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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from RJ Heritage
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I can see the little girl, in my mind's eye, as she makes the snowman. Your imagery is quite strong in this one, and the tradition of this culture stands strong, with not much rephrasing. A simple and traditional image of culture.
RJ

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much,

    Gypsy 😊
reply by RJ Heritage on 24-Aug-2024
    My pleasure
    RJ
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A much more upbeat verse here! The snowman is radiating happiness while winter on the girl's hands is a wonderful way of describing that penetrating seasonal cold. I like the way your font colours seem to represent the snow on the berries on the leaves. Well done, Gypsy! Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Debbie. I try to write about a variety of things, I'm happy that you like it. I hope you are having a fabulous weekend.

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This poem and presentation caused me to smile. We're having well over 100 degrees temperatures here in this part of Texas. Yet, making a snowman seems great. LOL

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Barbara.

    Gypsy 😊
reply by barbara.wilkey on 24-Aug-2024
    I just tracked the package, and this is what it said, "Latest Update
    We could not access the delivery location to deliver your package at 10:44 am on August 20, 2024 in PASADENA, CA 91107. We will redeliver on the next delivery day. No action needed." I guess we'll see.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    That is weird. I don't have it. UPS is not good delivering packages. They ring once and leave. Maybe he rang when we were not home. Usually, (they have to) they leave a note on the door but other times don't. We didn't get a notice. I will let you know as soon as I get it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was so cute. It made me think about the fun of winter snow. We haven't seen snow in years here where I live. If we get three inches my area shuts down for a day or two. But being so close to the ocean and having the gulf stream close by, snow just blows around us not on us. This was a wholesome image. Enjoyed it. Gretchen

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    We don't have snow in Los Angeles, we have to go to the hills. It's fun if you don't live in it. Thank you very much, Gretchen. I hope you are having a fabulous weekend.

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, your poem is very sweet and is filled with vivid imagery. I could see the whole scene unfold before my very eyes. Of note:

with a carrot and scarf
to make a snowman--

(She was either going out to make a snow man or some type of cold carrot soup--lol. Just kidding.)

Well done. I love the photo, but let's not hurray winter. Xo. M


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, M. I hope you are having a fabulous weekend.

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from royowen
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I've made snowmen in Central Park some years ago with my grandsons, but I think we made a mess of it in general. Beautifully written again dear Gypsy, great post, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Roy

    Gypsy 😊
reply by royowen on 24-Aug-2024
    Well done
Comment from shelley kaye
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i've never made a snowman before...
seems like it should be fun...

very cute and happy gogyohka poem with nice cool imagery
thank you for sharing!!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, I hope you are having a fabulous weekend. We don't have snow in Los Angeles, we have to drive to the hills. Snow is fun once in a while.

    Gypsy 😊
Comment from lyenochka
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Brr. Just thinking of "winter on her hands" makes my hands feel cold. Actually, my hands are always cold so I shock my classmates at tai chi when we have to say thank-you to all our classmates after sparring with them. Lol.
Loved the poem and picture!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    lol winter hands are not fun. I heard tai chi is very good for your body and spirit.

    Thank you, big sister. I hope you have a fabulous weekend.

    love 😘

    MariVal