2024 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 77 "Silence Wraps My Room"*
6 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Love the use of words, cold, silence, bleakness all blends your words into loneliness and sadness, an excellent tanka, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Love the use of words, cold, silence, bleakness all blends your words into loneliness and sadness, an excellent tanka, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much, 😊
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
an eerie sound of bleakness (great description)
I enjoyed reading this poem and the entire presentation. Once again, you God given talent shines brightly. Thank you for sharing it with us. We're blessed that you do.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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an eerie sound of bleakness (great description)
I enjoyed reading this poem and the entire presentation. Once again, you God given talent shines brightly. Thank you for sharing it with us. We're blessed that you do.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review 😊
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I liked "with an eerie sound of bleakness" as it's usually not a sound that I can really hear but when the wind blows mournfully, I can imagine it as a "bleak" sound.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I liked "with an eerie sound of bleakness" as it's usually not a sound that I can really hear but when the wind blows mournfully, I can imagine it as a "bleak" sound.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Yes, Japanese poetry is imagistic and sometimes it uses personification.
Thank you very much, big sister. I hope you had a great weekend. I'm sick with stomack flu ... or dairy allergy.
Love
Marival ❤️
Comment from shelley kaye
i love those last three lines about the wind whispering one's name...
cool imagery of the silence wrapping your room - nice feeling...
an excellent tanka -
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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i love those last three lines about the wind whispering one's name...
cool imagery of the silence wrapping your room - nice feeling...
an excellent tanka -
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review 😊
Gypsy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The wind whispers my name with an eerie sound of bleakness. Why does it whisper your name so bleakly? Is this because you are saddened by the past election results? Or something else entirely is bothering you.
I love your choice of artwork it adds to the eerieness of the Tanka poem.
Well written and hits straight to the heart.
Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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The wind whispers my name with an eerie sound of bleakness. Why does it whisper your name so bleakly? Is this because you are saddened by the past election results? Or something else entirely is bothering you.
I love your choice of artwork it adds to the eerieness of the Tanka poem.
Well written and hits straight to the heart.
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I used personification. The bleakness comes from me .... or the reader.
Thank you very much for your excellent review 😊
Gypsy hugs
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I don't feel bleak so it must come from you and your feelings.
How are you doing, my friend?
I feel fine.
Jesse
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When I wrote the reader I meant in general, not you particularly. I'm glad you are happy, Jesse.
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Thanks.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Cold both inside and out but with one difference as the silence of the room contrasts hauntingly with the whispers outside. This is not a place I would care to be in! Thanks for sharing your excellent and decidedly creepy verse. Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Cold both inside and out but with one difference as the silence of the room contrasts hauntingly with the whispers outside. This is not a place I would care to be in! Thanks for sharing your excellent and decidedly creepy verse. Debbie
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review 😊
Gypsy