Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice artwork and presentation, Katiemae.
-You did a good job with the sonnet and spring.
-A very good opening line with effective nature imagery.
-The next verse follows that well with Persephone
with her flowers and romance, too.
-A very good turn in the third verse as you
describe how you feel about spring.
-A good image with "bathed beneath the sun."
-A very good closing couplet.
-Good luck in the contest.
-One small thing: you have 9 syllables in line one.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review Pam. I'll check into that line you mentioned.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Dec-2024

You are very welcome, Katiemae.

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

Yes spring is a great time of year. I liked this poem because it does remind me of spring and was well rhymed. I hope it goes well in the competition. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much Barry for your lovely comments and review!

Comment from Colorado Owl

Excellent

Your lovely poem makes me dream of Spring, just as the dark, cold Winter arrives. My favorite phrase of your poem is "And rinsed in raindrops, pure as virgin tears". Absolutely beautiful! Thank you.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your well constructed Shakespearean Sonnet. The poem about spring brings out visions of fresh flowers, warm spring days and spring rain. Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much Donald for your lovely comments and review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

Comment from Todd Bourgeois

Excellent

Beautiful imagery. You captured everything spring and held tight to the sonnet rules. It's gentle and fair, just like spring buds. Well done. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much Todd for your lovely comments and review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I love how your poem brings the beauty of spring to life. Your choice of words like "blushing romance" and "bathed beneath the sun" make me feel like I'm right there and experiencing the season's magic. Beautiful work capturing the spirit of spring!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks so very much Michael for your lovely comments and review!
So glad you liked it!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

I like the Elizabethan vibe of this piece and the artwork that complements it so perfectly.

I found a couple spags:
**When 'ere I see a crocus
That first word should read "whene'er" because it's an abbreviation of whenever.

**around us breaths a
That third word should be "breathes".

**Your blushing romace
That third word needs an 'n': romance.

Good luck in the contest!! xo

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thanks so much Rachelle for reviewing and finding those typos.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Yes, a spring morning brings such wonder and joy to the eyes, ears and nose... After a long hard winter, seeing the blossoms poke from the grown and bring a splash of color is awesome. Good poem!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024

Thanks so very much Carol. Glad you liked it.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem in a classical rendition - the sonnet is an appropriate format for this reflection 'As life blooms 'round me fresh and satin spun.'

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024

Thanks so very much zanya. Your response is much appreciated!

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a written on for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. Your presentation is very good. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024

Thanks so much for your review and good luck wishes Patticia!