Autumn Slumber
Loop Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Lobber
Melissa,
Congrats on winning Awards for the Twisted Loop, Loop, 5-7-5, Haiku, Uplifting Poetry, Nature 3-5-3 Haiku, Bible Acrostic, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not, and 24 Syllables.
What an amazing accomplishment. Bravo!
I hope you escaped the heavy rains.
- Jer
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Melissa,
Congrats on winning Awards for the Twisted Loop, Loop, 5-7-5, Haiku, Uplifting Poetry, Nature 3-5-3 Haiku, Bible Acrostic, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not, and 24 Syllables.
What an amazing accomplishment. Bravo!
I hope you escaped the heavy rains.
- Jer
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Hi Jer. Thanks so much my friend. The Twisted Loop was HARD and I hope to avoid that form for a long time.... I have just come in from the heavy rains. I've been out in them quite a bit this morning. Ugh! But, I do love a rainy afternoon and it looks I'm going to have one. We're having steak and baked potatoes for dinner, so that is something to look forward to. I appreciate the remuneration of the awards... it just boils down to ... I like to write poetry ;). Hugs, sweet Jer!
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa
This poem flows well and give a strong image of falling asleep in a safe comfortable bed on a cool rainy night. It shows how rain can be a calming lullaby.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
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Hi Melissa
This poem flows well and give a strong image of falling asleep in a safe comfortable bed on a cool rainy night. It shows how rain can be a calming lullaby.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
It's not easy to write a loop poem that doesn't seem forced. But your poem was a joy to read.
I think I could sleep soundly in that bed. But I'd wait for the fire to die down first. Wonderful autumn picture.
"enveloped in my cozy world
world blanketed in eider down
down drowsy trails of slumber's mist
mist muffles all the natural sounds" ... (I like the alliteration you've created with,
"down/down drowsy"
and
"mist/mist muffles"
Also, from
"tunes that weave a web of sleep
sleep snares me as it gently croons"
"sleep/ sleep snares"
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Hi Melissa,
It's not easy to write a loop poem that doesn't seem forced. But your poem was a joy to read.
I think I could sleep soundly in that bed. But I'd wait for the fire to die down first. Wonderful autumn picture.
"enveloped in my cozy world
world blanketed in eider down
down drowsy trails of slumber's mist
mist muffles all the natural sounds" ... (I like the alliteration you've created with,
"down/down drowsy"
and
"mist/mist muffles"
Also, from
"tunes that weave a web of sleep
sleep snares me as it gently croons"
"sleep/ sleep snares"
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Hello KB. Thank you so much!! I was in an autumn mood when I wrote it. There was a writer (Dean Kuch) ~ do you remember him? Well, he gave me a tip to turn off the lights and write by candlelight. That is what I did when I wrote Autumn Slumber. It really helps with the mood. So appreciate you KB! Hugs!
Melissa
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I do remember Dean very well, Melissa. He wrote some pretty spooky poems! A wonderful poet, especially around Halloween!
I like the idea of writing by candlelight. Perhaps I'll try it. Maybe that's what Edgar Allan Poe did, too, eh? I wouldn't be surprised.
xo
Kimbob
Comment from Paul McFarland
Good job with this one, Melissa. That bed looks comfortable. I have never tried a Loop Poem. I think it would be quite a challenge. You should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2024
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Good job with this one, Melissa. That bed looks comfortable. I have never tried a Loop Poem. I think it would be quite a challenge. You should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2024
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Hello Paul. Thanks for your lovely comments. The loop can be a challenge, but a fun one. It's similar to solving a word puzzle. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Autumn is my favorite season and for one of the reasons you stated in this contest entry. I love the cooler weather. I also like the rich autumn colors. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Autumn is my favorite season and for one of the reasons you stated in this contest entry. I love the cooler weather. I also like the rich autumn colors. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Barbara!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The sleepy mood before the silent winter is evident in this post Melissa and we see signs of autumn as it prepares us for the dormant season. Your loop made this season bearable, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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The sleepy mood before the silent winter is evident in this post Melissa and we see signs of autumn as it prepares us for the dormant season. Your loop made this season bearable, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Hey Dolly... thank you so much!
Melissa
Comment from Harry Craft
Awesome Poem! Anytime one can express oneself with a poem about sleep - it has got to be good. I enjoyed reading this so much that I slept in today lol! Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Awesome Poem! Anytime one can express oneself with a poem about sleep - it has got to be good. I enjoyed reading this so much that I slept in today lol! Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Hello Harry. Thanks so much.
Melissa
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You are very welcome Melissa!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ordinarily, I absolutely detest loop poems. They seem so contrived and annoying! But of course the exception would be the one penned by my exceptional poet-laureate friend, Melissa. This one is as beautiful to read as it is to listen to. REALLY fine job, Miss Talent! I enjoyed it from start to finish. xoxox
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Ordinarily, I absolutely detest loop poems. They seem so contrived and annoying! But of course the exception would be the one penned by my exceptional poet-laureate friend, Melissa. This one is as beautiful to read as it is to listen to. REALLY fine job, Miss Talent! I enjoyed it from start to finish. xoxox
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Oh, haha, you're so fun. I am so excited when I see I have a review from you, Rachelle. Always enjoyable. I am really delighted you like it. Thank you bunches! Hugs!!
Melissa :)
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Oh, you sweet talker, you!! xoxox
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed you loop poem. It talks of rain in Autumn and being in bed in a very cosy place listening to the rain falling. At wonderful to lulled to sleep by the sound of falling rain. I makes me long for an rainy night. This should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed you loop poem. It talks of rain in Autumn and being in bed in a very cosy place listening to the rain falling. At wonderful to lulled to sleep by the sound of falling rain. I makes me long for an rainy night. This should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hi there Beth! Thank you, sweet friend, for your wonderful comments and stars! So appreciated. I am looking forward to those rainy fall nights too. It won't be long now :). Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written loop and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I want to thank you for making your text and your background so easy to read. Read for people with vision problems like mine. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This is a very well written loop and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I want to thank you for making your text and your background so easy to read. Read for people with vision problems like mine. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hey Patricia. Thanks so much! I'm delighted you liked this Loop poem.
Melissa
