Don't Mess with Retirees
A older man takes a stroll back to his pond.29 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I got a laugh out of this piece of flash fiction! This was very fun and funny, and I'm glad I got the chance to read it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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I got a laugh out of this piece of flash fiction! This was very fun and funny, and I'm glad I got the chance to read it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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I'm so glad you like this. Thank you jessi/
Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
Ha Beth! This is wonderful.
The title could have let the reader travel anywhere,
The story was simple, concise, had a plot and certainly had a twist at the end,
Wonderfully written. This could be the contest winner!
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Ha Beth! This is wonderful.
The title could have let the reader travel anywhere,
The story was simple, concise, had a plot and certainly had a twist at the end,
Wonderfully written. This could be the contest winner!
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you John. I'm so glad you like my little story.
Beth
Comment from mermaids
This is great. Love how the elderly man is there to feed his gator. Your tale is humorous and you surprised me at the end. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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This is great. Love how the elderly man is there to feed his gator. Your tale is humorous and you surprised me at the end. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review. I glad you liked my little story.
Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! I love the introduction to this story. The title and opening statement tells us George is retired and is going for a leisurely walk down to the pond. The surprise ending is hilarious. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Haha! I love the introduction to this story. The title and opening statement tells us George is retired and is going for a leisurely walk down to the pond. The surprise ending is hilarious. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I glad you got a chuckle from this.
Beth
Comment from karenina
Whoops! That'd get them out in a hurry...and good old George would forget all about those apples...
But those girls would not forget the gator!
And that, little miss, is why one should never trespass and skinny dip!
Too funny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Whoops! That'd get them out in a hurry...and good old George would forget all about those apples...
But those girls would not forget the gator!
And that, little miss, is why one should never trespass and skinny dip!
Too funny!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you Karenina. I'm glad you liked my little flash.
Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I did not think you had a salacious bone in your body, and then you enter this eighty-word fiction. Wow. I would have loved to see the scene of the girls instead of a guy with a bucket.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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I did not think you had a salacious bone in your body, and then you enter this eighty-word fiction. Wow. I would have loved to see the scene of the girls instead of a guy with a bucket.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you I think. I'm not sure my lack of salacious bones is a compliment or an insult. LOL I'm not the wanting to get a look at the nude ladies. My character is. I can't control him.
Beth
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I don't do insults. Therefore, a compliment
Comment from Thesis
LOL, that was a great ending. I liked the story. It was well written with a great twist at the end. Good luck in the contest, I'm sure it will do well.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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LOL, that was a great ending. I liked the story. It was well written with a great twist at the end. Good luck in the contest, I'm sure it will do well.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the review. I'm glad you found this funny.
Comment from Ulla
Hehehe, that would get them out in a flash I would imagine. I loved your creative thought here, Beth. It just what a flash story is all bout. Good luck. Ulla xcx
Just one wee thing: takes a stroll
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Hehehe, that would get them out in a flash I would imagine. I loved your creative thought here, Beth. It just what a flash story is all bout. Good luck. Ulla xcx
Just one wee thing: takes a stroll
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you Ulla, I'm glad you liked my flash and got a laugh from it.
Beth
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has a very funny ending. I bet you those girls would want to get right out of there as soon as possible. I'm hopeful George was able to get some apples. He deserved him after that.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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This has a very funny ending. I bet you those girls would want to get right out of there as soon as possible. I'm hopeful George was able to get some apples. He deserved him after that.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Liz, I glad you liked the ending.
Beth
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***GRIN***
Comment from Ric Myworld
ROFL! I'll have to remember that line if I ever run across a bunch of girls skinny dipping. Actually, at this age, and my diminished vision, I either wouldn't see much, and honestly, wouldn't care anyway. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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ROFL! I'll have to remember that line if I ever run across a bunch of girls skinny dipping. Actually, at this age, and my diminished vision, I either wouldn't see much, and honestly, wouldn't care anyway. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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I'm glad you got a laugh. Thanks for the review.
Beth