Jesperette's Sprites
Jesperette is upset, and is visited by sprites in her room2 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I loved your story of these two contrary sprites, doing what mischievous sprites might, like small siblings doing the the very things that they might do when in each other's company...squabble, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : (Disappearing) into thin air. Disappeared?
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I loved your story of these two contrary sprites, doing what mischievous sprites might, like small siblings doing the the very things that they might do when in each other's company...squabble, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : (Disappearing) into thin air. Disappeared?
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
Comment from Gayla putnam
I like the story's finale. It gives the reader pause, but of course, I know both the good and naughty sprite were real and sitting on her shoulders. In a few words, you captured the mood, and I could visualize and identify with your character and her emotional turmoil. I was slightly confused about Corvette and her parents' argument. Just a suggestion, but maybe a line or two as to why she is upset? It's an entertaining story. gayla
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I like the story's finale. It gives the reader pause, but of course, I know both the good and naughty sprite were real and sitting on her shoulders. In a few words, you captured the mood, and I could visualize and identify with your character and her emotional turmoil. I was slightly confused about Corvette and her parents' argument. Just a suggestion, but maybe a line or two as to why she is upset? It's an entertaining story. gayla
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024