2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
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Comment from Katiemae1977
Free blessings and smiles. That's all it takes even if a passerby can't offer anything else there are many things they can give that are free.
Very nice poem in 25 syllables
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Free blessings and smiles. That's all it takes even if a passerby can't offer anything else there are many things they can give that are free.
Very nice poem in 25 syllables
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
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Comment from shelley kaye
yup... sometimes the people who have nothing are more generous than people who have everything... it's quite sad...
a great short poem
however, you have more than 25 syllables. . .
con de scend ing peo ple 6
glance at home less man 5
cov ered with grime 4
and negligence- 4
the poor man off ers them 6
free bless ings and smiles 5
(30 syllables total)
suggestion. . .
pretentious people
glance at grimy homeless man
with disdain---
the poor man offers
free smiles and blessings
(25)
just a few thoughts :)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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yup... sometimes the people who have nothing are more generous than people who have everything... it's quite sad...
a great short poem
however, you have more than 25 syllables. . .
con de scend ing peo ple 6
glance at home less man 5
cov ered with grime 4
and negligence- 4
the poor man off ers them 6
free bless ings and smiles 5
(30 syllables total)
suggestion. . .
pretentious people
glance at grimy homeless man
with disdain---
the poor man offers
free smiles and blessings
(25)
just a few thoughts :)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I like it the way it is, I just changed it to free verse, but thank you for letting me know.
Thank you very much 😊
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Comment from RJ Heritage
I think the man smiles at them in genuine gesture of blessing, but perhaps, he realization that he might have once been like them.
Very effective words. I think you have more than 25 syllables, I am naturally drawn to counting when you put it as part of the criteria.
Well written
RJ
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I think the man smiles at them in genuine gesture of blessing, but perhaps, he realization that he might have once been like them.
Very effective words. I think you have more than 25 syllables, I am naturally drawn to counting when you put it as part of the criteria.
Well written
RJ
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Yes, it was more than 25, someone else brought it to my attention.
Thank you very much 😊
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You're welcome
RJ
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A powerful piece, Gypsy! Both visual and verse complement each other skilfully. We don't need material possessions or external qualities to have inner beauty. And smiling is everything. Thank you for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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A powerful piece, Gypsy! Both visual and verse complement each other skilfully. We don't need material possessions or external qualities to have inner beauty. And smiling is everything. Thank you for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
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Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Gypsy,
I like your social commentary poem. It's so relevant today. Some of the people who scoff at the homeless have themselves become homeless.
Nice photo and excellent empathy statement.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Gypsy,
I like your social commentary poem. It's so relevant today. Some of the people who scoff at the homeless have themselves become homeless.
Nice photo and excellent empathy statement.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
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Comment from lyenochka
Some of the homeless suffer from drug addiction so they can't offer any blessings. But some are in that situation because of things outside of their control, are able to be kind and share what little they have with other poor people.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Some of the homeless suffer from drug addiction so they can't offer any blessings. But some are in that situation because of things outside of their control, are able to be kind and share what little they have with other poor people.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Many homeless people have mental health issues, some self medicate and others are just addicts. It's a hard life. I have given money and they always say, God bless you. But I could be wrong.
Thank you very much, big sister ❤️ 😘 🙏 💙
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We have filled bags of goodies for homeless at church. There's one who comes to church. Hopefully he got shelter now. Our mayor even knows their stories. It's nice to live in a small town.
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When I lived in Sacramento, by myself, I went to an Episcopal Church. I really liked it. I was involved in community events, like weekly dinners, and classes. We had homeless programs. I know what you mean. I do miss it.
I am trying to walk longer distances to build up stamina. I hope to walk there on Sundays.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes, this does seem to be the norm, the homeless do seem to have a much happier outlook than most who look down on them, no matter how they got there they do have their own stories, very well written with a wonderful message for those who do look down, ****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Excellent, yes, this does seem to be the norm, the homeless do seem to have a much happier outlook than most who look down on them, no matter how they got there they do have their own stories, very well written with a wonderful message for those who do look down, ****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much 😊
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