Will You
Lend a hand if you will5 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem that makes the reader take a second look. I'm trying to picture the King in a bombed tin. That is what a good haiku should do, make the poet think.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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A poem that makes the reader take a second look. I'm trying to picture the King in a bombed tin. That is what a good haiku should do, make the poet think.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Thank you, DonandVicki, much appreciated.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written 575 for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day and may God bless you and may your evening be blessed as well Patricia
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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This is a well written 575 for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day and may God bless you and may your evening be blessed as well Patricia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from jim vecchio
I liked it, but m not sure I understand it. However, it served the purpose of a haiku by causing my mind to visualize your words and ponder the feeling it represented.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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I liked it, but m not sure I understand it. However, it served the purpose of a haiku by causing my mind to visualize your words and ponder the feeling it represented.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Will you pity, or save him? Then a myriad of other questions may follow, but... Thank you, my friend, much appreciated.
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I would both pity and do my best to save him.
Comment from Begin Again
Did everyone abandon their king in order to save their own lives? Or was he left behind on purpose as the others escaped his rule? He's on his own now.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Did everyone abandon their king in order to save their own lives? Or was he left behind on purpose as the others escaped his rule? He's on his own now.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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That's the million-dollar question right there, Begin, perhaps it depends on which end of the piece the title question is placed. "Will you; pity and save him or not? Why, may lead us into a myriad of other questions too. Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure what the middle line means here and this may be due to local dialect. Kings can often be out of touch with public opinion, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Not sure what the middle line means here and this may be due to local dialect. Kings can often be out of touch with public opinion, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Left injured and alone in a bombed-out metal building, parching. Well, that's how I pictured it, laugh. Thanks for the kind wishes.
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That sounds terrifying x x x
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True, but...