Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is a good chapter. If I may, I would advise increasing the font size. Also, take care with speech tags and not mixing two different characters POV or actions in the same paragraph.

notes:

Terry stared straight into {Warrens} eyes with that point.
-Warren's

{Warrens} quick mind was formulating a plan.
-Warren's

{Lets'} focus on that for now and go from there.

-Let's, for=Let us

"Sure, of course Anderson." Terry replied
-"Sure, of course Anderson," Terry replied

the group of missing persons?" Came the question
-the group of missing persons?" came the question

How would she handle this, and without causing any more riffs at BPD.
-How would she handle this, and without causing any more riffs at BPD?

"Better than I thought." Replied the satisfied Terry
-"Better than I thought," replied the satisfied Terry

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024

Again thank you for the review

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I thought this chapter had such tension. Enjoyed reading it! I loved how you captured the characters' personalities. I could especially feel Terry's resilience and wit. The dialogue between Terry and Warren is well written. I enjoyed the way Terry stood up to Hayes with her sharp humor! Looking forward to seeing where this leads!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024

Thank you Michael! I always look forward to your feedback>