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem. Carol
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from jim vecchio
Most of my pastors have taught that things like raising the dead and such have gone now that we have The Bible. But I believe if we truly needed to do a deed, and it was in God's will we did it, that we would have that power.
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Most of my pastors have taught that things like raising the dead and such have gone now that we have The Bible. But I believe if we truly needed to do a deed, and it was in God's will we did it, that we would have that power.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Roy,
Another beautiful poem you have created. The love of Christ shines bright in every line. I like the line, "and only He who sets men free." This is the honest truth. Only God can set us free. All we have to do is bring him into our hearts.
Great job as usual.
Cecilia
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Roy,
Another beautiful poem you have created. The love of Christ shines bright in every line. I like the line, "and only He who sets men free." This is the honest truth. Only God can set us free. All we have to do is bring him into our hearts.
Great job as usual.
Cecilia
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024