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The river

A poem

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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Roy.
Comparing the origin of a river from a small brook or stream into a full waterway to one's growth as a Christian is a unique metaphor. The river gains strength as it moves downstream, and our faith should gain strength as it moves ahead. That is how I read and interpret the poem
Robert

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2024

Comment from lyenochka
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Isn't it marvelous to have that joy of remembering the life of a new Christian, freshly baptized and delighting in the newness of life? Thanks for sharing about the joy of the river of life in Jesus!

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2024

Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are well said with an ending stanza that says so much.
The poem flows and connects well. The author choice of Ezekiel 47:1
compliments this poem well. I hope you are doing well Roy....Maria

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2024

Comment from gansach
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I love rivers~the mystery of them~where they come from, where they're going to, from small rills trickling gently, to powerful whitewater rushes, they are ever-changing, yet determined to reach the sea. A wonderful metaphor for our journey from baptism's gentle trickle to the all powerful sea of God. Very well done!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2024

Comment from kahpot
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We do sometimes get so overwhelmed and think we are all alone, though we must remember when life starts to shut us out that there is always help available, your last stanza says it all, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks Kim, for these marvellous comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Do you encourage your Bible students to write poems around their favorite Bible stories? Do you read them yours. You ought to have one in every church newsletter.
Have a good week. Good writing. karen

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks Karen, for these marvellous comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Carol Clark2
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Great metaphor for a relationship with God that grows as we get to know Him more. That requires spending time with Him. I like the Scripture passage you chose, and you have explained it well with your poem. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks Carol for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
reply by Carol Clark2 on 14-Nov-2024
    My pleasure to review your writing. Carol
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2024
    Bless you
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Roy,

You have produced another masterpiece. It seems like you put your pen to paper and produce such lovely poems. I don't think I have read one of your poems that I didn't like. It rhymes nicely and flows to completion as usual.

Great job.

Cecilia

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks Cecilia, for these marvellous comments and a super review, blessings Roy
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 13-Nov-2024
    You're welcome

    Cecilia
Comment from DonandVicki
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This poem speaks to me of becomming a Christian. The believing starts as a trickle and It builds drop by drop, into a stream then on to a flood. Some, regretfully, dry up and become a barren desert.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks D&V, , for these fantastic comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from bob cullen
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Sorry, this deserves a six, but like my bank account I'm lacking in this currency. I've not read this type of poem before, it's quite brilliant. I also noticed something else. You can almost form a different poem here by taking the first line out of each verse to create a new poem. Then the second lines, third lines and finally fourth lines. Was that your intention. You are incredibly talented Roy.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
    Thanks Bob, for these terrific comments and review, blessings Roy