Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Oh this was a creepy flash fiction, Carol and I for one am glad I wasn't invited.
You've really got your creepy going well leading up to Halloween. Well done,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks, Valda! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

A delight for a short fiction story and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a wonderful day and may God bless you with all good things.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks, Patricia! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

It's Halloween time and everyone is getting ready for a scare. I'm a lover of all things scary, not the blood and guts, and it appears, you like it too.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

i think this is a duplicate but oh Well, I will be glad to thank you again. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is a Halloween story but I haven't quite figured it out. Did Layla stay and take pictures, or did Abby. Was Layla captured by the mirror. Sorry, some time I overanalyze things.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

One could stop right after your subtitle:you weren't invited. Okay, sounds good, see ya! Haha. This is a great creepy vignette. You squeezed a whole bunch of tension into just 50 words. My only suggestion would be to swap out 'was' in the last line with an actual action verb...an opportunity to squeeze in a bit more creepy!
Julie
:-)

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I knew this story was going to be creepy when I looked at the picture and read the opening line that said, "Don't go." Abby was bold and went inside anyway. It didn't turn out good. The ending was mysterious AND creepy. A great Halloween story.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

OK, this one is a little creepy. 'Tis the season for Halloween stories. Layla's reflection in the mirror leaves the reader to wonder about the happenings in that house. Can't say she wasn't warned! Good job! Carol

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol

reply by Carol Clark2 on 26-Oct-2024

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Comment from royowen

Excellent

Heh heh, oh yes, don't go where we are not wanted it's a warning to all of us on this day, written in the annals of horror, we don't know what we are up against when it comes to creepy stories, heh heh, well done, Carol, good story, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024

Yes, when we get into the Halloween spirit things get mighty creepy and I think I would prefer to stay as far away as possible. thanks for the awesome review.
Smiles, Carol

reply by royowen on 26-Oct-2024

Well done