His Silence
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ah I've found the missing chapter and, as I thought, Danielle is absolutely traumatised by this and, cleverly, you portray her physically shaking and in a state of utter shock as we imagine her back in the wardrobe as a child. An excellent chapter, describing the scene vividly in the most stark terms. Thank you, Jacob! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Ah I've found the missing chapter and, as I thought, Danielle is absolutely traumatised by this and, cleverly, you portray her physically shaking and in a state of utter shock as we imagine her back in the wardrobe as a child. An excellent chapter, describing the scene vividly in the most stark terms. Thank you, Jacob! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
lI was pretty sure it would be Noah. Suicide would only be the case if he has been put into a situation that made it impossible for him leave or continue to survive in that place. He was the only one who could tell them what they needed to know. He did tell Danielle to try to leave. He told he should never have come.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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lI was pretty sure it would be Noah. Suicide would only be the case if he has been put into a situation that made it impossible for him leave or continue to survive in that place. He was the only one who could tell them what they needed to know. He did tell Danielle to try to leave. He told he should never have come.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very short chapter again. I would think she would kneel beside Noah to be sure he is dead, to be sure she can't help him. She needs to be a little more proactive. She was counting on him for some answers.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Very short chapter again. I would think she would kneel beside Noah to be sure he is dead, to be sure she can't help him. She needs to be a little more proactive. She was counting on him for some answers.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Jacob,
What a wonderfully written chapter. You are a great writer and everyone of your stories I've read has been spot on. I always look forward to reading the next chapter. You are an awesome artist and I believe it shows in your writing.
I found what appears to be a typo, I will let you decide for yourself:
If Mary has they must've done{.} Should it be {it}. Sorry if i'm rambling.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Jacob,
What a wonderfully written chapter. You are a great writer and everyone of your stories I've read has been spot on. I always look forward to reading the next chapter. You are an awesome artist and I believe it shows in your writing.
I found what appears to be a typo, I will let you decide for yourself:
If Mary has they must've done{.} Should it be {it}. Sorry if i'm rambling.
Cecilia
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you Cecilia, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
You've created such an intense scene here! The emotions hit right away! I could really feel the shock in Grace's reaction. You've done a great job building tension. Especially with Grace's inner thoughts - which left me on edge. This feels like something big is going to happen - can't wait to see where it goes!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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You've created such an intense scene here! The emotions hit right away! I could really feel the shock in Grace's reaction. You've done a great job building tension. Especially with Grace's inner thoughts - which left me on edge. This feels like something big is going to happen - can't wait to see where it goes!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
I don't think this was suicide.... possibly, but a bruised and battered face doesn't happen if you are face up, even if you did jump. You've got me thinking now, Jacob. Who did this, and what might happen next? And will Oliver willingly call the police?
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I don't think this was suicide.... possibly, but a bruised and battered face doesn't happen if you are face up, even if you did jump. You've got me thinking now, Jacob. Who did this, and what might happen next? And will Oliver willingly call the police?
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Are you going to enter the "Write A Book In A Month" contest on the 1st?
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It is Noah, but if he's battered and bruised then it's not suicide. I am guessing Oliver will attempt to say it is. But he was murdered for talking to Danielle, wasn't he? None of this can be good.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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It is Noah, but if he's battered and bruised then it's not suicide. I am guessing Oliver will attempt to say it is. But he was murdered for talking to Danielle, wasn't he? None of this can be good.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Barbara, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.