One Day at Five
Just a normal day.4 total reviews
Comment from ~Dovey
Hello, mystery author!
A hospital in Africa seems to be an exotic location for a five year old. I'm sure that you had many adventures and still have many stories to share. I like that you led up to that by describing the cats and kittens, which could be anywhere, and led us to the African sunset at the end. I wasn't sure on the word choice, violent, describing the sunset, at first I thought you were going for violet instead? It is an interesting adjective choice for the description of color, to be sure.
Thank you for sharing and I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Hello, mystery author!
A hospital in Africa seems to be an exotic location for a five year old. I'm sure that you had many adventures and still have many stories to share. I like that you led up to that by describing the cats and kittens, which could be anywhere, and led us to the African sunset at the end. I wasn't sure on the word choice, violent, describing the sunset, at first I thought you were going for violet instead? It is an interesting adjective choice for the description of color, to be sure.
Thank you for sharing and I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Kim
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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You know Kim, that word has been stuck in my mind. Heart wrenchingly painfully beautiful. On the Equator it stretches from one horizon to the other. Breathtaking. Africa is a violent place, my home, my heart torn from me when I left. Hiraeth. Irretrievably lost. I need a feeling word to describe the pain of watching the colors bleed together into utter darkness.
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You know Kim, that word has been stuck in my mind. Heart wrenchingly painfully beautiful. On the Equator it stretches from one horizon to the other. Breathtaking. Africa is a violent place, my home, my heart torn from me when I left. Hiraeth. Irretrievably lost. I need a feeling word to describe the pain of watching the colors bleed together into utter darkness.
Comment from lyenochka
A fabulous story and I hope you share it. I haven't started your brother's book yet because I am currently reading four simultaneously. Anyway, of course, I know who this is because of what I know about your childhood in Africa and your parents' medical missions. I have friends in a good organization called Medical Ambassadors. I think you would like this group.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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A fabulous story and I hope you share it. I haven't started your brother's book yet because I am currently reading four simultaneously. Anyway, of course, I know who this is because of what I know about your childhood in Africa and your parents' medical missions. I have friends in a good organization called Medical Ambassadors. I think you would like this group.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Dear one...YES, I would. Please share Medical Ambassadors info with me once the contest is over. Smiling...
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Dear one...YES, I would. Please share Medical Ambassadors info with me once the contest is over. Smiling...
Comment from papa55mike
A very interesting piece filled with rich characters. Childhood is what you make it. What a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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A very interesting piece filled with rich characters. Childhood is what you make it. What a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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It was fun to write.
Comment from Gayla putnam
As I read the story, I hoped it was the beginning of a Memoir. I liked the clues as to where you were living. A civet cat, I thought. What country is that? It flowed beautifully from awakening at dawn to the mosquitos ending the day. It had a peaceful rhythm that I enjoyed. Keep writing and good luck with the contest. gayla
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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As I read the story, I hoped it was the beginning of a Memoir. I liked the clues as to where you were living. A civet cat, I thought. What country is that? It flowed beautifully from awakening at dawn to the mosquitos ending the day. It had a peaceful rhythm that I enjoyed. Keep writing and good luck with the contest. gayla
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thanks, I am working on memoirs but sadly, they are not in order.