haiku (jauntily flaunting)
Nature's wardrobe26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Wendy,
Such a nice poem for Autumn!
I especially like the rhymes,
"jauntily flaunting"
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"spring brings "
You run through Autumn, a woman dressed in reds and yellows, pinks and gold. And gradually you allow the clothes to fall away from your body until there's just the swish of your bare feet in the leaves.
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the Haiku contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Hi Wendy,
Such a nice poem for Autumn!
I especially like the rhymes,
"jauntily flaunting"
and
"spring brings "
You run through Autumn, a woman dressed in reds and yellows, pinks and gold. And gradually you allow the clothes to fall away from your body until there's just the swish of your bare feet in the leaves.
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the Haiku contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Kimbob, for reviewing this one. Autumn is the season who undressed the trees, and then the trees had to await fresh green clothes. Thanks so much for making it twenty six reviews! I appreciate it.
Wendy
Comment from F. William Lester
"Jauntily flaunting seduction, then baring all -" Outstanding word choice and an apt description of the coming of spring. Very well done. Thanks for sharing it and have a wonderful week.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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"Jauntily flaunting seduction, then baring all -" Outstanding word choice and an apt description of the coming of spring. Very well done. Thanks for sharing it and have a wonderful week.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Frank, for this lovely review. I appreciate it a lot!
Wendy
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You're welcome, Wendy.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
That's a great description of the changing of seasons. The colours of reds, orange and gold seduce all before leaves fall. Well done with this haiku Wendy, I loved the cheeky descriptions.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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That's a great description of the changing of seasons. The colours of reds, orange and gold seduce all before leaves fall. Well done with this haiku Wendy, I loved the cheeky descriptions.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much Pearl, for this lovely review and six stars. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the haiku contest. I like the personification of nature.... it's seductive. I love the presentation. The fonts is a little hard to read. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Excellent entry for the haiku contest. I like the personification of nature.... it's seductive. I love the presentation. The fonts is a little hard to read. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much Gypsy. I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Wendy
Comment from karenina
No more sixes, but I do love this one! The personification works so well here... And spring does bring a change of clothes! (Something in green, perhaps?)
Smiles.
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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No more sixes, but I do love this one! The personification works so well here... And spring does bring a change of clothes! (Something in green, perhaps?)
Smiles.
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much. I am so glad you enjoyed this one. I think I might one day write a suite of haikus, one for each season.
Wendy
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Great idea!
I'll look forward to it!
Comment from Mintybee
Well, that was a spicy take on deciduous trees! I like the personification of spring changing wardrobes seasonally. Best wishes for the contest.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Well, that was a spicy take on deciduous trees! I like the personification of spring changing wardrobes seasonally. Best wishes for the contest.
Mintybee
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much Mintybee! I enjoyed your review.
Wendy
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a very well written haiku, meeting all the qualifications for one. Your beautiful picture of fall leaves complement your ideas, cleverly written.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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This is a very well written haiku, meeting all the qualifications for one. Your beautiful picture of fall leaves complement your ideas, cleverly written.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much Valda, I appreciate your positive comments!
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Jauntily Flaunting, has the proper formatting and brings the readers into the fall, through the debriding of leaves, and eventually back through to spring.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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This haiku, Jauntily Flaunting, has the proper formatting and brings the readers into the fall, through the debriding of leaves, and eventually back through to spring.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Bill. I appreciate your review.
Wendy
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Wendy,
I loved this haiku. So I guess the trees down in Australia lose their leaves as well as here in Alaska? Of course here we have such dreadfully long winters, and when spring finally arrives, around the first part of May, the leaves are such a blessing to behold. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Hello Wendy,
I loved this haiku. So I guess the trees down in Australia lose their leaves as well as here in Alaska? Of course here we have such dreadfully long winters, and when spring finally arrives, around the first part of May, the leaves are such a blessing to behold. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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In the colder regions of Australia, the deciduous trees are magnificent. The majority of trees where I live are evergreen. In fact we have three short seasons and a long hot summer. Just today we had a temp of 87, just a few days into Spring.
I am glad you enjoyed the Haiku. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
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Hello Wendy,
your weather sounds just like ours, only the summer and winter are opposite. Where we live now there are a lot of birch trees, so we get the fall colors, but then a long winter with bare trees, which I don't like to see. Back in Hoonah the forests were primarily spruce and hemlocks, both evergreens.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hmmm. I'm not sure I get this one. Until I read your Author's Notes, I was surmising that, in Australia, there must not be a winter. Spring must follow Fall where you live, I said to myself, because otherwise, Spring wouldn't see Fall's dress code, and Fall wouldn't see Spring's change of clothes. Or does the sartori signify that "winter" is the cutting word? Sorry to be dense. xoxoxo
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Hmmm. I'm not sure I get this one. Until I read your Author's Notes, I was surmising that, in Australia, there must not be a winter. Spring must follow Fall where you live, I said to myself, because otherwise, Spring wouldn't see Fall's dress code, and Fall wouldn't see Spring's change of clothes. Or does the sartori signify that "winter" is the cutting word? Sorry to be dense. xoxoxo
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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You are quite right. The absence of winter is disturbing for many. To be honest, where I live, winter is very short. Most of the trees aren't even deciduous. I needed more lines to put in her audacious baring of herself during winter. You are not dense at all. I might revisit it. Thank you for reviewing.
Wendy