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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I can see why this mom wants this child to get exercise. Obesity is a huge problem with our today's children and Americans in general.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Barbara

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from RJ Heritage
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This is excellently illustrated and presented. It captures the moment , but more than that, it dies so in a way that is relatable, especially when you are dealing with children
Funny, relatable, and simply adorable.
RE

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, RJ. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and kind words.

    Gypsy 😊
reply by RJ Heritage on 26-Aug-2024
    My pleasure
    RJ
Comment from lyenochka
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He looks a little more scared than just exercising! It looks like he's running away with an old woman's dinner. Lol.
I guess your interpretation is also possible and happier!

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
    Haha ... it's ekphrastic ... I love the picture, the little fatty is so darn cute. Thank you very much, Big Sister

    MariVal 😊 ❤️
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Aww this is so sweet but I don't think he's ever going to get slim as long as he associates the one with the other. And he's going to be dipping into the rice all the way home. This reminds me of a dog training programme I was watching today where the only way the owners could get their overweight, 13 stone Newfoundland dog to exercise was by giving it a piece of lemon drizzle cake!! The trainer said that the cake was counterproductive and they might just as well leave the dog at home without exercise! Thank you for sharing your amusing senryu about the quirks of human nature. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Debbie

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from shelley kaye
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hehheh cute... and those chubby cheeks, legs, and feet...

a great and fun senryu with nice imagistic words and smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from BethShelby
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I love this funny picture. Your Senryu is good and amusing. I guess this ways mother and son both get exercise. All that rice won't too much to get the cubby son back in shape.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Beth

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from Jacob1395
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That did paint a funny image in my head as I was reading your piece. I could just imagine this boy clutching onto this bowl, not wanting to give it up. An entertaining piece, I really enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Jacob

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Well done with this amusing presentation Gypsy. I love the humour in your Senryu poem but also the life lesson for Mum - don't tell son to run if you can't catch him.
Nice Sunday morning smile with this one, Gypsy.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, valda

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from royowen
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Oh yes, she didn't mention that perhaps he needs to diet as well heh heh, what a great piece of artwork and amazing photo of a very pudgy little man clutching a generous helping of rice, well done Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Roy

    Gypsy 😊
reply by royowen on 24-Aug-2024
    Welcome
reply by royowen on 25-Aug-2024
    Most welcome