They Linger Still
A time of sorrow for the Cherokee20 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, They Linger Still, has the proper formatting and speaks to the memory of the Cheroke, Creek, Seminole, Chickasaw, and Choctaw tribes who made that sad and deadly journey.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This haiku, They Linger Still, has the proper formatting and speaks to the memory of the Cheroke, Creek, Seminole, Chickasaw, and Choctaw tribes who made that sad and deadly journey.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thank you BIll, You are right it was just the Cheroke that suffered. All of the Native Americans did. Some one point the present generation is doing with the casanos.
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Thank you BIll, You are right it was just the Cheroke that suffered. All of the Native Americans did. Some one point the present generation is doing with the casanos.
Comment from Faith Williams
An eerie theme for a haiku, Beth. A sad and moving poem which works well in this short form.
One suggestion to consider: For the subject and verb to agree, I believe it should be 'wail' as in 'ghosts... wail'
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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An eerie theme for a haiku, Beth. A sad and moving poem which works well in this short form.
One suggestion to consider: For the subject and verb to agree, I believe it should be 'wail' as in 'ghosts... wail'
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the review and suggestions.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
Any time I see any Indian people I think about them being moved away from what they knew as home and sent to live on reservations. It's terrible how they were treated. But these days there are many reaping casino rewards to lesson the pain of their ancestors. But I have no idea how man and how much. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Any time I see any Indian people I think about them being moved away from what they knew as home and sent to live on reservations. It's terrible how they were treated. But these days there are many reaping casino rewards to lesson the pain of their ancestors. But I have no idea how man and how much. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thank you Ric. They tribes do have it better today thanks to the Casinos but those who came before them were mistreated by our government and they were often sold out by their own people.
Beth
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Yes, so true
Comment from estory
This is a bit of an unusual theme for haiku, but I thought this worked. The balance was perfect, and you had a strong central image of the banished Cherokees walking along the trail of tears to Oklahoma. "Ghosts of ancestors" makes the connection between those on the trail, and their descendants, and "Wails echoing in the wind" uses this natural image to make the pain and loss of the trail come alive. estory
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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This is a bit of an unusual theme for haiku, but I thought this worked. The balance was perfect, and you had a strong central image of the banished Cherokees walking along the trail of tears to Oklahoma. "Ghosts of ancestors" makes the connection between those on the trail, and their descendants, and "Wails echoing in the wind" uses this natural image to make the pain and loss of the trail come alive. estory
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the review. I appreciate the comments. The government has treated so many people unfairly.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Goodness, Beth, you certainly do know how to move a reader with your poetry! Ghosts and wails of the past come alive here.
Many years ago when I visited St. Augustine for the first time, I stood at the mass gravesite of 800 Timucua who died from small pox brought from the European settlers. I felt their presence, something I had never experienced before or since. I understand why you feel a connection each time you drive through the Trail of Tears.
Perfect image to accompany this poem. Good luck.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Goodness, Beth, you certainly do know how to move a reader with your poetry! Ghosts and wails of the past come alive here.
Many years ago when I visited St. Augustine for the first time, I stood at the mass gravesite of 800 Timucua who died from small pox brought from the European settlers. I felt their presence, something I had never experienced before or since. I understand why you feel a connection each time you drive through the Trail of Tears.
Perfect image to accompany this poem. Good luck.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you Pam. I think I alrealy say thank you for the six stars but I behind in answering reviewsl. THat is horrible about all the Native Americans died from an illness brought to them from another country. It is eerie to feel a presence of those who have long passed.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We had no respect for ancient civilisations and when people don't move with the times they are disrespected and forced out of their homes. It is a tragic fact of life Beth and your poem pays tribute to these people and how they suffered, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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We had no respect for ancient civilisations and when people don't move with the times they are disrespected and forced out of their homes. It is a tragic fact of life Beth and your poem pays tribute to these people and how they suffered, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. It is a shame the way these native people were treated. We were the ones invading their territory.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, those were tragic circumstances for them. Most unjust. I liked your Haiku drawing attention to their grief, and the alliteration was incorporated well. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Yes, those were tragic circumstances for them. Most unjust. I liked your Haiku drawing attention to their grief, and the alliteration was incorporated well. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you Wendy. It was very sad time for the Native American people. Many lost their life on that trail.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Being marched to a place where you have no history has got to be gut wrenching. They were moved like they didn't belong and nothing could stop the expanse of the United States. This was very moving. Gretchen
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Being marched to a place where you have no history has got to be gut wrenching. They were moved like they didn't belong and nothing could stop the expanse of the United States. This was very moving. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Gretchen. Yes, it was horrible times for these people.
Beth
Comment from royowen
Yes, I don't think we treated our Indigenous people any better than you guys did, now the majority of them have a mixed blending with us, but they still call First Nations "my people" though they are mostly of European descent. Well done Beth, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Yes, I don't think we treated our Indigenous people any better than you guys did, now the majority of them have a mixed blending with us, but they still call First Nations "my people" though they are mostly of European descent. Well done Beth, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Roy, Tt is interesting that you are so far away but a lot of the same things go on both sides of the world.
Beth
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Thank you, Roy, Tt is interesting that you are so far away but a lot of the same things go on both sides of the world.
Beth
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Well done
Comment from Jacob1395
I think horrific events that have happened in the past leave their mark and sometimes you can really feel what people must've gone through in the past when you visit historic places. A well written piece, Beth, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I think horrific events that have happened in the past leave their mark and sometimes you can really feel what people must've gone through in the past when you visit historic places. A well written piece, Beth, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jacob, for another really nice review.
Beth
