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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Sankey
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So sorry I missed this chapter. I get tricked sometimes. This was quite long I thought but no problems for me. Just one little tiny miss. but where (are)we going to eat

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    I'm sorry you had to read this when no money is attached. I do appreciate it though. HUGS!!!
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Nice post, Barb. Good job avoiding the illegal aliens. Noah and Sami are getting closer all the time, but you are famous for putting bumps in the road.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Daylily
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I have been away but I am glad I could read this while I still have a six. It is such a good story that stays interesting. I had no idea what Urban Krav Maga was so I googled it. At 80, I suspect I will not be signing up for any classes. lol

I did not find anything to suggest correcting. It is another very well-told chapter. :-)

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
    LOL I couldn't do it at 70 but Sami can at 25. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
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Barbara,
Have a nice time with your son! I hope you have nice weather there.
You have no grammatical errors, your chapter is well-writtem.
The relationship between Sami and Noah I think highlights this chapter. You develop your characters well.
Good luck with all your writing endeavors, Barbara!
Best wishes, Cindy

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. HUGS!!
Comment from Teri7
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Barbara, I admire you and your work so much. You know exactly what to say or what to put in when they are not speaking. I hope one day I can write as well as you! Another great chapter! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. HUGS!!!
Comment from Douglas Goff
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That was such a sweet ending to this chapter. Most guys have a soft side, even if they come off as hard butts.

You have built some Interesting and believable characters here, my friend.
D

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
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You make us feel like we are in the room with these characters as they talk to us in very down to earth tones, and we have this unresolved tension between Sami and Noah, we get that as they discuss the set up of Chen and Big T. Sami feels almost used and abused, but she keeps trying to stand up to it all. She also seems to be leaning a little more on Noah. But I still think there is too much small talk that you can cut out. All that talk of the puzzle and dinner seems too distracting from the real action. estory

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
    The puzzles will end up being important. As for the dinners, they are part of real life and the discussions taking place are important to the story. I smile at your review, because some reviewers want more details. I don't do a lot of details. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by estory on 28-Aug-2024
    Everybody has a different opinion. You have to sort through it and in the end, it's you who make the decisions. The editor will play his part as well. estory
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
    So true. So far, he's had no complaints. Only some grammar and punctuation errors. His editing team have left my story alone.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I can already see a white Peony in Noah's button hole. I'm sure their relationship is already sealed. At least the panic is over with so far with the illegal aliens going a different route. It's still very tense in the cabin, everyone's nerves a stretched a tight as they can without them busting something. Another good chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patcelaw
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Enjoyed very much listening to it. I am sorry I'm a little slow and getting around to reviewing your work, but I have been really sick with a very bad summer cold and I have to speak my reviews and I speak. It makes me cough so I'm slow with doing all that.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Yes, guys can sometimes be dummies when it comes to saying the right things at the right times. I mean, they have the right thoughts, they just aren't good at expressing them. :-) Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.