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Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "One Final Showdown"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Neonewman
An apology from Jane Babies. We all know that's fake, lol. I love how you'll use text to keep her out of earshot. Also, the emoji and real-life finger. Brilliant, I was rolling over here. Unfortunately, the aggravation will go forward for you and Gretchen. Great chapter, Rachelle. The humor is impeccable.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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An apology from Jane Babies. We all know that's fake, lol. I love how you'll use text to keep her out of earshot. Also, the emoji and real-life finger. Brilliant, I was rolling over here. Unfortunately, the aggravation will go forward for you and Gretchen. Great chapter, Rachelle. The humor is impeccable.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate these words of ❤️ and encouragement. Xo
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My pleasure, Rachelle.
Comment from judiverse
If you call someone a "low-class Dixie Chick," that is pretty bad. I'm not a fan. The dialogue is great. It looks as if Jane will continue the ride with Rachelle and Gretchen, if she can behave herself the rest of the trip. She did kind of apologize to Gretchen. On the way to the FS convention at last! Hurrah! I would LOVE to be there. Rachelle must be getting tired. She's preventing Gretchen from accepting Jane's apology, I hope the drive doesn't take much longer. Or all three might not make it to the convention. This is really enjoyable. I miss Rebekah, though. judi
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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If you call someone a "low-class Dixie Chick," that is pretty bad. I'm not a fan. The dialogue is great. It looks as if Jane will continue the ride with Rachelle and Gretchen, if she can behave herself the rest of the trip. She did kind of apologize to Gretchen. On the way to the FS convention at last! Hurrah! I would LOVE to be there. Rachelle must be getting tired. She's preventing Gretchen from accepting Jane's apology, I hope the drive doesn't take much longer. Or all three might not make it to the convention. This is really enjoyable. I miss Rebekah, though. judi
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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No, we've officially arrived. And next week, we'll be co-mingling with the other members, so definitely stay tuned for THAT!! Thanks for the wonderful review. xoxo
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You bet I'll be anticipating the next chapter. The convention scene should be a great one. judi
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You bet I'll be anticipating the next chapter. The convention scene should be a great one. judi
Comment from Barry Penfold
Look out Atlantic City. I really like your conversations and how they form the basis of this chapter. I think I will go back and read previous chapters. Thanks for sharing and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Look out Atlantic City. I really like your conversations and how they form the basis of this chapter. I think I will go back and read previous chapters. Thanks for sharing and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Oh, yesss!! That would make me so very happy!! Thank you for this delightful review! xoxox
Comment from Debbie Pope
So glad my life is calming somewhat, and I could get back to your story. My favorite part is you and Gretchen back and forth to each other even though you are together in the car. And then you let Jane have it--holding nothing back. That is so you.
Hope this is not the end. I want to hear about the convention.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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So glad my life is calming somewhat, and I could get back to your story. My favorite part is you and Gretchen back and forth to each other even though you are together in the car. And then you let Jane have it--holding nothing back. That is so you.
Hope this is not the end. I want to hear about the convention.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Hiiii!! I've missed you!!
No, we are not done! Don't miss the convention shenanigans that happen next week with Jaaaaaaaane and some members! Laughter guaranteed!! xoxo
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RSVP I'll be there
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Can't wait!!! xoxox
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, Jane actually apologized for her behavior??!! I'm soooo glaaaad she did. '...uncertain obsequious smile...' great description with good consonance. A fun chapter, well written. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Wow, Jane actually apologized for her behavior??!! I'm soooo glaaaad she did. '...uncertain obsequious smile...' great description with good consonance. A fun chapter, well written. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thanks very much. Yes, even Jaaaaaane can be made to apologize...well, you know, if the alternative is being left with her luggage in a shopping outlet parking lot!
Thanks for the fun review. xoxo
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I missed a few chapters at the beginning, so I pictured Jane as being younger. Thanks for clearing that up.
Comment from Lori Mulligan
Another delightful chapter that passes by so quickly due to your well-paced writing. Gretchen is an angel for giving Jane another chance. As always, I look forward to next chapter!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Another delightful chapter that passes by so quickly due to your well-paced writing. Gretchen is an angel for giving Jane another chance. As always, I look forward to next chapter!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Yes, Gretchen is more woman than I will EVER be. She's the master of letting things roll off her back. I call shotgun for that trait in the next life...
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lol, me too!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Rachelle.
This was a little different for me. I have read the last two iterations of both you and Gretchen so I'm trying to put it all together. The one thing I remember most about all I've read is Jane. She is like a burr under a cowboys saddle. I haven't read work like this before on fan story where you are each giving your opinion of how The story goes. I found it entertaining and did quite a bit of laughing. Very well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Hello Rachelle.
This was a little different for me. I have read the last two iterations of both you and Gretchen so I'm trying to put it all together. The one thing I remember most about all I've read is Jane. She is like a burr under a cowboys saddle. I haven't read work like this before on fan story where you are each giving your opinion of how The story goes. I found it entertaining and did quite a bit of laughing. Very well done.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Yes, I think we paved the way with the multi-author novel. It's been very fun for us both, and our readers have been generous with their reviews.
That is a good description of Jane - like a burr beneath a cowboy's saddle.
The beginning chapters help make it all make more sense. Next week it becomes great fun for ALL the readers!! xoxox
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm so glad you set the record straight with Jane. Some people knowingly take advantage of others who are too timid to speak up.
I know the skyline of Atlantic City well, since I lived across the bridge in Philadelphia. I'm hoping you take the story into the convention. I'm curious how you would have it set up. I look forward to the next episode.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I'm so glad you set the record straight with Jane. Some people knowingly take advantage of others who are too timid to speak up.
I know the skyline of Atlantic City well, since I lived across the bridge in Philadelphia. I'm hoping you take the story into the convention. I'm curious how you would have it set up. I look forward to the next episode.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Ohhhh, are we EVER!!! Definitely tune in!
Thanks for understanding that some people just don't get into line with kindness! Xoxo
Comment from patcelaw
And I very much enjoyed reading it. It flows very well. When is read aloud. May you have a wonderful evening and may God bless you with all of your writing. Have a wonderful week. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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And I very much enjoyed reading it. It flows very well. When is read aloud. May you have a wonderful evening and may God bless you with all of your writing. Have a wonderful week. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from DonandVicki
I know that you stated that this is fiction but I just want to know if there is really such a thing as:"FanStory International Convention?" I would just love it if there were...Right? Any way I loved the story and The picture of the Amish intrigued my wife to read along.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I know that you stated that this is fiction but I just want to know if there is really such a thing as:"FanStory International Convention?" I would just love it if there were...Right? Any way I loved the story and The picture of the Amish intrigued my wife to read along.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Fiction even extends to the FS International Convention. Sorry! Glad you liked tge Amish pic and that your wife was intrigued to read along.